Sir Leeds

Here are the word war results!!

We didn’t do so hot, but I know I needed a break after the intense NaNo effort. We’ll do better next time! We got this!!

And congrats to the awesome…[Read more]

Don’t forget to submit your points!

Go, Rillumen, Go! We got this, guys! Tonight’s the deadline, so get in those last few words and submit those word counts!

@pookiemonster Man, those donuts were good!! Thanks!!…[Read more]

GO Rillumen!  This time we’ll write! Or at least try, lol 🖊️

I have faith in you. But more importantly, I have motivational doughnuts! ヽ(ᵔᗜᵔ)ﾉ🍩 🍩 🍩 🍩…[Read more]

@sir-leeds I love your poem!

I do see what Story Ember meant now about the embellishments. You’re not flaunting a bunch of different poetry techniques in this poem (but you do use vivid language). Also, the poem’s character is a child, so there is power in the simplicity of the character’s voice. 🙂

I love the ending lines:

“And the lonely lamp…[Read more]

@sir-leeds @k-a-grey Thank you so so SO much for all the amazing feedback. 🙂 I’ll be sure to tag you all when I post the next edit!

@sir-leeds Would you post that poem about the children? I would love to read it! Also, I made an account with Submittable. 🙂 I didn’t know Footprints in the Sand when I wrote my poem, but I see the similarity that…[Read more]

I saw that no Rillumen members had responded yet so I thought I’d go ahead and tag y’all just in case anyone missed it.

I’ve spent moke time baking so far this week than writing.¯_(ツ)_/¯     I will definitely try to wring a couple of hundred words out of tonight though. Does anyone have a word goal for this week?…[Read more]

@emma-starr I think it’s lovely.   I think you have some great images in there, but you could, as @sir-leeds said, “embellish” it a bit.  For example, try not to use trite expressions.  We know that winter is grey and cold, now let us see it in a new way.  So instead of saying the tea is cold, you could say it has “lost its warmth, lost its sou…[Read more]

@emma-starr I love it!

However, like @sir-leeds said, Story Embers has a very particular style they like and I have my own style and you have yours.  *shrugs*  I’m not sure what to tell you. 😛

@anne_the_noob14 Thank you!!

@sir-leeds I appreciate your feedback! What I’m actually trying to convey is a process of healing over the course of a year. As the seasons go by (with similar themes in each), the girl becomes more and more reconciled. In that light, what changes to you think should happen? Maybe what’s happening in the last section…[Read more]

@graceabounds2129, cool prompt! Your calendar shows another prompt immediately three days after, but I thought we were doing this only every other week. I’m in for this first one.

Who else is…[Read more]

We need more people to help out! Come on and critique the story @graceabounds2129 wrote.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/18KxRINR2GZzW-dxt13ZhBRzAR6WiCDCmuM8XBul0XUk/edit?usp=sharing

“Illuminate the…[Read more]

(Oh hey, look who forgot to tag everybody)

@missfaeriekaiti
@happyholly_c
@corkybookworm
@quinn-ofallon
@kayla-joy
@nuetrobolt
@pookiemonster
@inkling-for-christ
@sir-leeds
@rolena-hatfield
@grace-tolkienista
@graceabounds2129
@wordsmith
@brie-donning
@cassidy
@bill-of-the-hill
@silverdragon
@therealameliahoch
@e_elaine_soup5
@emma-starr

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