I should rephrase that. I know you wanted to make some edits, and didn’t know if you had done what you wanted to do, or felt you needed to get it done (since yours is pretty good as is).
If no one is able to make up their mind on which story, pick jennythefaun’s. I’ve already had my turn. 🙂
You could even say it was…
A statement that promptly led
To a gold rush excursion
Of eager young wordsmiths mining
For a satisfying conclusion.
So tell me, are you pleased,
To see so much about cheese?
I love it! It’s so cute! In fact, it has inspired me to new levels of artistry…
It might sound cheesy
To call cheese holy
But it has holes, complainers! Please,
I think it’s easy
To mean it fully
When you say you eat holy cheese.
That was amazing!!! Well done. You have beautiful prose and foreshadowing. And you used my disappearing woman! 🙂
The only thing I would do is give Noss a little more initiative. For the most part, I felt like he was merely watching and commenting on the events, instead of actively trying to find the truth out.
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Hmm, now you’re the second person to say the same thing. Guess that means I need to go re-write that. 🙂
Oh dearie me, that’s a lot to fix. Great suggestion, though! I’ll see if I can alter the story to make that happen. Let’s just hope I can do all that in the word limit. I was already pushing it. I also just took…[Read more]
Good point! I didn’t really mean for the code to be “the one thing” that solved the case, just one of many facts. I changed the order of their conversation around a bit. See if that clarifies things. 🙂
Another thing I could do to make this work better is change the old line when Wayne showed Christian how to open the door. Instead of…[Read more]
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All this is excellent! I’m actually almost done with the first draft. Jenny, do you want me to post it now, or wait until your idea is further along so it doesn’t affect your thoughts?
Also, as a fair warning I’ve been shivering through writing this. It may be too dark to use, but it’s hard to tell from the writer’s…[Read more]
I honestly love these ideas!!! Jenny, don’t feel bad about taking the story if you want too. We could also both write it out and deside which one’s better afterwards. Up to you.
In terms of suspects, we need to have 3 suspects:
- The “obvious suspect” that both the detective and the sidekick soon veer away from.
Ooh! I LOVE mysteries!!! This is gonna be fun!
Anyone got a cool starting concept? Here are a few to get our minds working:
Woman vanishes into thin air, in full sight of a group of friends
Armed robber breaks in, injures a guy, but no one can figure out what he stole
Spy kid goes into foster care trying to solve a mystery
And so on. These…[Read more]
Unfortunately, I’ve gotten very little done on this story, so I don’t think we’ll be able to use my work. I didn’t realize that I had 3 days in a row of 12-hour days out of the house. If you have something, that would be excellent. Sorry for not being able to help like…[Read more]
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I could give it a try if no one else is willing to. If someone else wants to try, though, I’d give them the reins. I have no idea how busy I’ll be in the next few days (I could either have loads of free time, or absolutely none).
I’ll get writing anyway. Worst-case scenario it’s good practice. 🙂
This is a really cool one! Wow! I have pictures in my head right now! So, what are some ideas?
A few starting questions:
Should our ordinary thing be a literal thing (flower, toy, etc.) or something more abstract (family dinner, laughter, holding hands, etc.)?
What kind of drama should we use (war, emotional turmoil, etc.)?
What part should…[Read more]
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