Zachary Holbrook

Is there a fundamental difference between KP and Story Embers?

@daeus-lamb I can’t do it this week– I don’t have a specific problem I need help with yet. If you’d rather give the spot to someone who can use it immediately, that’s fine.

Sweet! I just wrote 1113 words!

Here are some more (all from the same series):

“You should have been more than a great man; you should have been a good man?”

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“What do you call it when you realize you’ve been an ******* your whole life?”

“A good start?”

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(on the question of why God allows evil):

She nodded. “So what’s the answer?”

“The answer’s simple for the mind,…[Read more]

@daeus-lamb

Aaaannnndddd I’ll take the first one. I’m working on developing four different novel ideas, so the tricky part will be picking one to focus on.

@katy-walker I’m halfway through The Dragon Prince. So far, the plot seems solid. I’ve noticed clear, defined plot beats– Bethia’s arrival, Robert’s arrival, Altaio deciding to go to the pool and make an attempt to un-curse himself. However, something huge is missing: Altaio’s emotions. This character could be fascinating. He’s in a dark place: a…[Read more]

I need to work on revision. Right now, my first drafts are top notch– but still first drafts. Ideas for revisions are coming, but very slowly, and when I try to intentionally brainstorm, I end up with a bunch of good ideas– for the wrong book. My brain keeps jumping in between two new novel concepts as well as the revision of my current draft.

@katy-walker I’m interested. I write mostly fantasy, so I can’t provide the different genre perspective you want, I’ll give feedback on the overall plot and, if I like it, I’ll go through it again with some suggestions for improving the narrative.

@kayla-skywriter One advantage of telling a story out loud as opposed to writing it is that you can use your whole body to tell your story, not just your words. Gestures and tone of voice are can convey emotions to the point where the storyteller plays an active role in the tale he’s telling– something Hoid does, although you’ll have to work a…[Read more]

@anne_the_noob14 It translates to ‘Good morning. I like Japanese’, which is a little bit outdated since I haven’t practiced my Japanese in months.

@anne_the_noob14

I love this story! One improvement that could be made is on the first page which leans pretty heavily on ‘telling’. If you wanted to keep this, establish in the first paragraph that Carlisle is recounting a story that she’s already lived through. Perhaps imply that she’s writing it for Zoe, which explains why she spends so much…[Read more]

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Resurrection in a Bottle

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@wordsmith I’ll read it. Can you share it with me as a Google Doc so I can put my comments directly on the document?