October 25, 2019 at 1:04 pm #99381
I noticed Jenna Terese offering her Beta Reader services and thought I’d do the same.
I’ll glad read and give feedback on stories in any genre. However, I believe I’ll be most helpful to writers of sci-fi/fantasy in third person limited POVs, as that’s what I’ve had the most practice writing myself.
One of my greatest strengths as a writer is my ability to write clear and engaging prose, so if you enlist me as a beta reader, expect lots of feedback on how to tighten your narrative, show instead of tell, and avoid common mistakes such as character filters.
おはいよう. 日本語は好きです .October 31, 2019 at 11:52 am #99722Buddy J.@wordsmith
Hola! I actually have a story that I believe needs exactly what you offer. I could put in the time… lots of time… to sift through it with my biased mind. But it would be REALLY helpful if I could get another skilled person to help me.
The story has a few problems I know I’ll need to resolve. For instance, there’s one part where I slip from limited to omniscient. If you have any ideas there, they’re welcome… but aside from that, I’d be looking for the clearest text… without losing the feel I’m working with in the prose.
How would you like to beta-read for me? It’s between 4 and 5K… in the setting of Western (cowboy hats) Fantasy. If you could go through it with a fine toothed comb, I’d much appreciate it.
-Wordsmith- Author of short stories, Reader of many books, Student in writing, and Lumenite!October 31, 2019 at 12:15 pm #99724
@wordsmith I’ll read it. Can you share it with me as a Google Doc so I can put my comments directly on the document?
おはいよう. 日本語は好きです .October 31, 2019 at 12:20 pm #99727Buddy J.@wordsmith
Has been sent. I sent it to your email: email@example.com
-Wordsmith- Author of short stories, Reader of many books, Student in writing, and Lumenite!November 9, 2019 at 11:25 am #100475Katy Walker@katy-walker
Hi! So, I have a 180 page novel that I would love someone to beta read, but everyone I’ve sent it have to tell me they’ve got too much on their plate already and can’t even read it, let alone give any feedback. It’s a fantasy genre, but I would love a different perspective, as everyone I sent it to writes fantasy. I can definitely use tightening in my narrative (and dialogue) and show vs. tell tips. BUT, if you don’t have time, and/or are not interested in reading/critiquing another genre, no problem. I’m taking a break from that novel and working on another one anyways. But I do want to get back to it at some point soon.
Please note this is my first novel I’ve ever finished a first draft, and I am pretty ignorant as to “correct” and official ways of doing things.
Marvel at His ProvidenceNovember 9, 2019 at 11:52 am #100476
@katy-walker I’m interested. I write mostly fantasy, so I can’t provide the different genre perspective you want, I’ll give feedback on the overall plot and, if I like it, I’ll go through it again with some suggestions for improving the narrative.
おはいよう. 日本語は好きです .November 9, 2019 at 12:34 pm #100478Michelle Rose@michelle
@toklaham-veruzia Hello I noticed you also beta read for people (which I need) I belive I already taged you on Jenna Terese beta reader post. Could you please beta read my book for me? It will take you less than 30 or 15 minutes to finish it.
It’s a full length chapter book for kids in 3rd and 4th grade. It is 5 chapters and 6k words and I would LOVE some feedback on:
– Do you think it’s publishable?
– Does it keep your interest?
– Who is the most relatable character?
– BONUS – If you have a younger sibling in grades 3 and 4 please read this to them (or have them read it) and give feedback.
Thank you so much guys!
Here is the doc:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1w9Tj5_RImpZl61iZAdlJ1uSYp5eRatp_1zkoRG-aoeM/edit?usp=sharingNovember 11, 2019 at 11:21 pm #100652Katy Walker@katy-walker
Thanks! I have a Google Doc I’m sending to all the beta readers, that way I have all the comments in one place. What email can I use to share it with you?
Marvel at His ProvidenceNovember 22, 2019 at 6:03 pm #101852
@katy-walker I’m halfway through The Dragon Prince. So far, the plot seems solid. I’ve noticed clear, defined plot beats– Bethia’s arrival, Robert’s arrival, Altaio deciding to go to the pool and make an attempt to un-curse himself. However, something huge is missing: Altaio’s emotions. This character could be fascinating. He’s in a dark place: abandoned by everyone he’s ever known, stripped of the princely authority that seems to have made up his very identity, cursed to transform into a murderous beast on a nightly basis. But… his emotional reactions to all these hardships he experiences are muted. Some ideas for bringing them to life:
-Focus on his relationship with his mother. Choose one memory that encapsulates all she represents to him, then have him dredge at some significant moment. Maybe she cared for him after he was mauled by a bear, and now every time he sees a bear prowling about the edges of Puliel Wood, the reality of her absence is driven home. How has the loss of his mother changed him?
-Have him at least be somewhat attracted to Bethia. He’s been living in complete solitude for years. When he finally sees another person, he’s going to be interested. Doubly so if it’s a beautiful young woman.
-Give him much, much stronger reactions to killing that little girl while in his dragon-form. Torment him. Tear him apart with guilt. When something goes his way, have the ghost of that girl haunt him, reminding him of the evil deeds that he has done and probably continues to do. Drive him to the brink of insanity, so that he will be willing to do anything to escape this curse for once and for all.
Are people in Altair’s world alternate versions of Earthlings? I’m asking this mainly because Bethia and Robert seem like almost exactly the same characters as Lady Katherine and Gilbert.
I will read the rest of the story. I probably should have already, but I got distracted by Brent Week’s Lightbringer series.
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