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Maya Joelle posted an update 5 years, 10 months ago
@toklaham-veruzia Hey! Just wanted to say hi. I joined SE a couple days ago and found your profile somehow (I’m used to a directory of all users, since that’s how it is on YDubs…). Maddie and I have been texting but I find it a little weird to always be saying things like “does Zachary like Story Embers?” (after seeing you in the background of…[Read more]
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duskflower replied to the topic The Lore of Yore– First Three Chapters in the forum Critiques 6 years, 6 months ago
Hi! I wasn’t able to fit all my thoughts into the comments so I’ll finish them here.
1) I really like Keylori. It’s interesting beginning with a character who is already in a position of command. Right now, it almost seems like it’s about to be stripped from her and she’s going to have to find her identity without it. If so, that would definitel…[Read more]
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I don’t know how you’re doing with beta reading ‘The Lore of Yore’, but I am integrating some of your comments into the second draft. I’m developing Keylori’s relationships with her top officers more– your comment about her not having much of a social life jived with my instincts because I know that people don’t really hold positions of power by…[Read more]
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Hi! I don’t think I ever received the extended version (or I lost it). So glad to hear my comments were helpful! I would love to see the changes you made in the second draft when it’s ready. Until then, I’m happy to wait so I can make fresh comments (instead of saying the same thing over and over again for a hundred pages). Looking forward to it! 🙂
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Huh, did I not reply to this? I meant to.
Well, Maddie just got your letter and told me that you messaged me on Story Embers. To answer your question: yes, I do like Story Embers. The staff members are all fantastic writers (especially Josiah deGraaf, who easily ranks among one of my favorite authors of all time. I got to beta read his novel……[Read more]
That’s awesome! I’ve actually yet to read any of Josiah’s work (despite the fact that I have a free copy of one or two of his stories *hides in a corner*) but I beta read for Daeus and his work is incredible too! The whole SE community/network is amazing.
Congratulations! When did you finish your novel? I’m still working on mine. What does the…[Read more]