duskflower

  • duskflower posted a new activity comment 2 months, 3 weeks ago

    Hi! I’m sorry for being so flaky on you. Is it still at a state where my feedback would be useful? The last two months have been an exhausting mess of school and health issues, but I’m on spring break now (and, as you can guess, my schedule is VERY empty) and would be happy to do some reading if that’s still what you need!

    • I’ve been chopping away at the second draft of ‘The Lore of Yore’. At about 60k words, the manuscript is about halfway done and overall a lot better than the original. I’ve joined an online writing group a few months ago that formed through SE, and they’ve given me a lot of helpful feedback. Overall, I think it would be most helpful if you read it…[Read more]

  • duskflower posted a new activity comment 5 months, 1 week ago

    Hi! I don’t think I ever received the extended version (or I lost it). So glad to hear my comments were helpful! I would love to see the changes you made in the second draft when it’s ready. Until then, I’m happy to wait so I can make fresh comments (instead of saying the same thing over and over again for a hundred pages). Looking forward to it! 🙂

  • @toklaham-veruzia

    Messaging a docs link would be perfect, if you feel like the story is already ready. Let me know if there’s anything in particular you want me to be focusing on – specificity would really help me know what to comment on!

  • Hi! I wasn’t able to fit all my thoughts into the comments so I’ll finish them here.

    1) I really like Keylori. It’s interesting beginning with a character who is already in a position of command. Right now, it almost seems like it’s about to be stripped from her and she’s going to have to find her identity without it. If so, that would definitel…[Read more]

    • I don’t know how you’re doing with beta reading ‘The Lore of Yore’, but I am integrating some of your comments into the second draft. I’m developing Keylori’s relationships with her top officers more– your comment about her not having much of a social life jived with my instincts because I know that people don’t really hold positions of power by…[Read more]

      • Hi! I don’t think I ever received the extended version (or I lost it). So glad to hear my comments were helpful! I would love to see the changes you made in the second draft when it’s ready. Until then, I’m happy to wait so I can make fresh comments (instead of saying the same thing over and over again for a hundred pages). Looking forward to it! 🙂

  • @camohunter19

    I agree with Naiya – it seems like lying comes out naturally under stress. I would say maybe he answers a simple question tentatively or accidentally with the wrong answer, or maybe he doesn’t say anything at all (or just stammers) and the others naturally assume that he saw God (or whatever his lie is), causing him to realize he…[Read more]

  • Hello, hello, my fellow adventurers (sleepy as we may be)!

    So, when I’m in the planning stage of a draft I have a bad habit of getting SO caught up in outlining and theme and fancy things like ~*~subtext~*~ within my novel that I forget to keep my skills sharp and practice actual prose.

    So here’s a game to fix that, and maybe wake us up a lit…[Read more]

  • I confess I’ve been dormant for…months, as school and life has been ganging up on me. But the ache for storytelling community always sets in and I’m grateful I have a place to go back to. *plops down bags*

     

    Here I am. It’s good to be back. I’ll put on the kettle. Does English Breakfast sound good to everyone?

  • This is an awesome idea! I’ve been busy all of October and I think I’ll try to squeeze in some time to recuperate and do something fun with this! I think I’ll try out the Paranormal Fairytale. I think I’ll experiment with a fairytale-type prose style with traditionally paranormal creatures. Maybe it’ll be like a George Macdonald tale set in modern…[Read more]

  • I feel like perfectionism is the enemy to good writing habits. I’m on a third draft point where I’m trying to make everything as *perfect* as possible and when life is hectic and the very act of carving out writing time is difficult it just cripples my flow. I feel like until I have more free time the very wanting to tell a good story is kee…[Read more]

  • I’m so excited that beta readers are being set up! I’m always in need of good beta readers and would be glad to do the same favor myself! Looking forward to the next post about being an excellent beta reader ^_^

  • duskflower replied to the topic War Winners! in the forum Announcements 1 year, 3 months ago

    That’s amazing! Great job, everyone!

     

    Edit: we have a guild emblem now? That’s fantastic! I love it, totally my aesthetic as a hiker/backpacker with a great fondness for purple. I’m so happy I was placed in Knaphollow ;D

  • Yeah, the story has to be very short and simple. I’d say one character can be developed, and any others can barely be described. I’m not sure if even dialogue is a good idea.

     

  • duskflower replied to the topic Greetings! in the forum Announcements 1 year, 4 months ago

    Welcome, new friends! We’re excited to have you join our merry little troupe of Knaplingers. 🙂 It’s an excellent time to join us, great things are afoot!

  • I’m so excited to see Knaphollow rise up and go to war! So proud of you guys and excited to see what we’ll accomplish together!

    I have a few ideas:

    @kari-karast

    I’m always down for a good animal POV, but the ending itself seems too predictable. Maybe, to twist it a bit, the animal doesn’t return home, but realizes that the world outside…[Read more]

  • Absolutely beautiful without being trite. The hope shines all the brighter for being tempered with sorrow. Well done, Anne, it was a delight to read!

  • Currently rewriting an argument scene that tears two characters apart and I’m trying to make sense of their pockets of anger, bitterness and resentment. Which, of course, means even more forays into their psyches and figuring out why they feel the way they do and how I can translate that into the argument. Sometimes things like this are far more…[Read more]

  • @daeus-lamb Nice to hear from someone on the other end of the process! That’s what I’m reminding myself!

    @maddiejay I’ll definitely check out that book! Thanks for the recommendation!

    @kb-writer I’m beginning to identify the theme in my story, too! It feels like squinting at a marble block until you can see the makings of a statue hidden inside,…[Read more]

  • @eden-anderson Though I’d love to hear from other Christian writers who have tried it, the way my faith is woven in is definitely in a very different way from other novels.

    As anthropomorphized as they are, they’re still animals and I agree that it’d be odd to have organized religion in an animal story (-sighs pointedly at Warrior Cats-) but…[Read more]

  • I’m on my third draft of my main novel project (the first draft being a super messy NaNoWriMo draft, the second draft just being a clean-up of the first draft and a small rewrite and this third draft being a large-scale rewrite and restructuring) and it’s..hard. I love getting to know my characters more and seeing things improve, but the…[Read more]

  • I love the ending because it shows the hobbits finally standing up for themselves and being different, in their own homeland. It’s the culmination of their arc! Of course, I’m biased because I adore the trilogy and don’t like it ending, so it’s VERY nice for me that it takes forever to end. I can take my time 🙂 My favorite anecdote, though, is…[Read more]

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