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Sam M replied to the topic A poem – Alone in the night of darkness in the forum Poets 5 years, 9 months ago
@eitan I love this poem. š I specifically like, “O my Lord, heal my heart, and let your love be in me.” Thank you for sharing this!
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Eitan started the topic A poem – Alone in the night of darkness in the forum Poets 5 years, 9 months ago
Hi everyone!
I haven’t been around for a long time… High school and stuff š It’s a poem I wrote today. It’s a rewriting of something I wrote earlier today, while and after a really hard time. I hope it will encourage, help, or just make you smile š
As always, I’m totally open to any kind of criticism, whether grammatical or artistic…[Read more]
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Gracie replied to the topic A poem – Your love and Your faithfulness in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
That was beautiful @eitan .
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Sam M replied to the topic A poem – Your love and Your faithfulness in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
Hi, Eitan. I’m sorry that you had a hard day.
I think the line should be “how lonely and miserable I became” instead of “what…”
I always love your poetry. I love how much you focus on God’s love and goodness. Thanks for posting this! This poem was relatable. š
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Anne of Lothlorien replied to the topic A poem – Your love is not imaginary in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
@eitan This was beautiful, thank you. I’m sorry you went through this time, but it’s beautiful that youĀ have come out the other side of this with hope in your heart and new strength in Jesus.
From a grammatical standpoint, I spotted one line… “There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver” should be “There is no cold and horror – I do not…[Read more]
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Eitan started the topic A poem – Your love and Your faithfulness in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
So, today was hard… But in the end, God gave me hope and rest. I’m even a little cheery as I write those lines š
This is the translation of the original Hebrew. I hope it’ll help, encourage or just make someone smile š Any critique, grammatical correction, or anything else is welcome.
Your love and Your faithfulness
You gave my heart…[Read more]
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Computer again…
I found this poem. (It has thee’s and thou’s) But has rymne and meter.
It is true.Approach, my soul, the mercyāseat
Where JESUS answers prayer;
There humbly fall before his feet,
For none can perish there.
Thy promise is my only plea,
With this I venture nigh;
Thou callest burdened souls to thee,
And such, O LORD, a…[Read more]-
(The poem without thee’s and thou’s)
Approach, my soul, the mercyāseat
Where JESUS answers prayer;
There humbly fall before his feet,
For none can perish there.
Your promise is my only plea,
With this I venture nigh;
You call burdened souls to You,
And such, O LORD, am I.
And such, O LORD, am I.Bowed down beneath a load of sin,
By Satan s…[Read more]
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Eitan replied to the topic A poem – Your love is not imaginary in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
@sam-m Thank you!!
Oh, just a typing mistake… Like, IĀ know how to write know š *embarrassed, but thankful*.
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Sam M replied to the topic A poem – Your love is not imaginary in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
Hi, Eitan! I really like your poem. I love the hope and truth that you pour into your writing.
Also, (because you’re really serious about grammar), I think you meant: I can know this for sure.
I look forward to reading anything else you post. š
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Hobbitchild replied to the topic What Age Are Your Main Characters? (Plus Free Book Giveaway!) in the forum Contemporary Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
It is funny and cool how ideas for books will just pop into you head. I just had that happen to me driving home from a shopping trip. Usually it starts with a thought related to whatever you are doing, then it sparks a fire of thought. Wow, did I just say that? Iām not the detailed/metaphor type. Thatās my sister.
Anyway, itās great…[Read more]
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Arindown replied to the topic What Age Are Your Main Characters? (Plus Free Book Giveaway!) in the forum Contemporary Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
I looked at your book. It sounds really cool.😄
I’m working on one book right now…I might be halfway done with the first draft, but I’m not sure.😆 Pantser.😉 I probably have about 20 other books in my head, and 1 or 2 that I’ve started and never finished. It’s weird how writing has forced me to start thinking in years, (like an…[Read more]
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Gracie replied to the topic A poem – Your love is not imaginary in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
Beautiful Eitan! Truly. Thank you for sharing.
(:
There are no cold and horror ā I do not shiver
I believe, (sense you asked), grammatically it should be ‘there is no cold and horror’.
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Thank you!! And thanks for the critique š
Will edit if possible š
(Though grammatically, isn’t it plural?)-
Good question. (I almost didnāt say anything because I donāt have any grammar rule I know to quote.) Then I mentioned it anywayā¦ *wince* My brain, my /self/, why dost thou do this to thyself!!
Anywaysā¦
Yes; it is plural.But āisā /does/ go there. *Knowing Iām doing this horriblyā¦I should ask my mother.*
It sounds wrong with āareā. Iāve nev…[Read more]
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(I hope this makes more sense to you, than it does to meā¦)
‘The subject is āthereā.
āThere isā is the subject and verb.
ācold and horrorā is the direct object(s)’But, at least I know Iām not crazyā¦. in the complete oblivious sense of the wordā¦
Post Script: It was ‘Tal’ who answered my question…not my mother. (:
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Eitan replied to the topic A Poem, I Guess in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
@inkspiller
Hmm. I read it now. I didn’t understand everything, but what I did – It’s amazing! Like, really. You really poured you heart to this… It’s full of sorrow, yet hope. True, He will never forsake us, no matter what, and how painful would be our fall. Beautiful. Thank you for sharing!
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Eitan started the topic A poem – Your love is not imaginary in the forum Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
(Tagging other poets – Sorry if I bother you, won’t tag again):
@anne-the-noob14 @anne-of-lothlorien @the-inkspiller @kimlikesart @urwen-starial @emberynus-the-drgaonslayer @dakota(Sorry if I missed someone).
So, I went through a difficult time in the last few days, but God used it amazingly to teach me something, and to get rid from a lie I…[Read more]
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Eitan posted an update in the group Poets 5 years, 10 months ago
@everyone
Am I the only one who writes poems with a music running in the head? š -
Hobbitchild replied to the topic What Age Are Your Main Characters? (Plus Free Book Giveaway!) in the forum Contemporary Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
@zee, I’m not sure! I don’t think most people rewrite their characters ages, it was just a question that popped into my head. XD
I think it would be interesting to know if anyone has done that before. It would really change the plot of most books, I think, to make your main character go from eleven to thirty-one, but it would be an interesting challenge.
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Hobbitchild replied to the topic What Age Are Your Main Characters? (Plus Free Book Giveaway!) in the forum Contemporary Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
That’s cool, how many books are you writing right now? I have one I’m currently writing and four more in my head (I wrote down a little), and one I’m taking a break from.
Thank you so much for your interest in my book! I have a goal of at least 25 copies downloaded a day, and I’m failing today’s goal. I have eighteen.
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