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A poem – Your love is not imaginary

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    Eitan
    @eitan

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      So, I went through a difficult time in the last few days, but God used it amazingly to teach me something, and to get rid from a lie I believed in about Him. I’m still struggling implementing the lesson, but at least I know the truth. And God will give me power to eventually overcome this weakness. I wrote this poem today in the morning. I hope it will encourage, help or just make people smile!

      As always, it’s free verse, and the original has rhyme and meter. Grammatical corrections and suggestions, critique, and anything else, are welcome!

      (I’m really serious about grammar – I’d be happy to improve my English).

       

      Your love is not imaginary

       

      Your love is not imaginary

      It is real and valid

      Your help is not theoretical

      It is living and breathing

       

      My God, you are always with me

      You are a shield and a sword for me

      You are my strength and my wisdom

      You give me sleep at night

       

      You, my God, are the comforter

      That gives me rest

      And you give me power

      To fight the devil

       

      You had not forsaken me

      Alone, in the midst of trouble

      Out of pain and storm

      You gave me peace and happiness

       

      What is left for me to fear?

      You will guard me from any evil

      There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver

      You will give me light and warm me

       

      When one day, the end will come

      I can no this for sure:

      I will come to you flying

      And will live with you forever!

       

      • This topic was modified 2 months, 1 week ago by Eitan.

      You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

      #118354
      Gracie
      @kimlikesart

        @eitan

        Beautiful Eitan! Truly. Thank you for sharing.

        (:

        There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver

        I believe, (sense you asked), grammatically it should be ‘there is no cold and horror’.

        Jominkreesa

        Passion means to be willing to suffer.

        #118501
        Sam M
        @sam-m

        @eitan

        Hi, Eitan! I really like your poem. I love the hope and truth that you pour into your writing.

        Also, (because you’re really serious about grammar), I think you meant: I can know this for sure.

        I look forward to reading anything else you post. 🙂

        #118732
        Eitan
        @eitan

          @sam-m Thank you!!

          I can know this for sure

          Oh, just a typing mistake… Like, I know how to write know 😉 *embarrassed, but thankful*.

          You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

          #118780
          Anne of Lothlorien
          @anne-of-lothlorien

            @eitan This was beautiful, thank you. I’m sorry you went through this time, but it’s beautiful that you  have come out the other side of this with hope in your heart and new strength in Jesus.

            From a grammatical standpoint, I spotted one line… “There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver” should be “There is no cold and horror – I do not shiver.”

            Easy mistake to make- I still do it! 😀

            I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
            No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

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