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A poem – Your love is not imaginary

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    Eitan
    @eitan

    (Tagging other poets – Sorry if I bother you, won’t tag again):
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    (Sorry if I missed someone).

     

    So, I went through a difficult time in the last few days, but God used it amazingly to teach me something, and to get rid from a lie I believed in about Him. I’m still struggling implementing the lesson, but at least I know the truth. And God will give me power to eventually overcome this weakness. I wrote this poem today in the morning. I hope it will encourage, help or just make people smile!

    As always, it’s free verse, and the original has rhyme and meter. Grammatical corrections and suggestions, critique, and anything else, are welcome!

    (I’m really serious about grammar – I’d be happy to improve my English).

     

    Your love is not imaginary

     

    Your love is not imaginary

    It is real and valid

    Your help is not theoretical

    It is living and breathing

     

    My God, you are always with me

    You are a shield and a sword for me

    You are my strength and my wisdom

    You give me sleep at night

     

    You, my God, are the comforter

    That gives me rest

    And you give me power

    To fight the devil

     

    You had not forsaken me

    Alone, in the midst of trouble

    Out of pain and storm

    You gave me peace and happiness

     

    What is left for me to fear?

    You will guard me from any evil

    There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver

    You will give me light and warm me

     

    When one day, the end will come

    I can no this for sure:

    I will come to you flying

    And will live with you forever!

     

    • This topic was modified 8 months, 3 weeks ago by Eitan.

    You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

    #118354
    Kimmi
    @kimlikesart

    @eitan

    Beautiful Eitan! Truly. Thank you for sharing.

    (:

    There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver

    I believe, (sense you asked), grammatically it should be ‘there is no cold and horror’.

    Jominkreesa

    Passion = A Willingness To Suffer

    #118501
    Sam M
    @sam-m

    @eitan

    Hi, Eitan! I really like your poem. I love the hope and truth that you pour into your writing.

    Also, (because you’re really serious about grammar), I think you meant: I can know this for sure.

    I look forward to reading anything else you post. 🙂

    #118732
    Eitan
    @eitan

    @sam-m Thank you!!

    I can know this for sure

    Oh, just a typing mistake… Like, I know how to write know 😉 *embarrassed, but thankful*.

    You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

    #118780
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @eitan This was beautiful, thank you. I’m sorry you went through this time, but it’s beautiful that you  have come out the other side of this with hope in your heart and new strength in Jesus.

    From a grammatical standpoint, I spotted one line… “There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver” should be “There is no cold and horror – I do not shiver.”

    Easy mistake to make- I still do it! 😀

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

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