[Eitan]

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(Sorry if I missed someone).

 

So, I went through a difficult time in the last few days, but God used it amazingly to teach me something, and to get rid from a lie I believed in about Him. I’m still struggling implementing the lesson, but at least I know the truth. And God will give me power to eventually overcome this weakness. I wrote this poem today in the morning. I hope it will encourage, help or just make people smile!

As always, it’s free verse, and the original has rhyme and meter. Grammatical corrections and suggestions, critique, and anything else, are welcome!

(I’m really serious about grammar – I’d be happy to improve my English).

 

Your love is not imaginary

 

Your love is not imaginary

It is real and valid

Your help is not theoretical

It is living and breathing

 

My God, you are always with me

You are a shield and a sword for me

You are my strength and my wisdom

You give me sleep at night

 

You, my God, are the comforter

That gives me rest

And you give me power

To fight the devil

 

You had not forsaken me

Alone, in the midst of trouble

Out of pain and storm

You gave me peace and happiness

 

What is left for me to fear?

You will guard me from any evil

There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver

You will give me light and warm me

 

When one day, the end will come

I can no this for sure:

I will come to you flying

And will live with you forever!

 

• This topic was modified 5 years, 8 months ago by Eitan.

You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

[Kimmi]

@eitan

Beautiful Eitan! Truly. Thank you for sharing.

(:

There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver

I believe, (sense you asked), grammatically it should be ‘there is no cold and horror’.

Jominkreesa

'Forth now! And fear no darkness!'

[Sam M]

@eitan

Hi, Eitan! I really like your poem. I love the hope and truth that you pour into your writing.

Also, (because you’re really serious about grammar), I think you meant: I can know this for sure.

I look forward to reading anything else you post. 🙂

[Eitan]

@sam-m Thank you!!

Sam M wrote:

I can know this for sure

Oh, just a typing mistake… Like, I know how to write know 😉 *embarrassed, but thankful*.

You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

[Anne of Lothlorien]

@eitan This was beautiful, thank you. I’m sorry you went through this time, but it’s beautiful that you  have come out the other side of this with hope in your heart and new strength in Jesus.

From a grammatical standpoint, I spotted one line… “There are no cold and horror – I do not shiver” should be “There is no cold and horror – I do not shiver.”

Easy mistake to make- I still do it! 😀

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