@anne-of-lothlorien

I know this reply is coming two years late, but… thank you for the hug.

@rose-colored-fancy @k-a-grey

Thank you both so much! I use repetition/refrain often for songs, but lately I’ve started using it in regular poetry. I was concerned that repetition would bore people.

It’s nice to meet you as well, K. A. Grey, and thanks for the stanza tip. I did fragment the lines for emphasis, but that is a good point on readability.

@e-n-leonard Hey there, fellow poet! Nice to meet you!

This is beautiful!! Nice use of repetition.  My only critique might be to split it up into stanzas to make each “I am a …” stand out, and perhaps combine some lines instead of fragmenting it to make it easier to read.  But splitting up lines can also add more emphasis too, so it’s up to y…[Read more]

@e-n-leonard

Fair warning, I’m not at all a poet, I’ve never written poetry.

However, I loved this! It gets a clear message across, I love the format with a repeating pattern!

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I, the Psalter

Rolling peaks in the bleak void,

Dizzying repetition of the mind it toyed.

In soaking misery of the waters endless rush,

The heart heaves a futile hope lost in the hush.

Eternal feelings envelop the waters falling,

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@rose-colored-fancy

That’s perfect! Thank you so much, I really appreciate it! I look forward to sharing it with you

I looking forward to reading it! 🙂

I can email it to you or just post it here!

Either one’s fine. That all sounds fine.

Mainly focus on whether the story as a whole is working, like character introductions, anything unusual that s…

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@noah-cochran

Oh, I feel that. I have a small problem with having my writing grow longer and longer as I write. xD

I have the exact same thing! During the first draft of my first book, a ‘long’ chapter was 1500 words. Now, a short chapter is 4000 words XD

I have no idea why that happens, but I find it quite funny XD

Alrighty, let’s plan on the l…

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@rose-colored-fancy

The story is about 91k long. (The shortest one in the trilogy, I’m already at that with book 3 and I’m still in the second act

Oh, I feel that. I have a small problem with having my writing grow longer and longer as I write. xD

This feedback is just about the biggest issues, plot, world, and character. So, let me know when you…

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@noah-cochran

All of that happened before I even read a single word. Craziness. xD

Ohmygoodness that gave me such a laugh XD I literally laughed out loud, that’s hilarious!

I’m assuming they liked it, considering how quickly everyone read it XD It’s awesome, the sequel is even better! And absolutely, the Audible version is amazing! That’s how I…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

So I’ve read some of the Letter for the King, but I thought you would find something that happened rather amusing. I requested it for purchase at our library, and as I was waiting for it to be delivered, my sister saw it. She then got it on audible and began reading it. My sister than told my mother, and the latter started…[Read more]

@noah-cochran

You do that.

I’m going to try training it first (I want a dragon mount to rush into battle with) but if that doesn’t work, bring a sword just in case 😉

That sounds excellent! I’m looking forward to seeing it.

I look forward to finishing it XD It’s going to be lovely but it’s also an embodiment of my vast overconfidence in my a…[Read more]