@vic Thanks, Vic. 🙂  I enjoyed this section and I’m looking forward to seeing how the story continues. I’d love to find out the backstory of how Liz became an assassin and learn more about Dirk! 🙂

@vic This was really cool! I enjoyed your vivid writing style. I also thought it was cool how she’s an assassin and a violinist.

Here’s a thought I had for a direction that you <i>could</i> take this: maybe Liz is a an assassin whose boss gives her assignments and she kills people without really knowing them. Then she ends up killing someone she…[Read more]

@vivian-grant Those are good points. And I can definitely see your theme now. Keep up the good work!

@vivian-grant Hi, Vivian!

I thought Phoenix and Innolan were interesting characters and I enjoyed their relationship and dialogue. I also enjoyed the gothic feel of the story. And well done on the setting.

Ferand could maybe stand a little more development and time in the story. (I did think it was well done that you put him in the scene in the…[Read more]

@professorsjb Thank you! I love high stakes stories too. 🙂 Your story sounds really cool. Lisa sounds like a really fun character.

@katthewriter So, mine is a short story and not a book (at least so far) and I’m still working out the details. It’s sort of science fiction meets horror and it kind of goes like this:

A group of college students stop at a hotel that is built on a time vortex. Objects and scenes from the past and from possible futures appear and disappear at the…[Read more]

@vivian-grant

First off, I enjoyed your story -thanks for letting me read it. 🙂

I do have a few suggestions:

#1 I feel like your story could benefit from more showing and less telling. For example, when Wendy is in the woods, instead of saying she’s scared, you could do something like: “Wendy’s breath became strained as they rushed further…[Read more]

@christlover Your story sounds really cool! I would love to read a book like that. 🙂

@pensword Cool. 🙂 Thank you for the recommendations! I’ve been meaning to read Dracula one of these days.

@the-inkspiller Thanks for the website link. 🙂 👍

@pensword I have yet to write an actual horror story, but I had an idea for one I might do sometime -it’s basically a reverse Carrie story. So, in Carrie by Stephen King, a group of people are cruel to the protagonist, and then Carrie tries to get revenge on them and things go wretchedly awry (or that’s my understanding of it…I, uh, haven’t…[Read more]

My story is like Gotham (and many, many other Batman stories) meets The Naturals -but cleaner and not as creepy as those…although, it’s actually still kind of creepy and I’m working on trying to adjust that…

Does anyone else struggle to form villains that are realistic and wicked, but not so dark that you’ll give your readers nightmares? Any tips?