Beth Darlene

Katja R replied to the topic Hey!! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

Hey Beth,

You did a really good job!! Here are a few things I would fix.

When someone is talking or thinking you don’t have to put it on the next line. Before you get confused, let me explain.

1. Your first paragraph is good and then you have:

Looking at the house, Jered sighed,

It would have been a majestic house in the 1800s.

You…[Read more]
- Beth Darlene replied 6 years, 1 month ago
  
  Thanks for your critiques! They were very helpful and I’ll try and change that soon!
Katja R started the topic Christian Movies in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 1 month ago

@claire-h @arindown @melodyjoy @beth20 @wolverinerm @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @theswordinthebook

Hey guys!

Recently some of us got onto the topic of Christian movies. We decided to start a discussion about them. On this page we would like to discuss movies that we’ve seen, how they help us, how they can help us with writing our characters, t…[Read more]
Katja R replied to the topic The Most Important Part Of My Story in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 1 month ago

@claire-h

Sounds good! I’ll start the discussion and tag you, @arindown, @beth20, and @melodyjoy.

Let me know if anyone else comes up with topics you want to be discussed on this new page.

-Katja
Katja R replied to the topic The Most Important Part Of My Story in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 1 month ago

@claire-h @arindown @melodyjoy @beth20

Wait. What exactly would we talk about in this discussion?

1. Are we just going to complain about how Christian movies aren’t good?

Or

2. Are we going to to discuss movies that we’ve seen, how they help us, how they can help us with writing our characters, things they could have maybe done better, movie…[Read more]
Katja R started the topic The Four Rebels chapter 3 in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago

@arindown @wolverinerm @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @claire-h @beth20 @theswordinthebook @melodyjoy

Here is Chapter 3 of The Four Rebels.

Chapter 3: Rydel

The gun fired and I leaned forward in my saddle. I had to win this race. As my horse got faster I could feel the wind blowing my hair. Mother thought I need to cut it but I liked it being…[Read more]
Katja R replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

I don’t know why, but I can’t view page two. So if I made a mistake in my comments, sorry cuz I can’t edit it. I couldn’t view page two earlier either. Hopefully this isn’t a giant problem and will go away in a bit.

-Katja
Katja R replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

Hey Beth,

You did a really good job!! Here are a few things I would fix.

When someone is talking or thinking you don’t have to put it on the next line. Before you get confused, let me explain
Your first paragraph is good and then you have:

Looking at the house, Jered sighed,

It would have been a majestic house in the 1800s.

You can…[Read more]
- Beth Darlene replied 6 years, 1 month ago
  
  Hey,
  I was able to view what you said cuz I just went on the activity of the group instead of my post! So hopefully you think of that lol!
  I thought everything you said was a very good critique thanks!
  -Beth
Katja R replied to the topic The Four Rebels chapter 2 in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

Hey,

Thanks for your comments.

Yup, I meant off. 🙂

I didn’t realize the running thing. Thanks for pointing that out.

Yes, I have to find a synonym for explosion….but I guess what might be confusing you is that it happens twice. I’ll try to explain this. So the “bomb” explodes once in it’s location when it’s let out, then it sends…[Read more]
Emberynus The Dragonslayer replied to the topic Trying to decide in the forum Writers of Children's/Middle Grade Books 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

Sorry I replied so late!

Thanks! (to the part about liking my name)

I’m not an expert on the subject. Personally I don’t put swearing in any of my stories. (Just a personal standard) I have read a few MG books with swearing in them. (But usually by the time I read them, my mom had colored over those words with a black marker hehe! :lol:…[Read more]
WolverineRM replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 1 month ago

@melodyjoy

I love all your babies!! They look so sweet. Was having a snake for a pet a little scary at first…? There’s this kind of snake in TX that has too small a mouth to bite, so we used to play with them whenever we found them, but it took some convincing the first time we did it. 😆

There’s no rhyme or reason to how I pick names. Som…[Read more]
Daeus Lamb replied to the topic Beta readers for magical breakout room story? in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20 daeus@storyembers.org

Our submission form is down at the moment. That’s probably why. Apologies for the inconvenience.
Katja R replied to the topic Younger sisters stories! in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

I posted my second chapter of The Four Rebels. Look in the forum, I made a new topic named “The Four Rebels chapter 2”

Let me know what you think!

-Katja
Melody replied to the topic Younger sisters stories! in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

Abbie, those stories are so great! When you are older, you are going to be a great writer. One of my stories that I’ve always wanted to write is from an animal’s perspective. I’m in the middle of a different story right now, but maybe if I end up writing it, I can post it on Story Embers and you can read it!

Thanks for sharing these!

-Melody
Katja R replied to the topic Younger sisters stories! in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago

@beth20

Awww!! Tell your sister that she did a really good job! Her stories were so cute! 😀

-Katja
Melody replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 2 months ago

@beth20

That is a really awesome way of doing it. I’m sure sone people would say that I put too much time into it. But you just “cut right to the chase.” That’s neat. Thanks for sharing that!

-Mel
Katja R started the topic The Four Rebels chapter 2 in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 2 months ago

@claire-h @beth20 @arindown @melodyjoy @theswordinthebook

Here is the next chapter! Let me know what you think!

Chapter 2: Alyce

There slowly walking through the hall, unaware that anyone was here, was Brian DeGribler, Cavensburg’s best army official. There was nothing he could do to stop The Robin from doing it’s job, but he most defin…[Read more]
Arindown replied to the topic Hey Everyone in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 2 months ago

@beth20

Just dropping a note to say that I’m totally flattered you used Jered as your profile picture.☺️ I hope it looked somewhat like you imagined him.😉
Katja R replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 2 months ago

@melodyjoy

Yes. Lol. Naming your character is like naming your child. 😀 And yes I agree about the last name flowing with the first name. One thing that helps me get the right name is to say it out loud numerous times. It helps to hear if it sounds right.

Awww, thanks so much!! I put a lot of work into creating the perfect character. (and…[Read more]
Katja R replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 2 months ago

@beth20 @claire-h @arindown @wolverinerm @melodyjoy

Yes!!! I think choosing the characters names are super important!! I always look at the meaning of the name and see if it fits my character. I name my characters like I was naming a child, because my characters are going to live the rest of their (storyhood?) with that name!! I think a lot a…[Read more]
Melody replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 2 months ago

@katja-r @claire-h @arindown @beth20 @wolverinerm

Hey guys!

Do you guys spend forever looking through thousands of lists and name generators and websites when it comes to picking names for the characters in your story?

-Mel
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