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Beth Darlene started the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

Drowning

In doubt,

In hesitation.

Submerged

In my uncertainties

It’s wrong.

.

Hiding

My face,

All my feelings.

Deception

To cover

My anxiety

.

Fighting

To open,

To unbolt.

Conflicting

Emotions,

I’m confused.

.

Am I a closed door?

No.

But will this door ever open more than a crack?

No.

You think you know me.

Do you?

-Beth Darlene

Beth Darlene replied to the topic A poem – I want to weep in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

Nice poem @eitan!!

Gracie replied to the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

That was really good @jennythefaun !!

@anne-of-lothlorien

JennytheFaun replied to the topic I Would Be in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

I don’t know if you’re still looking for feedback on this or not, but just in case you are:

I thought this was really good! The main suggestion I have is that in the very first line, “was and am isn’t” really tripped me up. I understand now what you’re saying, but it took me two or three glances to piece it together.

My favorite line was “I…[Read more]

JennytheFaun started the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZMIEA7d_LkfwEGUxcdqGM8-R5j_CZ5cJqDDVSxv6Nxs/edit?usp=sharing

I haven’t written much poetry, but this is one I’ve been working with recently. I feel like it still needs some changes, but I’m not sure how to move forward with it. Any critique would be great, especially comments on the doc.

Also, as I think…[Read more]

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Sam M replied to the topic The Snare in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

@lonathecat

Thanks, Lona!

Lona replied to the topic The Snare in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

Ahhhh! That was so great! I resonated so much with this poem. Especially the lines,

“Habitual failing -I wish I could quit” and

“Make my love greater than my pain,

Help my vindictive soul to change,”

Excellent word choice. 😀

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Sam M started the topic The Snare in the forum Poets 5 years, 6 months ago

Hey, everybody. Feel free to leave me some feedback on my poem. What do you think I can do better? 🙂

The Snare

The Bible declares that fear of man is a snare,

And this truth matches my experience,

I know it’s real as I’m hearing this.

For a dozen times I can be fine,

And the journey goes pretty well,

But I still think about when I’l…[Read more]

Sam M replied to the topic I Would Be in the forum Poets 5 years, 6 months ago

@eitan

Thanks, Eitan! 🙂

Loki posted an update in the group Horror Writers 5 years, 6 months ago

Over the course of writing a few books that could be classified as Horror, I noticed that while I write books that are thrilling and unnerving, I always seem to add an element of learning and pacifying to them. After the the ghosts and demons get what they came for, they are peaceful.
It’s an interesting thing to notice patterns and theme in your…[Read more]

Sam M replied to the topic A poem – I want to weep in the forum Poets 5 years, 6 months ago

Great job on your poem, Eitan! I love how your poems are filled with truth and end with hope. 🙂