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@nuetrobolt, your villain sounds very interesting. Its not ordinary that villains are nice like that. The protagonist, you said, was all amazing and great, right? There’s nothing bad with that, but try to give him a few weaknesses if you haven’t  to make him seem more realistic. 🙂 And the people you said all around him are frail and foolish, t…[Read more]

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Thanks! I’ve figured a lot out recently… and think I have most all my questions answered… except for the guild wars… I’d like to be a part of that.

@nuetrobolt Hey, nice to see you here!

Yes! I have read every single one of ND’s fiction books. He’s not my favorite but among my top five.

@nuetrobolt Thank you! It gets the job done, I suppose. I would like to do something better than just “good,” though. 😉

@nuetrobolt It’s not particularly clear that the majority of the story is the book he’s reading. Does Edward become more important later on? Is part of the book his story and part of it Philip’s? Or is it just Philip’s after the pre-prologue?

@nuetrobolt I’ll copy the line and then put my edit in italics. (I’m used to commenting on a document where I can comment on specific lines, so this might not be the most efficient way to do this. XP) There are a lot of them, but most of the changes are pretty minor. A lot of the edits are just altered punctuation or capitalization.

He picked up…[Read more]

@nuetrobolt interesting premise! I like how deeply historical it is, cause I’m a total sucker for HF. And no, it’s just the first paragraph. 😉

@nuetrobolt No, just the first few paragraphs of the first chapters. My first chapter is a lot longer than that. XD

I really like your pieces! You have a lot of grammatical errors and a couple of misspelled words, but the visuals and description are really well-done. I would definitely keep reading. 🙂

@nuetrobolt I LOVE Oskar! He’s one of my favorite characters. I love to throw quotes into conversations when I remember them. 😀

@nuetrobolt Thank you! Nice username, btw. I’m a Throne Warden as well. 🙂

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Hey, guys, so I know you have all been popping in and out of the doc. I finished a draft of the story, but I kind of stink at endings. What do you guys think? Do you have any changes you want to make or is there anything you don’t like? Can you think of a better…[Read more]

Hi! @nuetrobolt, @evelyn, @r-m-archer, @corkybookworm, @Samuel

Thanks so much!!!

Thorne Warden, I haven’t read any of those books! (Though I keep hearing about Eragon, I saw the movie but I heard the book was a lot better, :D).

Haha, Evelyn (one of my friends really likes the Book Thief too and it is also her favorite, so I won’t judge) and I…[Read more]

@kate *hands you something sweet like cake to balance it out. Strawberry cake*

@nuetrobolt of course XD

@sam-kowal I do like the idea of Ace fearing death. It would make sense after spending so much time with immortality. And, if I do follow through with the resurrection, I’ll be thinking of what consequences (like Ace losing his immorality) I…[Read more]

@nuetrobolt Oh, cool! I like those ones too!

@nuetrobolt Yes, there is! It’s PG-13 though, because the stuff he goes through is harder for younger kids to swallow. But it’s a great account of his life and experiences. Ragamuffin is by Color Green Films, which I assume was named after one of his songs, The Color Green (also one of my faves).

What are your favorite songs by Rich Mullins?…[Read more]

@nuetrobolt Mine are coming along ok so far 🙂