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Rebekah.Elizabeth replied to the topic Publishing questions in the forum Publishing and Marketing Nerds 5 years, 5 months ago

@josiah Thank you for the advice! I appreciate all that you do for SE members, and, though I don’t often have time to be active on the SE forum, the influence you and the other staff members have had on me over the past few months through the podcast, summit recordings, and emails has been invaluable. Thank you so much!

Beth Darlene replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

@sam-m

Thanks Sam! It’s one of the only two poems I’ve ever written.

Sam M replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

@beth20

Hi, Beth. You did a great job of writing an emotional piece in masterfully concise way. I like you’re writing style and thought it was cool how you ended the poem with a thought-provoking question. Great job!

Sam M replied to the topic I Would Be in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

@jennythefaun

Yeah, I can see now how that would be confusing. Thanks for the feedback! 🙂

Sam M replied to the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

@jennythefaun

Hi, Jenny! I like your vivid writing style and how the first lines of each stanza were parallel to each other. The way you ended it was cool too. I can’t think of any recommendations for improvement. Sorry. 🙂 It looked great to me.

Beth Darlene started the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

Drowning

In doubt,

In hesitation.

Submerged

In my uncertainties

It’s wrong.

.

Hiding

My face,

All my feelings.

Deception

To cover

My anxiety

.

Fighting

To open,

To unbolt.

Conflicting

Emotions,

I’m confused.

.

Am I a closed door?

No.

But will this door ever open more than a crack?

No.

You think you know me.

Do you?

-Beth Darlene

Beth Darlene replied to the topic A poem – I want to weep in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

Nice poem @eitan!!

Gracie replied to the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

That was really good @jennythefaun !!

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JennytheFaun replied to the topic I Would Be in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

I don’t know if you’re still looking for feedback on this or not, but just in case you are:

I thought this was really good! The main suggestion I have is that in the very first line, “was and am isn’t” really tripped me up. I understand now what you’re saying, but it took me two or three glances to piece it together.

My favorite line was “I…[Read more]

JennytheFaun started the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 5 months ago

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZMIEA7d_LkfwEGUxcdqGM8-R5j_CZ5cJqDDVSxv6Nxs/edit?usp=sharing

I haven’t written much poetry, but this is one I’ve been working with recently. I feel like it still needs some changes, but I’m not sure how to move forward with it. Any critique would be great, especially comments on the doc.

Also, as I think…[Read more]

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Mischievous Thwapling replied to the topic Short Story: In a Mother’s Arms in the forum Contemporary Fiction Writers 5 years, 5 months ago

@inklingflame

AWWWW!! That was so sweet! The poem at the beginning was a very beautiful and nice touch. The mother/daughter relationship… Awww…

I believe it would be best punctuation wise to cut the comma, replace it with a period, then make the h in He lowercase. Like this: “I’ve got to go,” he said into the phone. (I bolded the c…[Read more]

Inklingflame replied 5 years, 5 months ago

Thanks! I’ve never liked/been good at grammar:) It’s going to be the death of me someday! I definitely need grammar help 😂 I usually don’t get upset when I get critiques, so no worries here. I’d rather you say something then keep it to yourself anyway;)
Mischievous Thwapling replied 5 years, 5 months ago

Same here!!
Yay, I’m so glad! Thank you SO much for letting me read it! It was wonderful.

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Inklingflame started the topic Short Story: In a Mother’s Arms in the forum Contemporary Fiction Writers 5 years, 5 months ago

@mischievous-thwapling (🤞I Hope this works)

Hey Everybody!
I wrote this story for my Mother’s birthday. I would LOVE and critiques, criticisms, comments, or snide remarks (I know I messed up the alliteration;) you have. 😁 I have a poem introducing (for lack of a better word) my story, because…well why not! 😆 Anyway, here is the story:…[Read more]

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Sam M replied to the topic The Snare in the forum Poets 5 years, 6 months ago

@lonathecat

Thanks, Lona!