@mischievous-thwaplingActive 2 days, 14 hours ago
No promises.… XD
Lol XD I was like, “Hey, wait a sec, I don’t have a character named Ian in my WIP!” So I deleted it *facepalm*
OOOOH, good points!
Aw, thanks! (I just hope it isn’t dead, lol…. Only three of us–counting me–seem to be posting right now)
I second what Joelle said about her sounding awesome 😉
Ahh, okay, thx!
True, that could end up being repetitive!!
*hopes with you*
Zanar was starting to wish he had stayed out of those drainage tunnels. Then, he’d probably be at home right now, safe and sound.
He’d been an idiot. And now he was paying the price in some weird, twisted, talking castle.
He watched helplessly as Drone Destroying Dude–hadn’t he said his name wa…[Read more]
Aaaaccckkkkkkkkk, sorry for being away so long! Sorry sorry sorry!
Kalmar glanced up when he heard that crazy red-haired girl giggling something with the word “Caitir” in it. It tickled the back of his mind, but he couldn’t remember why it sounded so familiar. He turned to Janner, about to ask if he recognized it, too, when Arundelle…[Read more]
I hope it isn’t dead….
Aha! Thou hast been brave and started RP-ing again! (and no problem, lol, the southern accent is hilarious)
In answer to your way earlier questions:
“1. Does he have any opinions about Elves/Hhborgens/Puppies/anything-else that we should know about?
2. Is he normally hospitiable/ready to jump in, or…[Read more]
AFTER ALL THE PAINFUL WORLD-BUILDING/PLANNING/FIGURING-EVERYTHING-OUT (which I’m not very good at, considering I have panster leanings XD), THIS STORY IS NOT DYING, OKAY?
YOU GUYS ARE NOT DISAPPEARING.
WE ARE GOING TO WRITE THIS STORY, AND IT IS GOING TO BE AWESOME.
GTG now, critique later
Note: Suggestions are in bold
This sentence feels a little wordy, so maybe you could reword it to something like: “…. but she did not wrap her extremely tattered, dark-colored cloak tighter around herself.” Or something like that, anyway 😀
This is sentence above is kinda long and confusing, so maybe something more like: “Her…[Read more]
I notice you use the same phrase “creasing her brow.” It felt slightly repetitive.
I love your cliff hanger ending, and how you smoothly portray Nadia as a… *thinks of word* kinda someone who looks out for Ada? Am I interrupting that correctly?
Sorry this critique is short–I’m just not finding any “problems” in y’alls wonderful s…[Read more]
Critique time!! The beginning of your story feels a little a little abrupt, but that might be just because you wanted it to start fast paced?
You do a really great job of portraying Esthelle’s confusion!!
And that ending to your first post of the story? The Do not tell them who you are part? Such a cool cliff hanger!! Cannot wai…[Read more]
OF COURSE WE’VE MISSED YOU!!
Okay, good to know! (About your critiquing preferences)
Okay, critique. Um, you never mentioned where the main character and the other guy are, or what the main character’s name is, or anything for readers to go on. Do you get into that later, since this is a…[Read more]
LOL XD Like, dare Liorah to do something on this thread, or make Zanar dare Liorah to do something on the Character Castle 2.0 after the trap is done?
Perfectly understandable!! 😉
Awww, thx! *grins*
*imagines her doing that* *kinda wants to see that in real life* Now I really wanted to dare her to do something. Like a lot. XD
Thx!! And ha, I know that feeling 😛
When I read that, the first answer that popped into my head, without me thinking about or hesitating was: Me. XD
OOooohhhhh, so that means Ferran is with a SHAPE-SHIFTER?? *is giddy* That’s a really cool idea. Are you good with it, @rose-colored-fancy? Rusted Knight, if Klein is with Zanar and Riure, are you good with the challenge that Joelle suggested they have to complete? Or would you rather the three do something else to escape the…[Read more]
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