93@ImperatorPenguin

@miller

I would be up for it though my chapters tend to be 3000 to 4500 words long. Most people critique me through google docs where I post my chapters.

@emily-waldorf

I don’t know how long my WIP will be.

The first chapter is 900 words but I would be ecstatic if you just helped with that since it’s my first time

@jared-williams

I would also like to switch to either a website that would help with critiquing.

I think a word limit would also be a good idea too.

I will check out this other…[Read more]

I like the idea. =) And would be willing to participate and help out! I’ve gotten the feeling critiquing isn’t very big in this forum, though people aren’t averse to doing it if you ask… I’m on a different forum, Christianwriters.com, that has an active critiquing section in it that I use a lot, but I like this idea. I find that the more eyes on…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

thank you so much. glad you like it! I will hopefully be contacting you soon to ask if you’d like to beta read it for me… =)

They are in a large tent/pavillion that has draped partitions separating the massive tent into different rooms. (they are mobile, just before the final battle)

and, the king is harsh, but it’s not the…[Read more]

@miller

I might be interested if the excerpts are short! I plan to not be on too much, but that’s better than nothing, Ig?

Congrats on starting a new (and first!) story! I have two WIPs (Work In Progress): a retelling of Sleeping Beauty with role reversals, and one about two brothers whose relationship has shattered due to tragedy in the family…[Read more]

@crazywriter,

Of course!

Ahhh, that makes sense! Fog tends to disperse with light, though. You might want to add a bit of something to make it clear that the fog is what causes low visibility, not something else. 😉

*fp* I have this sinking feeling that it’s going to be one of those love/hate relationships where the author side of me is like,…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

Thanks!

Charging them head on at night is too dangerous. We can’t see well in the daytime, (why not?) let alone night, and we don’t know the terrain.”

I think the reason I had put in was there was a great amount of fog that had descended in the plateau and the lowlands it overlooked, so daytime visibility had been shot.…[Read more]

@crazywriter,

Alrighty, time to finish this up!

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As night fell, and the sun slipped beneath the horizon, the fort bustled with activity. Various measures were being taken to maximize it’s security, and breastworks were being constructed about twenty yards from the walls. No plan had been decided on, but Abner, Major Maguire, and Commander W…[Read more]

THIS IS AMAZING

ME WANTS MORE

Not sure if I like the king, but I trust him. One bit of critique would be that I was confused as to the setting – you said they were in a room, but you also mention grass/dirt/etc. multiple times. Since rooms tend to have floors, I was confuzzled. Were they in a tent? Does this king prefer grass to wood or stone?…[Read more]

Hi guys 🙂 this looks like a group I could really use haha. Would you guys know anything about the immediate reaction of people after getting stab wounds or shot? Is pain felt straight away or how exactly does it work? It still is something that confuses me 🙁

@skylarynn Hello hello! Took me a while to pop back on here – I don’t have notifications turned on and I only pop on once in a while when I remember to and have time :))

I agree with @rose-colored-fancy about the longsword thing. And I believe her take on the honey application is also accurate, though Jonathan would be the person to say for sure.…[Read more]

@tabitha

thank you so much for reading and helping me with it! your comments were really helpful! Yes, there were some context things, I think, that would be confusing. but I’m glad there wasn’t anything vital that was confusing. Semiramis was hurt for a moment cause Aefflaed thought her older than she was, but it passed quickly. And yeah……[Read more]

1) This was a great way of introducing different creatures in your world –very engaging.

2) I did find myself skimming the description of the Tannink’esh from “A long reptilian body filled the clearing…connecting seamlessly to the nape of the creatures neck.” So those paragraphs could probably be condensed. I think I got a fairly good idea o…[Read more]

Pia was up first, she got up and stretched, poking at the fire with her pike, to liven it up for breakfast.
K’Nika woke but stayed in the tree a while.

Everyone else laid on the ground and soon fell asleep. The night came and went and sooner than anyone wanted, the sun began to rise signaling the new day

Alessio’s head bobbed up to look at the hole. He was quiet for just a moment when he let out a laugh. The laugh of a madman. He shook his head and gave a false grin, hate sparked in his eyes as he looked at Nithel. “That’s a joke, right?”

Nithel’s chest burned with pain, and the light in his eyes went away.  He set his jaw, already trying to…[Read more]

@everyone

Hey y’all,

Through a series of less-than-ideal events, life has taken a turn for the chaotic and I can’t keep up with the Castle rn. Don’t worry, there are no outright disasters and it’ll hopefully work out in a week or two, but I won’t be as active. Sorry, just keep going 🙂

Alessio felt Nithel nod, and he was trying to pay attention everything was turning numb. He didn’t want to feel anything anymore, he didn’t want to have to think.

Fear not…for I have created…

He couldn’t remember the words, not in order at least. Just in fragments, like broken thoughts or phrases. It was a stupid thing to fixate on, but it wa…[Read more]