@rebekah12,

First off, that is SO intriguing!! I can totally envision the slick deck and pelting rain. Your descriptions are vibrant and your dialogue realistic. But before I go rattling off, how detailed of a critique would you like?

@skylarynn,

Concerning description and stuff, your revised version was much better!

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So, last time I did one of these, I got completely overwhelemed trying to critique everyone’s stories. So this go-round, if y’all are okay with it, I’ll just pick two or three to follow so that I can critique those as well as I can instead of giving you hasty and probably inaccurate ideas. Sorry if that hurts someone’s feelings. :/ I think I’m…[Read more]

@rebekah12,

Yurp, works for me!

@mischievous-thwapling,

*salutes* One question though: Ian ISN’T an Elf, right? Or is he? And you do want him in the prophecy, right?

*realizes that was three questions* *shrugs*

@mischievous-thwapling,

No worries! I do that sometimes on accident too. 🙂

Erm, personally I like the first two the best. Maybe we can combine them, though? Like have them play a board game without communicating with voices, then one of them accidentally does and they’re shrunk as punishment? XD I have no clue where that came from, but it…[Read more]

@mischievous-thwapling,

Ha, I was going to say that! (The “um” thing, that is.) And go straight ahead!

@kylie-wingfeather (and everyone else),

I have no clue what to do with Arundelle & Artham, so I await y’all’s lead! 🙂

@mischievous-thwapling,

Uh… *looks at Bekah* I think so?

It’s WIND!

@kimlikesart,

Pretty well! Life’s a bit crazy, which is why I haven’t really been on. How about you?

(@skylarynn Ooh, I’m so sorry!! My family recently lost our dog of 14 years as well, so I feel for you. ):)

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@jasmine,

Do you want her to team up or fight alone? Either one works, and if you want Gwendolyn could be on her team (please don’t feel obligated, I was just throwing it out there,).

Either works!! If you want to have Gwen and Riure on a team, I’m all for it (plus it’ll help Riure recognize her better. ;)).

@rebekah12,

I read your story, and it looks awesome (plus great cliffhanger – and Chapter 56?!? That’s AMAZING!! My longest WIP is 23. XD). I’ll critique when I have time. 🙂

*sheepishly hangs head* Ooh… page three? Was it really that bad? *coughs*

Welcome back, Crazywriter! 😀

@crazywriter,

No problem! I know how moving is. 🙂 Welcome back!

Yurp, I’m not sure what I’m gonna do with Ash right now either. *shrugs*

So, is Klein with Riure and Zanar or with Ferran and Dancrow?

@rose-colored-fancy,

Well, for the riddle, sunscreen works. XD It’s white, changes size, is usually smeared all over (including on the undersides of your arms and stuff), but if you toss the bottle it flies. People wear it in the sun, obviously, but I don’t think I’ve seen anyone wear it in rain. The rain would wash it off, anyway. Plus it…[Read more]

@mischievous-thwapling,

Okey dokey! Mind if we just bring your character along for a while?