I don’t have any critiques – but as I was reading it I was struck by the second and third verses. I like the homophones there! I also like the variation in the length of the lines. I don’t always like poetry like that, I tend to prefer the same number of syllables in each line, but I think this works well here. I also like the…[Read more]

What’s your WIP about?  Do you have any favorite books?  What are some of your favorite crafts?
That’s really cool that you’re learning to knit!  I never learned to knit, but it does seem fun (and practical.)

I think that SE is…unfortunately rather inactive at the moment.  I think that…[Read more]

@ethan-leonard

@joelle-stone

@the-inkspiller

@noah-cochran

@calidris

Okay, from now until 8pm Eastern Time (USA) November 19th, I’m having a poll as to where we want to hold the writing group: over email or on discord? If you don’t reply by then, I will assume that…[Read more]

@emily-waldorf

Agreed. I do prefer discord over regular text messaging, because (1) you can do large groups without using extra data, (2) you can have a dedicated server with separate rooms in it, (3) like you said, you can do mass voice/ video calls (and if you’re not comfortable with video, that’s ok, you can turn your cam…[Read more]

I don’t have discord, and neither does Joelle, if I read her post correctly. I may or may not be opposed to getting it–haven’t decided yet. My idea is to wait a few days and see how many others are interested in this idea, and then split into groups: a group…[Read more]

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!

And I have a lot of research I need to do… Thank you for that as well.

The story was honestly just a concept that just floated into my brain and I was like “hmm I haven’t had a ton of motivation to write, but the story makes me feel really excited” And then I realized that I would probably have a lot of…[Read more]

Whether you’ve written first person present or not, do you have any tips for writing it? Any common mistakes you see people commit?

Secondly, what are your thoughts on a first person present book with a few third person past interludes and possibly an epilogue? I’ve never seen a book with both past a…[Read more]

Do you use direct, italicized thought (where first person pronouns are used)? At first, I used basically none, but the more I looked at popular books, the more I see it used, and am thus tempted to use it (plus, I do like it, as long as…[Read more]

but I use them to break up what would otherwise be a marathon of a sentence or two awkward dumplings sat in separate bathroom stalls.

Yep, that’s when I use them too, but I do find that just separating the sentences by starting the latter one with a conjunction is something authors do relatively often (instead of a semicolon that…[Read more]

I understand the spirit of your example (expound more to make the telling more interesting), so I will keep that in mind, but the example itself doesn’t work at all–mostly due to the fact that Drastan himself is a mercenary. xD

@joelle-stone

Thanks for the response!

Yeaaaah… it’s usually best to avoid using “th…

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Yeah, I have a lot of alcoholism in my family, so I know how they act, but I don’t know how they feel or what they think.

I just have one quick scene that I need this information for. It can be aggravating how much research goes into a few words XD

@the-inkspiller

I actually knew some of that! I was in love with horses for a…[Read more]

@the-inkspiller I agree, talking about difficulties in life can be as strong as the initial step taken to work past said difficulties. I do the same with mental…[Read more]

Woah, sorry, I didn’t mean to get super personal….

I, uh, yeah, either way that was incredibly helpful!! Thank you so much!

Is there like a series of events that happen during the process of getting drunk? (headaches, sweating, etc.)

Pneumonia is a significant possibility due to aspirated water – that is, if he inhaled any water during the initial splash, or if he was under water long enough that he involuntarily gasped for air and inhaled water instead. Natural water isn’t purified and there isn’t really any telling what…[Read more]

[If you want to know more about frostbite, let me know and I’ll do a write-up on that too]

Since you offered, I’ll also inquire about frostbite

Thank you, that answer was wonderful.
Next question is might he get pneumonia from the experience and how would they handle that?

Could a drowning victim be resuscitated in medieval/renaissance times, and how did they handle hypothermia?

The character [a 15yo boy] fell through the ice of a frozen lake at night in the dead of winter and was able to find his way out of the ice before he passed out, but someone else managed to dive in, pull him out of the…[Read more]

*Decides it is*

Um, hi… I was, sorta wondering if anyone knows what it feels like being, uh, drunk? 😂

I need to know for one of the novels I’m working on, but it’s not something I want to look up or ask my family, lol

But if the dagger is coated in poo, then…

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So glad to see you again!  And thanks for your answer.

Another question: if someone were stabbed in the back with a stiletto [dagger], where would the best place be for the stab to be survivable and how long would recovery be?

Thanks!

Hi Skylarynn! I believe we met in the villains’ character castle a while ago! Nice to see you again!

Disclaimer, I have next to no medical knowledge, I’ll leave that to @the-inkspiller . However, I have some experience with longswords and some knowledge of medieval stuff (having researched it myself) So I’ll try to give you a partial…[Read more]

@the-inkspiller

So a character of mine (@anne_the_noob14 not Brendin, I swear) had a longsword thrown at his back when he was 17.  I’ve already decided that it miraculously managed to cut his back open from his right shoulder to his left hip, but my questions for you are:

1) Is it possible the impact from…[Read more]

Haha! I don’t think we have met. I also disappear for large swatches of time, usually when I’m not writing, and then find myself trapped in some new part of my writing endeavor that will send me back here. Currently I’m doing my first edits on my novel, so I’m here to edit anything BUT my novel! Very productive, I know.

What a…[Read more]

@the-inkspiller

There’s a missing horse-training scene and it’s been bugging me to death for months, and I refuse to subject another faithful beta-reader to the draft until it’s done. (I didn’t know enough about horses at the time and I was just trying to finish…

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(thanks, and good luck on your nursing exams if you haven’t finished them yet!!)

Thank you so much! That’s perfect!

And thank you! Henry V is frankly inspirational, even if his speech may or may not be entirely Shakespeare’s imagination – the Bard knew how to write a monologue for sure.

Oh, I actually thought it was a reference to the Templars’ battle prayer.  Cool either way!

It is a fairly great weight (2,400-2,800lbs) but luckily for him the weight is fairly well-distributed away from him so it’s not all on his leg.  As for the deformation and loss of function, would he need a walking aid or might he only have a slight limp?  If this helps any he’s about 17-18 years old.

How would a broken tibia and/or fibula be treated with medieval medicine?  (They were broken from being stuck under a great weight)

Btw, I love your quote! It’s Latin, an awesome quote, and a historical reference, three awesome things in one!

i agree with you that it should be researched! Although not by the faint of heart. There are reasons for their war crimes & cruelty because their were very much indoctrinated by the culture they lived in, however it still is terrible(not that you are saying it wasn’t). From my research, however, the Japanese did hosts of u…[Read more]

I have a talking owl, so don’t worry – I’m not judging a talking raven 😛

@the-inkspiller

Water hemlock treated with charcoal! I am pleased with myself. I actually knew that bit of info already 😀 I read a book once, where a girl found water hemlock, didn’t know what it was (thought it was a turnip or something) and was…[Read more]

I heard about him! Reportedly, his iron hand was so well made that he could hold a quill with it. One thing’s for sure, he left an interesting legacy. XD

I’ve been thinking about the dilemma of the poison, and I might have a solution, but I have no idea if it’s feasible in any way, shape, or form.

Here’s the idea. The first dose…[Read more]

Thank you so much for your reply! It’s extremely helpful and points out the weak points in my idea.

My biggest issue is that I need some sort of slow-working poison so the characters can get to a specific place and back for the antidote.

I was planning for the victim to have some permanent damage from the poison, specifically,…[Read more]

I can’t answer this as well as @the-inkspiller probably could, but here are my two cents:

Antidote question: In all honesty, I have no idea. That is a question for Jonathan. But also… it’s your book, so if you need an antidote then I’d say go for it.

Permanent effects… You mentioned that the symptoms were paralysis,…[Read more]

Also might mandrake root have been used as an anesthetic?  You’d mentioned something like that earlier, I think.

So how would a medieval skin graft work out?  I ask because previously Brendin had been burned badly enough to need one and a very well trained University surgeon was on hand to treat him.

It’s funny that you mention this would be more likely survivable if he didn’t feel pain, because I forgot to mention Brendin doesn’t feel pain (or rather he has a greatly diminished capacity to feel pain) as an after effect of a nasty illness he had in his…[Read more]

How could someone in medieval-y times treat several large (1st or 2nd degree) burns across most of their body alone out in the wilderness?  Also would cauterizing be better than leaving open wounds out in the wilderness?

How could someone in medieval-y times treat several large (1st or 2nd degree) burns across most of their body alone out in the wilderness.

*kicks awkwardly at the ground* So I haven’t been around here a ton lately so I don’t know if you’re still on here much. . . but if you are, I kinda need to know a very specific thing about eye lacerations? It’s ok if you don’t have time. XD But if you do just let me know lol

On the subject of Virtus using his handless arm to punch… I think it would work. It may depend somewhat on what the scar tissue is like, how sensitive the nerves that are left are… But I’m also not missing an appendage, so I wouldn’t know first-hand (pun intended).

Hmm. This may be a question for @the-inkspiller .

I don’t have a reference I can give you,…[Read more]

Yes, I got that email too! A very helpful idea… And I can totally relate about things getting too cliché. It’s so easy to fall into the common “groove” of a genre.

I like how you are trying to brainstorm fresh ideas to change things up. It seems like concepts always sound more cliché than the fully fleshed out idea, so I’m sure y…[Read more]

Would you rather be ignored or be criticized?

Dayton: *snorts* “Either way, I won’t be affected. I care very little about what people think about me. But I suppose I’d rather be criticized than ignored.”

Alan: “Uhh . . . I think I’d rather be ignored. Being criticized all the time would be .…[Read more]

Um, so thoughts…

Prefacing this with the statement that I’m not 100% comfortable giving someone advice/suggestions of this nature because I’m not completely confident in my understanding of God’s word yet.

NOT that I’m not confident in what I believe. That’s not…[Read more]

(Sorry if I missed someone).

So, I went through a difficult time in the last few days, but God used it amazingly to teach me something, and to get rid from a lie I…[Read more]

I struggle with some health problems like anemia and also having panic attacks and light PTSD symptoms, and this poem spoke straight to my heart. I know you wrote it for you, but I feel like it was written for me, for a time when I…[Read more]

Just tagging a few other artists.

I was looking for a good digital art app, and so I asked my brother (who knows everything😄) and he found a place called krita. It’s made by artists, for artists, and although I haven’t…[Read more]

And EEEEEYYYYYY CONGRATS ON HAVING A FINISHED PIECE 😀 😀               *looks at all my unfinished stories* Stop glaring at me, y’all!! I’ll finish you at some point!! Them: Yeah right

Anyways. Yes, love to have ya 😀

@deeprun

Hmm, good point about the ranch p…[Read more]

Yikes, I actually completely forgot about posting my word count… much less writing anything XD Ok, I didn’t forget to write, it just… didn’t happen 😛 So my total for the week is my 1730 ish that I wrote on Wednesday…

@the-inkspiller Noice, noice!

@naiya-dyani Mmh, yeah. *tsk* Wouldn’t be surprised at all. 😛

Ok y’all… I’M…[Read more]