Quinn O'Fallon

@quinn-ofallon  Thank you for your advice! 🙂 I’m not exactly the most techy person so I totally understand the whole learning curve (thankfully I have a good friend who’s a whiz with computer stuff so they help me when I get in a jam 😅).

@josiah Wow, thanks for the great advice! 😃 I’m strongly leaning toward Bluehost because I’ve heard more abo…[Read more]

<p style=”text-align: left;”>Thanks for the feedback @quinn-ofallon !</p>
Do you think “Grandma’s House” or “Grandma’s Ghost” would make for better titles? If not, do you have any other ideas for me?

And I can see what you mean about the first part being kind of bland. What do you think about cutting the first line and the Lazarus line out…[Read more]

@quinn-ofallon Thanks! Ah, that makes sense. This confirms what I was starting to think about the dialogue… it was pretty bland. I’ll try to rewrite it sometime and really put myself into my characters heads. Thank you so much for taking time to check out this story and critique it! 😀

Ok everyone. Tomorrow is the day we have to hand our story in. Get your votes in or it will be decided by those of us who have voted…[Read more]

@brandon-miller  When I think of a sunset, I think of the old saying,

“Red in the morning, sailors warning. Red at night, sailors delight.”

It makes me thing of dedication; Working sun up to sun down.

@quinn-ofallon  I like your idea. If it’s an Israelite battle, we could refer to Joshua 10, which is titled ” The sun Stands still”.
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@quinn-ofallon Theme and “the moral of the story…” is not really my area, but it does sound like some other people had really great ideas. One thing I would add that might help you narrow it down is that you should always ask yourself why the point of the story is vitally important to your character(s) and how they, specifically, can be the…[Read more]

@quinn-ofallon That’s a good idea, because my squirrel characters do understand English (it gets too weird if you don’t blur the line between imagination and reality somewhere). I just took the empty coffee shop thing literally and didn’t consider my options. 😛 BUT…that still leaves me with the question of how I deal with wild animals in human…[Read more]

@quinn-ofallon I loved your description! I could feel the atmosphere while not getting info dumped. 😉 (and your adjectives are perfection)

@josiah thanks! XD I wrote a rough draft in October, and the chapters where she was blind were…interesting, to say the least, so I wanted to make sure I wasn’t entirely crazy 😛

@quinn-ofallon thank you! I’m really considering working on it again soon 😀

@sam-kowal hm, I’ll have to check that out. My biggest concern is how to get the reader…[Read more]

@quinn-ofallon Audrey & the Invizible Man have some good recommendations on this front. My general advice on themes is to think about really difficult, open-ended questions about the topic. For your specific story, perhaps a good question would be: “How long should you stay loyal to someone?” or “How should you figure out who you can trust?”

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@quinn-ofallon Ooh, that’s a nice theme! Lots of fun potential there with possible betrayals 😉

Hm… what about:

– who deserves our loyalty?

– what does it mean to be loyal?

– how far should our loyalty extend? (i.e. to the point of killing someone?)

– why is loyalty necessary?

– what must we do to gain the loyalty of others?

I really love…[Read more]

@quinn-ofallon How about:

Should you stay more loyal towards family over boss/ruler/king/emperor? (Or vice-versa)

Does staying loyal matter, or is it right for one to be constantly changing sides?

What determines what side you are loyal to? Is it money, debt, power, revenge, blood, faith?

Hope this helps

@quinn-ofallon By “focusing question/message”, do you mean the story’s moral? If so, maybe “Why does being/staying loyal matter?”

@quinn-ofallon That sounds like an interesting story! I like your theme! I’m a bit confused, but I think that it’s just because I am currently tired from school/a Scout campout. What do you mean by question/message? Could you give me your story outline? I think that that might help me help you. (That probably made no sense… 😀 )

I understand…[Read more]