Chapter Five: Surprises

Tim had made it safely onto a piece of the floor, and now they were both jumping towards the rows of scrolls. Each row was marked by a symbol that he didn’t…[Read more]

Tagging a bunch of you.

@kimlikesart @tal @beth20 @claire-h @katja-r @melodyjoy @rusted-knight @thedarkninja03 @ariella-newheart @anne_the_noob14 @kristianne-hassman @anne_the_noob14 @dakota

K…so the representatives would get to represent their country, and have a say about the world-wide/universal laws. So they would have to train to know about politics and stuff, as well as athletic games.

If they didn’t win the games, then their country wouldn’t have a say in laws and rules or anything. It be kinda like before th…[Read more]

Siblings:
@kimlikesart My writing sister!
@thedarkninja03 My writing brother!
@purpleturtle My long lost brother!
@claire-h My long lost sister!

Parents:
@eitan My writing father who always has awesome critique!
Mother:

Aunts:
@katja-r My awesome aunt!
@arindown My awesome artist aunt!
@melodyjoy My aunt who loves animals

Sorry if I tagged you and you find it annoying.😆

@kimlikesart @tal @beth20 @lucy @claire-h @katja-r @melodyjoy @rusted-knight @thedarkninja03 @ariella-newheart @anne_the_noob14 @kristianne-hassman @writergirl101

You asked me how am I doing. The general answer – I’m excellent! The detailed – well, yesterday I wrote this poem, after I’d had some hard hours, and in the end, God taught me a very important lesson.

By the way, your care and love are really touching. You showed me how Christians should care for their brethren. Thank you so…[Read more]

Am I allowed to join this?

Here’s the altered picture of Alyce. Is this more what you were thinking of?

I find this thread very interesting, because I’ve been through stuff like this before. Times when I tried to pray, or read my Bible, but it always felt like I didn’t really mean it. And I didn’t know how to mean it.

I don’t really know what to say, but I’m going to say some things anyway.😊

Keep pressing on. Keep praying, and reading, and…[Read more]

the same thing is happening to me too!

@daeus-lamb @josiah do y’all have any ideas as to why this is happening?

I really like your story so far! Keep up the good work!

I think your writing style is great, and your dialogue is good too! However there’s one little thing I want to point out.

Your transitions from scene to scene, are a bit rushed.

Ir just feels a tad rushed when they go to eat dinner, then suddenly, Rydel is contemplating…[Read more]

@katja-r Thanks for tagging me for this!

Okay. Christian movies I’ve loved. All of the Kendricks’, for sure… Overcomer might be my favorite, but I’m still super attached to Facing the Giants and probably always will be. 🥰

I Can Only Imagine makes me cry every time, no matter how many times I’ve seen it. That scene w…[Read more]

Here’s the first chapter of my WIP, a mystery set in the 1920s. All comments, constructive criticism, and observations…[Read more]

Sorry it took me so long.😉 I really liked this part also. Good job.

Btw I really like the name Rydel. I have Rydal as a last name in one of my stories…but I never considered it as a first name.

Great topic!

I don’t have many (if any) names I made up myself; mostly just ones I modified some. But I do frequently have unnamed characters!

One in particular right now is one of the antagonists in my current WIP. (It’s set roughly around the 1600s, I think. I don’t use the same timeline in the book.) I really don’t have him fleshed…[Read more]

Woooaaahhh I like it!! 😀 And hmmm what’s going on with Alyce in Rydel’s dream?? Interesting bunch of things for me (and all readers) to be thinking and wondering about 😀

Woah… Again, wonderful suspense!! I’m gonna be completely honest and say that not many of the books I’ve read have me on the edge of my seat, with bated breath, this quickly. Very nice!

Hey, nice to meet you! I’m a bit on the older side for Story Embers, but it’s always nice to make new acquaintances. I’ll be looking through the thread – I’m also on the *LATE* side of Story Embers, but I’d love to hear more about your story and help where I can. That’s what this community is for, after all! (In the mission of honoring…[Read more]

I like the name Adrian as a first name.

And I like the last names Coburn and Jordon.

Thanks so much for taking the time to do this! This will help me with brainstorming some possibilities 😀

You write really well for having only written seriously for 8 months! It’s kind of been on and off for me . . . I’ve been writing since I was pretty young, but I only started writing more seriously in my teen years. I stopped writing for a couple years, and then started back up a few years ago.

That’s great that you’ve found a plan that…[Read more]

Nice to meet you! Sorry I’m a little late!

You can call me Mayacat. (Or Maya if you’d like, but that might get get confusing since my username comes from one of my characters, Maya. 🙂 So actually, call me Mayacat lol)

I’m from Ohio, I’m homeschooled, and I’m the oldest of eight siblings.I love reading, writing, singing, dancing, art,…[Read more]

Yeah, totally. Super well done movie. There is a book, and a sequel to that book, and the book is better than the movie, and the sequel is better than the book to the movie. XD!

@middleearthmusician

🙂 Nice to meet you, btw- clearly a fellow LOTR fan, and it’s always good to know those who’ll one day be world rulers, you know? Not to…[Read more]

I prefer WWII, too. I really like some of the outfits during that time xD And there’s so much to learn about it as well.

Aw thanks – it is pretty cool living in NZ – lots of gorgeous places 😊

Oh nice! Yes, please do tag me in for your stories.
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@claire-h
Wow…that is pretty special 😊
Yes, Charles S…[Read more]

Good, I’m glad! Maybe I’ll post the whole story on here sometime!

@katja-r

Thanks! Yes, she was pondering. She’s a hurting unit.

Thanks for reading!

-Beth

It really doesn’t matter to me what it starts with, as long as it’s not a weird letter like “X” or “Z” 😉

I would like his last name to mean something to do with the sea, because he comes from a long line of sea captains and it’s his family’s occupation.

That’s so cool!

That’s fine you don’t have a synopsis yet. It took me a while to figure out mine, and I’m still not sure I’m happy with it. 7000 words is a lot–you should be proud of that! I’ve been planning my story for several years and started writing my first draft in December, so I’ve been working on it for a while. 😉

Nice! I…[Read more]

Ok good lol. I always love talking about my characters and I know pretty much every author does, but I always feel like I go off on these huge explanations and then what started out as a “Hey this is my character so-and-so” ends up as an hour-long rant XD Oh cool! No, I haven’t read it yet. I believe someone tagged me already… let me…[Read more]

That’s happening to me too . . .

You’re welcome. I’m glad I could help!

Sorry, I guess I forgot to really describe him . . .

So my story is a fantasy. It sort of has a medieval mixed with an early to late 1800s setting (If that makes sense??). I’m actually not really sure how to describe it because it’s kind of complex. But really any medieval, English-sounding name would work for him.

He’s pretty tall and…[Read more]

Sure, I love getting to know other people!

I’m from the States, but my family has been missionaries in Africa since I was really little. I’ve lived in Quebec, Cameroon, Benin, and currently I live in South Africa . . . so it’s really hard for me to answer the question of where I’m from, lol!

I’m working on a fantasy novel about a…[Read more]

You’re welcome! And yes, if you wanted things to seem slower, then what you did was fine! 🙂

Hey, actually I do need a name lol! It’s a last name so if that counts that would be great haha! The first name is Ethan, he is the main bad guys ‘sidekick’ in my book. I originally had Gruber for his last name. But that was when I was younger and looking back I’m like, what the heck lol! He can communicate with my main bad guy…[Read more]

I like Rydel a lot, and Selena too! She seems like the typical annoying older sister 😀 Great job with the character development and with connecting the first two chapters with this one. I can’t wait to see what happens next!

“Sisters! She always thinks she’s so much more important than me. Just because she’s 10 months older than me.…[Read more]

This will be so helpful! Thank you!

Right now I have a sea captain in my story whom I named Jeremy Dylan, but I don’t really like it. It feels too plain and generic to me, if you know what I mean.

I want his first name to be short but unique. And I want his second name to mean something related to the sea.

Do you have any…[Read more]

Ooh, I really like how the story is going! Alyce seems like a very interesting character.

“There slowly walking through the hall, unaware that anyone was here, was Brian DeGribler, Cavensburg’s best army official.”

This sentence feels a little awkward. Maybe it might work better if you started with Brian DeGribler as the subject: “…[Read more]

That’s a great opening! It definitely pulls me in and makes me want to find out what happens next.

I just have one suggestion:

The flashback and amount of detail kind of slow down the pacing of the story. I would imagine that a scene like this would have a more urgent, panicked feel to it. I would suggest using shorter, choppier…[Read more]

Hey and welcome to SE!

I know I’m kinda a latecomer in saying hello, but anyways – nice to “meet” you 😉

I love your profile pic – it’s so pretty xD

I noticed that you like the WWII era. That and WWI are literally my favourite eras. I love reading about history and writing stories during those two time periods. There’s so much to…[Read more]

Wiggins is on page 37! And then @claire-h drew Kylian. He’s on either page 38 or 39, I believe.

😀 Texas is really awesome. If you ever have a chance, I’d recommend visiting Nacogdoches. One of my favorite places ever.

*grins while rolling eyes* Yep. Hey Marek, Katja has a good point. You have plenty. And they’re all beautiful. Find some other hobbies.

Ooo… Good question… Let me come back to that in a sec 😉

Thank you! I…[Read more]

Ya, I like to doodle around on the piano, which is the instrument I play. I’ve tried the mandolin, but since I was just learning it on my own I found I didn’t have much motivation to learn the harder chords, and so I ended up quitting after a few years of playing. I still sometimes pick it up randomly, but I can’t play much on it with my…[Read more]