Corissa

I tried replying twice a few hours ago, and neither one showed up, so let’s see if third time’s the charm. 😛 😉

@kate I absolutely love that idea!

What would we do with the ending then? Would he still go back to his chimney sweep life, and if so what would that make the theme? Or would we give it a warmer, happier ending, where he does get…[Read more]

@kate I absolutely love that idea! 😀

If we go that route, would we go back to the original thing where he just doesn’t get any recognition and goes back to the chimney sweep life without having any decision to make? Or would we want to give it a warmer ending? Or does he have a choice and he chooses the “new life” since the fire pixie died,…[Read more]

@kate I absolutely love that idea. 😀

I just had a thought; what if he chooses to stay because he’s the only chimney sweep who’s kind to the pixies? What if the other ones are hardened by their masters and tease and torture the pixies, so he feels it’s his duty to protect them? That would give him a semi-good reason to stay, and I could definitely see some 5 year olds believing that…[Read more]

Sounds good! 😀

Anything else we need to sort out, or are we ready to nominate a rough-draft writer?

@kate I love that idea! I think we could use what @chalice said too; maybe there are different fire pixies for each house, and someone just moved into a mansion that’s been abandoned for years, meaning he’s never met these fire pixies, and they happen to be the opposite of whatever general character we choose to give them…

As for the character…[Read more]

@kate Or they would send another boy in, and sometimes both of them would die.

@kate I’ve just now been doing some reading about chimney sweeps, and now I’m practically crying… did you know that they would use children as young as 4? And they would rub brine into their knees and elbows while they were standing next to a hot fire in order to harden the skin, because otherwise it would be rubbed raw while they climbed the…[Read more]

@kate @literatureforthelight Agree with everything here… and I have lots of ideas. But I also really like the little chimney sweep who overhears the plot… and maybe we could break a cliche. Let the boy/girl warn the royalty in person, but even though the royalty decides to humor them and investigate, and is surprised by the truth, they don’t…[Read more]

@kate Hopefully I’ll be able to lend some assistance next time as well. 😉 I can’t wait for the next prompt! 😀

@kate Sorry this reply is so late, but it’s great! 😀 Thanks for all the hard work you put into it!

*prays this works* This is everyone I’ve found on the forum. Let me know if I missed anyone.

@daeus-lamb @kate @lady-iliara @cindy @ethryndal @liv-giordano @r-m-archer @everyone else

@kate I know I’m late to the discussion, but this sounds really good! 😀

Only thing I would add to what @daeus-lamb did is that the phrase “out to get” seems a little out of style with the rest of it. Maybe something like “the same mysterious foe is also after his childhood playmate,” or “the same mysterious foe has sinister plans for his…[Read more]

Please pray for a friend. His name is Samuel, and he works in the tree trimming business. Yesterday he fell 60 feet out of a tree, resulting in multiple rib fractures, a minor spinal fracture, and two minor temporal fractures. His spleen is also lacerated. Thankfully he doesn’t have a concussion, and he’s in stable condition, but they’re keeping…[Read more]

Wow, you guys are awesome. 😀

@kate or @daeus-lamb tag me when the rough draft is done and I’ll help edit it. 😀

Very well done!

Thanks for the tag @Mariposa!

@daeus-lamb Wow. It’s very powerful. A couple of questions:

1: Do you want grammar edits? (I suggested one, and saw a couple others but wondered if the draft was too young to start in on the grammar yet. 😉 )

2: Your impression of God I think was fair, but Menthril… if he represents Adam, does he have a redemption arc? I must admit I find it a…[Read more]

@r-m-archer Praying for you! <3

I have a prayer request as well; this coming Tuesday is my church’s last Good News Club at a nearby primary school until autumn, and I’ll be teaching it. Because it is the last one, and there are so many young tender hearts there who know nothing about the Bible except what we’ve taught them, I feel the…[Read more]

@kate It’s awesome!!!