AshleaAdams

@obrian-of-the-surface-world, I took @storysmith ‘s venom scenario differently

A few drops = paralysis and infection leading to slow death

Small doses = death

Medium doses = death and reanimation into feral, mindless creatures – but not Kragvora.

Large doses = death and reanimation into a full-blown Kragvora.

I’ve seen zombie movies do this…[Read more]

@storysmith

sounds reasonable to me, and adds flavor and options to your writing style.

Hi Joshua (@storysmith),

Are the other characters (non-Kragvora) human?  I would think the lethality of the venom would increase with the dosage.  If a small dosage is lethal, then the victim would be dead before the venom had a chance to permeate its circulatory system or infect tissues.  There are a variety of factors as far as effects that wo…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world @jared-williams

I have thought a little more into the Kragvora’s venomous abilities as they can turn someone into them with their venom. What would a small or medium-dose do to a person? I then came up with a full dose can change someone into them but a medium dose can turn someone into a mad and hungry feral humanoid…[Read more]

@emma-walker I was kind of thinking of switching between characters, depending on where Samantha goes.

It would start with her on a beach, a large city behind her with towering sky scrapers near its center.
I’m a bit busy at the moment, so I’m not sure how quickly I’ll be able to respond, but I will when I can.

Thank you. It’s actually a big part of his character. He regularly puts himself in danger in my stories to protect those he cares about, regardless of the danger to himself. In fact, my first story with Abirami ends with him taking very dangerous essence-boosting pills just to help his family escape the enemy, which puts him in a coma (which is…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

Aw, thank you! Will do

I am actually near the end of this novel. Just one more scene, then the final battle. (and any wrap up after it…) so I may be asking for beta readers soon…

Oh, who’s your chara btw lol 😂

@ajstoryteller Where do we begin?

Okay, I picked a name let’s go!!

Name: Halmar. (Pronounced just like you’d think XD) Often goes by Hal.

Age: Again… not quite sure. I think about 20.

Appearance: Maybe about 6′, looks pretty similar to Mejt. You can definitely tell they’re siblings. Same light, curly hair.

He’s wearing plain, common clothes like Mejt.

Personality: Again……[Read more]

Yes, I only just now got to this. Was it worth it?

ABSOLUTELY

This. Was. Amazing. Your heart and soul seemed to be poured out into this scene, one of those moments where your fingers pound the keys and the scene in your brain just… comes. Beautifully.

Tag me if you ever post more. 🙂

@rose-colored-fancy

Nice to see you again!

Thank you so much, that answers all my questions.  I was aware that longswords are actually pretty light but it slipped my mind… 🙃.  So my boy will have bad bruising, a nasty cut, and lots of stitches.  Got it.

@crazywriter,

OH NO IS IT THAT ONE YOU MENTIONED?!

Sorry, if this is overloading you, but I can’t thank you enough.

Hey, no problem! I have time specifically set apart for critiquing, so it’s just a matter of whether I’m diligent or not. 😛

“There’s many caves in the forest. My people use them often, some are even homes.” K’Nika explained softly, “But like I said earlier, I was mining the rock.”

Kallun nodded and he and Pia both said at the same time, “Lighlorite.”

K’Nika nodded, munching on an onion.

(Oki doke)

“oh, I’m so sorry!” Ellie said placing a fish and a few onion pieces on each “plate”

Julian grabbed the first two she finished for himself and K’Nika.

“how’d you end up in that cave place we were in?” he asked handing her the food

(btw, I’m not sure how active I’ll be over the weekend. going on a trip to a conference)

@jared-williams

Okay, can I just say how much I love that part!? It makes me like Abirami so much more. He was literally willing to take the injuries he’d dealt to the others. That’s an awfully big sacrifice. I love it so much!

@everyone

I think I might drop in Mejt’s older brother. I had an idea for his character and it could be pretty h…[Read more]

@skylarynn

Hi Skylarynn! I believe we met in the villains’ character castle a while ago! Nice to see you again!

Disclaimer, I have next to no medical knowledge, I’ll leave that to @the-inkspiller . However, I have some experience with longswords and some knowledge of medieval stuff (having researched it myself) So I’ll try to give you a partial…[Read more]

Let’s see if I can revive this thread.

@the-inkspiller

So a character of mine (@anne_the_noob14 not Brendin, I swear) had a longsword thrown at his back when he was 17.  I’ve already decided that it miraculously managed to cut his back open from his right shoulder to his left hip, but my questions for you are:

1) Is it possible the impact from…[Read more]

Haha yeah XD

“The thabians attacked us while we were unarmed and not ready. My brother… he tried hiding my sister and I but when I tried to find them… everyone was just… gone.”

“I’m sorry.” Pia said. “I didnt know my father was even thinking of attacking.”

Kallun said nothing. He only nodded.