Ella

@winter_rose, @arindown

Yep, that sounds good.  One group that they can sign up for is called The Operative Unit (TOU, and the spies there are nicknamed “twos”) and I was thinking maybe two or three people per country for that one specifically (sorry for the change of mind…).  Sound good?

Yes.  One winner per competition, so the planet th…[Read more]

Sorry, the quotes didn’t work.

@kristianne-hassman

Wow!  That was amazing!  I only spotted a couple of things that won’t take long to fix.

Kristianne Hassman wrote:
Breathe, I tell myself. In and out. In and out. My heart calms and I lean back, closing my eyes.
Maybe you could use italics to distinguish her thoughts for readability’s sake.  If you decide to do that, then ma…[Read more]

@kristianne-hassman

Wow!  That was amazing!  I only spotted a couple of things that won’t take long to fix.

Maybe you could use italics to distinguish her thoughts for readability’s sake.  If you decide to do that, then maybe you could scan the manuscript and italicize her other thoughts for consistency.

Maybe a synonym here?

Again, re…[Read more]

@kristianne-hassman

Wow!  That was amazing!  There were only a couple of things I noticed.

Maybe you could you italics just to make her thoughts clearer.  I think the readability would be easier.

There are two “help” words in this, so, for readability’s sake, consider using a synonym for one or the other.

I know this leads the reader on…[Read more]

@arindown

No worries.  I’ll just send a bunch of ideas when you’re ready. 😋

@vic

Ok, wait wait wait.  What is happening?!  I need more!! 🙏🙏😃  You can’t just stop there…😁

Great job, btw!  I love reading these.  It’s such a cool idea and you managed to pull it off without adding any gore/language.  Two thumbs up!!👍👍

@arindown, @winter_rose

Ok.  I don’t really like Veturia, and I can’t write about people I don’t like, so I think I’m going to start over with a new character.  She was really undeveloped, anyway, so it’s not like I lost a lot of time.  This character’s from Athenas, middle-class, and a lot less snobby.  Sound cool with you?  (I think her deve…[Read more]

@arindown

Oh, and I forgot the medical branch.

@arindown

Yeah, it’d be more interesting and realistic if they did it differently.

-military

-science

-technology

-diplomats

-judicial branch

-legislative branch

Should there be a president/leader of some kind for each planet?  I think for Athenas, I’ll pattern it after the real Athens and make different leaders who keep each other in…[Read more]

@arindown, @winter_rose

I just had a thought–how many people can win?  It wouldn’t make sense if one person was allowed to win, because there’d only be one country on the “Universal Council”.  So…

Oh, wait, what if there are different positions on the council (science, military, etc.) so the Gladiators (is that what we’re calling them?) can s…[Read more]

@arindown

Sorry, I forgot about the futuristic America.

I think 1 person per country because hunger games has 2.

Umm, I will think on that one…  should it be a guy or girl?  Or maybe it could be a syndicate or something, idk.

@arindown

Great job!  That’s looks really good!!😃

I’m at my gym, so I’ll introduce my characters later. 😊

I like Candi’s personality.  She’ll be a challenging competitor…

Quick question—are the games confined to each country, or is it kind of like a bracket for March Madness?  Because it’d make more sense for the lead planner to make…[Read more]

@winter_rose

Well, you’ll just have to use that quirk somewhere in your writing, right? 😋

@winter_rose, @arindown

Have y’all already done the 16personalities/Myers-Briggs test for your MCs yet?  I haven’t, but I wanted to ask that before I forgot. 😉

@winter_rose, @arindown

Btw, I have two friends that might join this project–they’re in the process of registering.  Just so you know.