Catherine Roche

@writercatherine
@steward-of-the-pen

American Monday MORNING this time is fine. Ideally Sunday, but seeing that I didn’t get told about it until Australian Tuesday, we have one day’s worth of a disadvantage. Plus, Jane’s Aussie, so, we have a bit of time. 😛

Sooner it’s done, the better though.

@writercatherine The deadline is Monday the 17th, but I believe in the past we had to have it done on American Sunday so Jess could get it in on her time.

Gah. Time zones still make my head hurt xD

Okay Parimis!

I’ve spent most of today tackling our entry, and have added a lot more character voice. That’s made the prose stronger, but to be honest, ‘unique’ is a rather cryptic phrase. However, we need to cut down a few words. So, cutting back is appreciated!

Once again, here is the…[Read more]

@writercatherine  Hah, we’re not the ones you have to beat! Avensbeck is the guild that wins everything XD They’re awesome!

@writercatherine You’re very welcome! It was my honor and great joy to embark on such an adventurous endeavor. And no, I don’t take it as everyone picking on my writing. You’re all helping me to learn how to better my skills at this craft.

STELLAR WORK PARIMIS!!!!!

(Yes, I’m tagging you all cos I really will get confused with all of the scrolling and hunting for what different people have said. :P)

PROSE: Haha, Shakespeare is probably not an ideal thing to be weaving in. Doesn’t fit allllll that well. However, in general, we will need to be working on making the prose really…[Read more]

@evelyn Whoops, I guess the link got lost way back there xD Here it is.

I agree that Shakespearean doesn’t really fit the story. By meter do you mean the amount of syllables in each sentence? *knows nothing about poetry* I doubt we could make it work here, but it sounds really cool!

For now we’ll just try to eliminate telling and then see what…[Read more]

@cassie-hartfinh @j-a-penrose @steward-of-the-pen @writercatherine

First off, thank you Cassie!  I enjoyed it.  Great job.

As for my thoughts: I do agree about the ending seeming just a little bit on the abrupt side.  I’ll try and think of a suggestion how to make it a bit better…(note-important word: “try”).

I think that we need just a li…[Read more]

@cassie-hartfinh Aweome! Thank’s for getting us started. The ending does seem a bit abrupt. I think there needs to be some other conflict like we talked about earlier. That way we’re giving the character something to do as she struggles with the hope thing. That’s going to be hard to do with the word limit, but I think we can pull it off. I once…[Read more]

@writercatherine I think this is what you were looking for.

@coggleton I think the tech-level biomes is a good idea, with the biomes getting less and less populated the farther away from high tech we get.

@writercatherine Haha, Ima lil late, but XD Yes, it was this past weekend that I flew to my grandparents. Now my apartment is full of unpacked boxes and bins. But at least everything is here now!! Yay! 😀

Huh! I don’t remember seeing that guild name. Cool! Hehe, worldbuilding is sooooo much fun! Good luck! And BRING IT ON! XD

Okay, sorry that I’ve been kinda chaotic and sporadic and stuff lately guys, but things have kinda been blegh and yeah. Anyways. I am here now and hopefully can make some suggestions.

BASICALLY, what @ariella-newheart summarised is what we are going with.

I really enjoy the ideas that are being thrown around, and my one concern is that we do…[Read more]

@writercatherine I think they’re metal/bronze to go along with the steampunk feel.

@ariella-newheart Nice map!!

Okay, all of this sounds absolutely stellar. Like, really guys. Good job. I’m impressed.

NOTE: @steward-of-the-pen is close, there is a 2500 word limit. Jane only has so much time to go through all of them.

*sits back to think*

1. Plotline sounds brilliant, unique, and generally awesome.
2. The character sounds stellar.
3. The resulting c…

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