Lyrical Poems are Welcome here!

[Dakota]

@jane-maree @jillifish @parker @esther-sears @e-b-raulands   @mariposa  @andrew   @writercatherine  @daeus-lamb  @wordsmith @serenity @ericawordsmith   (If you are not interested in poetry, than ignore the fact that I tagged you. I just tagged a bunch of you (most of you I have previously interacted with on SE ) so there would be a ‘ multitude of counselors’. If you know anybody would be interested in this, please send them over.)

OKAY! (deep breath) I’m going to launch a new poetry thread for those who have written more lyrical poems. Feel free to add yours. All poetry experts-feel free to critique and encourage.

 

So here’s mine . . .  “No Other Way but This”

If the path to Calvary I pass by,
Heaven’s glory shall never brighten my eye;
To reach the new Paradise and its bliss,
There is no other way to walk but this.
Rugged is the way and rough is the cross
Yet I must take it up or all life is lost.

If the kingdom of heaven I would seek,
I must serve as a servant, lowly and meek.
To reign in the kingdom of His bliss,
There is no other way to work but this.
Serving for my King-’tis nobler a part;
So please give me a truer and nobler heart.

If the crown of eternal life I’d win,
I must conquer the tyrant of self within.
To rest in the land of perfect bliss,
There is no other war to wage but this.
Mighty is the foe and long is the race;
Yet I must endure all, for naught can replace.

If to claim only Christ seems a harsh creed,
Remember that the rewards shall far exceed.
To reach the new Paradise and its bliss,
There is no other way to walk but this.
Rugged is the way and rough is the cross;
Yet I must take it up or all is lost. 
Feel free to speak up, point out any flaws or make any suggestions ( or give any praise) you like.

For my Audience of One, all the glory be!

 

• This topic was modified 6 years ago by Dakota.

Psalm 119:11
Your word I have hidden in my heart,
That I might not sin against You.

[Andrew Schmidt]

@dakota, nice poem! 🙂

Tagging some people: the-fledgling artist, jenwriter17, @nuetrobolt, evelyn, @wordsmith, @carolyn-matthew.

Random Stranger: "What do you want to do when you grow up?"
Me: "Write every inch of your future."

[Andrew Schmidt]

Tags I misspelled because of my Mr. Bad Habit: @evelyn and @carolyn-matthews

Random Stranger: "What do you want to do when you grow up?"
Me: "Write every inch of your future."

[Dakota]

@andrew Thank you- for your opinion and for tagging Wordsmith for me! 🙂  For some reason my computer wouldn’t tag him.

Psalm 119:11
Your word I have hidden in my heart,
That I might not sin against You.

[Andrew Schmidt]

@dakota, you’re welcome. 🙂

Random Stranger: "What do you want to do when you grow up?"
Me: "Write every inch of your future."

[Andrew Schmidt]

Grhhh. *just realizes* I forgot to tag these tags right too: @jenwriter17 & @the-fledgling-artist.

It seems I have been doing things like this recently. I’ll try to prevent it. But oh well. I did really well in grammar, but here I am making mistakes… and I would edit the mistakes, but I’m afraid I don’t know how to do that.

*straightens* Now enough of that. I’m not trying to make my all errors known to SE. *rolls eyes at the keyboard, then continues writing*

Random Stranger: "What do you want to do when you grow up?"
Me: "Write every inch of your future."

[Dakota]

@andrew It’s ok. Trust me. I’m not a professional anything, much less a typist or orator.  🙂

Psalm 119:11
Your word I have hidden in my heart,
That I might not sin against You.

[Evelyn]

@andrew Mr. Bad Habit is an annoying being!! Just don’t send him my way… I run into him waaay too often. 😉

@dakota Great idea to start this thread. I love your poem by the way! It’s beautiful and reminds me of the dying art of hymns. I wish our culture as a whole would write and sing more hymns. They are just so beautiful and rich.

The majority of my poems aren’t very lyrical, but I have tried my hand at songs before. I just wish I had the voice and talent to sing and create music to go along with them!! Haha, maybe I’ll get my brother’s band to add it to their Ep. 😉

 

[The Fledgling Artist]

@dakota  That was great, thank you for sharing it with us! I agree with Evelyn, it would make a beautiful hymn.  How long have you been writing poetry? You’re quite good at it!

"Though I'm not yet who I will be, I'm no longer who I was."

[Parker Hankins]

Oh, this is so beautiful!!! I love it!!!!!

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[Jenna Terese]

@dakota This is BEAUTIFUL! 😀

"If you want to change the world, pick up your pen and write." -Martin Luther
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[Jane Maree]

@dakota I love this!! Have you put it to music or anything yet?

 

This is one of my songs that I’ve written, I’m thinking about recording it at some point too. 😀 It’s called Be Still.

 

See the glory in the heavens, majesty proclaimed
Endless hallelujah, all the earth shouts His name
His handiwork declares his grace
Creation rises, singing praise

 

{Chorus}

So be still and listen
All creation points to Him
Lift your eyes and see His grace
Creator, Artist, Author, King

 

 

See the wonder in the sunrise, colour echoing
A thousand shades of beauty, singing glory to their King
Manifested all around
Shout aloud a glorious sound

 

See the peace in the twilight, glory up above
Never-ending galaxies, like never stopping love
And he knows them all by name
They together sing His fame

 

See the pow’r in creation—a mountain tow’ring to the sky
And the tiny lines of detail that lift his name on high
Craftsmanship by heavenly hands
Spread his love like grains of sand

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[Serenity]

@dakota, that’s beautiful! I cant wait to see more of your stuff!

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[Libby]

@jane-maree Your song is so…beautiful!  I love the chorus, most of all this line: Creator, Artist, Author, King.  Just making the connection between all of those attributes and characteristics through your song is so neat.

@dakota Nice going with your song, too!  It does remind me a bit of a hymn, and there’s a lot of truth packed into it.

So here’s my song.  I’m afraid it’s not a Christian song, necessarily, but it’s a song I wrote when I visited California in June.  Hope you all enjoy – and I’d love feedback!

Where the water meets the sky
Blurring the horizon
Ships are sailing on the clouds
To the world above.
Waves are standing still,
Waiting until
It fades away;
Music from the ocean’s shore
Calls me now to stay.

Sailboats sway in a waltz with the sea
Seagulls laugh as they call out to me
In the sky, so beautifully free.
Silently, I watch them fly away.

Twilight rests upon the waves,
Dancing in the sunlight;
Aft, abroad, the seabirds fly
Down the westward road.
Sun is sinking low,
Turning to go
Beyond the sea.
Night has ended day,
Washed far away
Endlessly.

If you wonder where am I,
Beyond the sunshine’s glare
Where the water meets the sky,
You will find me there.

Elen síla lúmenn' omentielvo

[Jane Maree]

@libby Thank you!! It was a song inspired by creation and Psalm 19 “the heavens declare the glory of God.” 😊

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