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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Short Story here! in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 4 months ago
I did wonder whether their tardiness had to be better explained, and your insight confirms it. The idea was that only Wren is truly aware of the danger, thanks to her nursemaid, but being a little girl and wanting to please her friend, she is easily guiled into staying out longer. I will revise the story to convey that…[Read more]
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Vivian Grant started the topic Short Story here! in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 4 months ago
Hello, all! I have a short story in need of beta-reading. What I’m mainly concerned about is the story: is it intriguing enough? Does it have a smooth(ish) flow?
Hope you enjoy it!
https://www.dropbox.com/s/tsimipvyfeix7qf/The%20Smilers%20of%20Carmadyne.docx?dl=0
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Book Description Feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 4 months ago
Thank you. I will leave a link to the story below for you whenever you have the time.
https://www.dropbox.com/s/tsimipvyfeix7qf/The%20Smilers%20of%20Carmadyne.docx?dl=0
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Book Description Feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 4 months ago
Here is the revised version.
Every night, from dusk to dawn, Carmadyne town is invaded by mysterious humanoids. In fear of the creatures, no person ventures from their homes until the sunrise. Nine-year-old Wren complies with the curfew without questioning the reason behind it— until one night, when she decides to ask her n…[Read more]
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Book Description Feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 4 months ago
Thank you both for responding. I will be sure to consider your feedback and advice.
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Vivian Grant started the topic Book Description Feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 4 months ago
Hello, all. I am in the process of creating a description for my short story, and would like some feedback on the current mockups. Seeing that the story is short, it is difficult for me to include more information without giving anything away. Advice on how to write compelling descriptions would also be welcome. 🙂
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Prologue feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 11 months ago
Thank you both for the feedback.
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Prologue feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 11 months ago
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Prologue feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 11 months ago
Thank you. I really don’t know how this keeps happening. 😛
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Vivian Grant started the topic Prologue feedback in the forum Fantasy Writers 1 year, 11 months ago
This is a one-page prologue to a larger story of mine, and I would like some feedback from anybody on whether it has a large enough hook. Would you continue reading after this introduction?
https://www.dropbox.com/home?preview=Prologue.docx
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Short story for beta-readers in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years ago
Thank you for the feedback. I do see ways I could foreshadow the kidnapping a little more, because it is such a big part of the story.
Hmm, Zrorar… I put him into the beginning as a brief example of how adored and desired Phoenix was. He isn’t really supposed to have an actual role beyond that, and I think that expanding on his…[Read more]
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Short story for beta-readers in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years ago
Thank you! I’m glad you liked it.
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Short story for beta-readers in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years ago
Thank you! I would greatly appreciate it.
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Short story for beta-readers in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years ago
Next weekend would work great, but again, you can come to it whenever you have time.
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Short story for beta-readers in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years ago
I appreciate the reply. I don’t have much of a deadline, and hopefully at least one person can critique it for me, so we’ll just see what happens.
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Vivian Grant started the topic Short story for beta-readers in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years ago
Hello, all! I have a short story that is in need of critique. I will tag those who have already beta-read my work, but anyone else’s opinion would be appreciated.
@urwen-starial @anne_the_noob14 @taylorclogston @sam-m
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Vivian Grant commented on the post, 3 Ways a Biblical Doctrine of Sin Should Revamp How You Create Characters 2 years ago
Thank you for this article! I sometimes make my characters flawed, but not to a satisfying extent. Hopefully this will prompt me to be a little more daring.
I recently read a book called The Thief, and the main character is so unique and differently flawed that he truly seems like a real person.
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Flash Fiction-Beta Readers 🙂 in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years ago
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Flash Fiction-Beta Readers 🙂 in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 1 month ago
I am comfortable with email, though wouldn’t you just post the content here or on your blog?
I would love to read more like this! All of the brief examples sound fun. Keep at it!
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Flash Fiction-Beta Readers 🙂 in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 1 month ago
It was hilarious, but I think that it ended too quickly. I’m not sure that it needs much action, just more dialogue. I’m not saying that action wouldn’t work (the author making orcs show up just to scare Lucas would be pretty funny), just that the main theme was about an argument between author and character.
Is this scene taken…[Read more]
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