Michael Erasmus

Hades Irving
Age: 19
Personality: Defaults to a calm, emotionless persona. In reality, Hades possesses a passive anger, is aggressive and bears a low self-esteem. Strongly loathes needles and being touched by most people.
Appearance: White hair, gray eyes, a little above six feet, sturdy build, robotic left arm made of black…[Read more]

@inkhorn and @rose-colored-fancy IKR?! I’ve been busy too.

@inkhorn

Ohhh, same XD Everyone has been more or less absent. when there are some more folks I’ll join in again! I’m considering taking out Halmar and Mejt (Their story has been moved to the back burner for now) and drop in some other characters from a mystery I’m plotting.

@sparrowhawk

Scene Questions

1.       Is there anything that stood out to you as intriguing about this scene?

The whole mystery surrounding the Resolve was really cool! After reading @obrian-of-the-surface-world ‘s comments I also became intrigued about why Crin just allowed some of his resolve to be stolen…. very inter…[Read more]

(also very late to the party XD)

But yes, I just wanted to say that I LOVE your passion, man! Showing that deep, raw side of God in fantasy is something that hasn’t been shown very often, and I think it’s a good thing.

I’ve wanted to write/help write such stories myself, so this really resonates with me.

So my answer is: Write it, man! Trust…[Read more]

I know that I have neglected this castle for several weeks and will, unfortunately, have to neglect for several more weeks. I’ll try to post something within three weeks. 🙂

Sorry for the delay replying 😁

Alessio crept on the deck, wary for the slightest move.

He expected people there. At least a smattering.

But it’s empty.

With a slow, soft inhale Alessio rehearses everything in his mind again. This is where the man said to meet him, He had a plan to stay alive, he needed to know what his enemy’s mot…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy @k-a-grey

Thank you both so much! I use repetition/refrain often for songs, but lately I’ve started using it in regular poetry. I was concerned that repetition would bore people.

It’s nice to meet you as well, K. A. Grey, and thanks for the stanza tip. I did fragment the lines for emphasis, but that is a good point on readability.

@e-n-leonard Hey there, fellow poet! Nice to meet you!

This is beautiful!! Nice use of repetition.  My only critique might be to split it up into stanzas to make each “I am a …” stand out, and perhaps combine some lines instead of fragmenting it to make it easier to read.  But splitting up lines can also add more emphasis too, so it’s up to y…[Read more]

@e-n-leonard

Fair warning, I’m not at all a poet, I’ve never written poetry.

However, I loved this! It gets a clear message across, I love the format with a repeating pattern!

They walked for miles suffering the miserable heat.

“How long is it until we reach wherever?” Julian asked

Pia also took her place at the front, pike gripped in one hand.

Kallun walked in the back, figuring if they were attacked from behind he’d be the best at combat there. K’Nika walked Beside him.

“Yes, let’s.” Ellie said.

Finn went forward so he was in the lead, and the others followed

(It’s totally okay!)

“Thank you, Ellie.” K’Nika smiled a little bit. “Let’s get going.”