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Scene Questions

1.       Is there anything that stood out to you as intriguing about this scene?

The whole mystery surrounding the Resolve was really cool! After reading @obrian-of-the-surface-world ‘s comments I also became intrigued about why Crin just allowed some of his resolve to be stolen…. very interesting….

2.       What would you say the mood was of this scene?

probably a lot of frustration coming from both Malar and Crin, so a lot of tension in general. I liked it!

3.       What character(s) in this scene would you like to know more about?

Hmm… probably Crin the most

4.       Which character, if any, do you feel the most empathy toward in this scene alone?

Mmmm… that’s hard. Since it’s first person I connect with Malar, but the whole argument I sided with Crin so….  Crin? idk😂

5.       Which of the following, as a reader, do you wish I had developed more fully in this scene?

a.       Setting

I thought you did the setting great! not too much, but enough for me to get my bearings and imagine most everything.

b.       Character thoughts and motivations

Um, I think they’re thoughts/views were pretty clear, maybe a tiny bit more on deep motivations- i’m so sorry my brain’s not working rn xP When I was listening to it, I understood it, but now I can’t remember so I think you were good

c.       Character appearance and/or mood expressions

Not really- it flowed nice and everything was pretty easy to imagine even without specifics

6.       Do you feel that the dialogue in this scene flows or is mechanical and stilted?

I thought it flowed well! When Malar got a bit dramatic near the end felt a tiny bit off, but not too much- maybe more lead-in to those comments? idk

7.       Did you learn something in this scene that you wondered about in a previous scene?

Sowwy I don’t understand this question. ack. xP

8.       Did this scene make you want to read more scenes? (Why or why not?)

Yeah, I think it did! it was intriguing and I wanted to know how this would play out/my questions would get answered

9.       Is there any part of the scene that you personally felt did not belong?

Not really. The dramatic lines near the end with Malar seemed only slightly off, but not so much that I’d say it “didn’t belong.” So I think just more build-up to them would help fit it in and maybe reveal some more motivations

10.   What, if anything, would you change about this scene to make it more interesting to you?

Well, that little bit about Malar’s motivations (like, why does he feel like he’s been born to die? is there more behind it than just patriotism?) leading up to his dramatic line that he immediately regrets (love that bit of humor btw XD), but not really anything else that I can think of. Maybe a tiny bit more description, maybe of Crin’s face when he hands Malar his knife back, just to give a little hint at what he’s thinking. But really, great scene! I loved it!

(and yep i’m super late to the game so sorry if this is now irrelevant 😂)

God bless! Hopefully I can do a little recording soon. XD