Maddie Morrow

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  • #97028

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @jennythefaun
    Ooh, I love this world. Very cool story.

    1. I wasn’t confused at all. It was mysterious, but not confusing.

    2. For the most part I really liked it. The first sentence, however, tripped me up an awful lot. The first and second half just seemed so identically that I had to do a double take. But I thought the rest of the story flowed nicely.

    3. I thought it was a perfect balance. Not enough to give all the answers, but plenty so I wasn’t lost.

    4. I thought this was a good balance too. It made he setting unique, and identifiable as being from your other story.

    5. She was very distant. I actually didn’t gain a whole lot about her personally, however that didn’t strike me as being bad. It fit the whole dreamy, otherworldly feel the story had. If I had to describe her I’d say she’s a bit of a mad scientist sort. It seems like she really did her research and she’s got crazy dedication to finding out the truth.

    6. I was curious, but not emotionally attached to him. Mostly because I didn’t have much to go on. He was obviously dragged a long way up, suffering all the while, and supposedly killed. But there was nothing that told me why he was a hero, or why I should care about him as a person, and not just a mystery.

    7. Yes!!

    8. I don’t think it’s bad. I’m horrible at titles though, so I can’t help in that area XP

    #96874

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @kb-writer
    A young adult dystopian novel with a western twist.

    #96780

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @i-david
    Thanks!!

    All that being said, just because my creative well is sort of dry at the moment, if any of you wonderful knapsack toting adventurers have an idea or thought you’d like to share, don’t hold back. You don’t have to run everything by me, and guildlings are more than welcome to start activities that the guildmaster did not. I will cheer on and support any endeavors you guys undertake!

    @samantha-pen @hgm_barnes18 @heather-drabant @kb-writer @inspirewrite @duskflower @kjames0813 @ireneadler
    @kari-karast @i-david
    @donna-darling @kr-lalonde
    @the-golden-light @jennythefaun
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    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @KenzEnigma @matthewroland

    #96700

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    Sleep? Sleep? What is sleep????

    Sorry guys. Not sleeping—at all actually. Just growing a tiny human, while keeping a slightly larger tiny human alive, and trying to rewrite a novel in time for #faithpitch

    #96413

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer
    Hi! So glad you found us!

    Alright, so for things to do, Knaphollow is currently in a word war (I believe I tagged you to it) over on the general forum. For that all you do is keep track of the words you write (creatively—no grocery lists allowed, unfortunately for me) and then submit them on the form linked in that post. Super simple.
    We just finished up a prompt war, but another should happen within the next couple weeks. I’ll be sure to tag you so you can join in and see what it’s all about.

    Other than that, it’s a free for all around here. Activity has slowed down a bit what with everyone going back to school, but if you tag people they’ll hop on and interact. I’ll attach the group of gas that are all Knaphollow at the bottom. Feel free to copy and paste them into any post you make so people see it.

    Use the topic areas as much as you like. You can post things for critique, either directly in the forum, or leave a google docs link if it’s long. Several people have recently left links to books they’ve published.
    October we will be doing a genre mashup game.
    So really, any questions, book topics, writing topics, or just plain old fun you’d like to share, feel free.

    Welcome our new member guys!

    @samantha-pen @hgm_barnes18 @heather-drabant @kb-writer @inspirewrite @duskflower @kjames0813 @ireneadler
    @kari-karast @i-david
    @donna-darling @kr-lalonde
    @the-golden-light @jennythefaun
    @bekah @samberg0
    @naomi-sowell @misspenguin @mckinley @another_chance @fairfay @kori @writingwgrace @chloe @his-bard @toklaham-veruzia @ryowildfire @sailorj @willa
    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @KenzEnigma @matthewroland

    #96410

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay
    #96000

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @heather-drabant
    This is so fun! Thanks for putting it together and I’m looking forward to October. Love your story too. The word usage really solidified the Amish feel.

    Here is mine! Sorry, google docs isn’t working on my phone. I went with the Western Phycological Thriller. Not sure how well I pulled that off, but it sure was fun.

    Spurs jingle on the wooden boardwalk with every step, scraping my nerves.

    Chink. Chink. Chink.

    Lanterns swing from the awnings of businesses lining the dusty street, casting shadows that loom and shrink back like uncertain predators, waiting for the perfect opportunity to strike.

    I duck into the nearest open door—a saloon, with only slightly less shadows.

    The shadow of a man passes the doorway and the spurs go chinking on by.

    I cross the room to the back, the sawdust coating the floor biting at my nose.
    I settle down at an empty table and study the few other patrons.

    A tired looking saloon girl, sitting upright and rigid like her red costume is made of iron.

    Two men at a card table, but neither one shows any signs of playing the cards laid out in front of them.

    The barkeep keeps his gaze firmly fixed on the glass he’s buffing. I don’t really want a drink anyway, but it’s strange he doesn’t offer.

    In the back corner opposite me, a lone figure with his hat pulled over his eyes plays a mournful fiddle, the bow scraping along the protesting strings, almost as frayed as my nerves.

    Jitters drive me back to my feet and I step out onto the rickety sidewalk as a clap of thunder shakes the sky and lightning illuminates the places the lamps won’t reach.

    The darkness that follows is dense enough to feel and I linger where the lanterns cast a reassuring glow as rain starts to pelt the dusty landscape. It rattles against the windows and overhangs, puffing dust into the air until the whole street is saturated. Thunder grumbles grudgingly and water starts to run in little rivers down the packed street.
    Probably be another gully washer…maybe even a flash flood. They’re common this time of year.
    Time to find some cover on high ground.

    Whoever built this ride-through town must have been a tender foot. It sprawls in the back of a long valley, coming down out of the lonely mountains on the horizon. Lightning dances across their gloomy peaks now. It won’t be long before all that water comes rushing right down to the front steps.

    I start back the way I’d come, toward the livery stable. I’d hoped to get a room tonight, but prospects are slim. I’ll bed down in the hayloft, safe from water, and close to my gelding if I need to swim out come morning.

    The water is already ankle deep on my boots as I step off the boardwalk. It sloshes and ripples, melding with the crack of lightning overhead into a deafening chorus that drowns out all sound. But I thought I heard…

    I turn to face the street behind me, and wait for the next lightning strike to illuminate it once again. But the street is empty, and no one else is on the walks.

    I could have sworn I heard those spurs again…

    I slosh across the street and shove the barn door open just enough to slip in, before closing it again.

    Water already seeps in underneath, mingling with the straw and dust. Inside the barn is pitch dark, but I’m not anxious to light a lantern.

    I feel my way down the aisle to the third stall. It’s at the back, but there’s a smaller door that I could fit an unsaddled horse through. If need be.

    My gelding nickers softly as I slip into the stall with him. I gently run a hand down his neck, then adjust my gun belt, slipping the thong off the hammer.

    I watch the front door a long minute then settle down in the dusty straw at the geldings feet. His breath snuffles over me, and then he goes back to contentedly munching the hay in his manger.

    I strain my ears for any sound, but all I hear is his chewing, the steady breathing of the other horses, and rain drumming on the roof. Along with my heartbeat.

    They can’t have followed me this far. I rode halfway across the country, up and down back trails no sane person would ever take. I’d left no trail. Spoke to no one. I’m just being paranoid, that’s all. Besides, the money isn’t here any way. No one can connect me to it. Now way out here. I tell myself that over and over again, but it does nothing to calm my heart.

    But a sound from outside stills it.

    Chink. Chink. Chink.

    I slowly shift into a crouched position, sliding my pistol out of the holster. I force my breathing to slow, placing a steadying hand on the geldings shoulder as I stand and lean against his neck, gun ready.

    I don’t know who is out there. But coincidences don’t follow you around in a storm. It’s going to end right here and I’m getting out of town tonight. The rain will cover my trail. I’ll disappear.

    The barn door creaks, but it’s too dark outside to see if anyone comes in yet or not.

    I ease the hammer back.

    Chink. Chink. Chink.

    #95814

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @i-david

    This is very good!! It’s obviously a little hard without knowing the melody to it, but the rhythm of the words themselves is very good. It’s got good cadence.

    What is your plan for your songs? Do you want to sing then yourself, or do something more like Ben Glover and sell them to singers? Or are they just for fun? I’m so curious. I used to write songs all the time. Thanks for sharing!

    #95813

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay
    #95812

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay
    #95626

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    Thanks guys!

    #95199

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @ryowildfire
    Love that idea!! I used to do so many mini stories like that and loved it. It’s been years.

    #95198

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    I will try and join in on this, because I absolutely LOVE this idea. My next couple weeks are pretty busy, but with the small word count I think I can do it.

    #95009

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay

    @the-golden-light
    A trade idea might be perfect! I guess it all sort of depends on how many end up participating in critiques. If there’s only say, three or four, I think everyone could probably find time to read all of them most weeks. But if ten of us all join in then we’ll definitely need to find a way to simplify things a bit. It could also be something along the lines of we have a partner for the week, but anyone who is specifically interested in our premise is free to offer critique as well, just not required too. Size of the submissions will also play a factor. If someone decides to turn in a five chapter, fifty page section, that’s gonna be all I get to read for the week. But if five people all submitted tiny flash fiction pieces, I’d have no trouble looking at all of them.

    #95007

    Maddie Morrow
    @maddiejay
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