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@noah-cochran

You do that.

I’m going to try training it first (I want a dragon mount to rush into battle with) but if that doesn’t work, bring a sword just in case 😉

That sounds excellent! I’m looking forward to seeing it.

I look forward to finishing it XD It’s going to be lovely but it’s also an embodiment of my vast overconfidence in my a…[Read more]

@inkhorn

I’ll say Mejt. She seems like an intriguing character (and she’s got a cool name)

Awesome! I’m leaning toward her too, just because I’ll be writing her story first (probably)

@denali-christianson

Ha! Soooo I neglected to mention this, but I’m going to be fasting tech for Lent, which means I’m not going to be on SE at all…

Okay! Have a go…[Read more]

@everyone

Ha! Soooo I neglected to mention this, but I’m going to be fasting tech for Lent, which means I’m not going to be on SE at all… I don’t have time to read through everyone’s posts, so assume that Evie, Niarok, and Yila’s body just suddenly disappeared as I’m putting them into another part of the Castle and then y’all don’t have to…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

Aw, thanks!! I shall recording chapter one tomorrow. It’s a pretty boring chapter but it explains the backstop of the world and introduces most of the important characters so it’s kind of necessary. I think. My alpha reader thinks it’s awful (thanks again, sis) but it’s still kind of important. I think. Isn’t that right @this-is-not-…[Read more]

@erynne,

GIRL.

I. LOVE. IT.

I MUST READ MORE

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Wow. Remind me what app you use to record this!?!?

One thing I did notice was that the “its” in this sentence should be “her”

bride extending its fingers

You seem to enjoy descriptions (all of which are gorgeous, BTW!!!!!!!), but remember that descriptions can take out…[Read more]

I loved reading it! He isn’t as nice, but he’s so much more interesting! I like it a lot more!

Thank you! I enjoyed writing him this way.

Who do y’all vote for?

I’ll say Mejt. She seems like an intriguing character (and she’s got a cool name)

@obrian-of-the-surface-world You’re more than welcome! It was a very intriguing scene, and I hope Christie does eventually find Laura!

Thank you, Emily! @emily-waldorf

That is EXACTLY what I was looking for.  I realize my difficulties but sometimes get puzzled on how to break them down and simplify them.
Sometimes I read other works that seem overly poetic and pack in a bunch of layered metaphors so much that they lose the gist of the action.  Allusions, similes, and poetic v…[Read more]

@o-brian-of-the-surface-world

Ah, I see! Perhaps I can help.

It did sound somewhat wordy. In general, I love words and applaud their use, but without the dramatic reading I had the privilege to hear, I think the reader will be a little swamped by them. For instance:

A burst of white light, strobed out of a column of opalescent fire, burning her…[Read more]

@emily-waldorf

Thank you, Emily!

I think I need to chop up some of the lengthy sentences.  Some authors know intuitively where to break them up into fragments that mimic speech, but my mind keeps clawing back to grammar rules.
I noticed that intense scenes in other novels I read are often written in short punchy and clipped prose.  I do have a s…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

Swedish is good! I’m part Swedish. 🙂 That’s pretty! I’d love to meet her, too, so take my vote for what it’s worth, lol–I’m terrible at decisions!

@emily-waldorf

I vote for Ophelia and Athena–or all three! But you must tell me how to pronounce Mejt. I must know, lol!

Awesome! *Takes a note*

As far as I could find, it’s pronounced May-et, though she often goes by May, because in-story it’s a foreign name and everyone ends up calling her May anyway XD

It’s actually a Swedish name which m…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

I vote for Ophelia and Athena–or all three! But you must tell me how to pronounce Mejt. I must know, lol!

(Pia has depressed lots of people it’s okay)

“No.” Kallun said softly, fingering Pia’s cheek. “Betrothed.”

Pia pulled away rom I’m slightly and turn to Julian. “It’s not you. I just… I’m too much like my father than I’d like to admit. But sometimes words will…” She shrugged, “I guess my father’s words always hurt worse than any punishment he ga…[Read more]

@emily-waldorf

I just subscribed! And it’s so refreshing to see Aydin as a bigger person. (that sounded weird, but whatever).

Thank you! I really appreciate it!

Oh, yes, absolutely! This is so different from his pre-arc interactions with Chantara, I was shocked. He used to be much more tolerant toward her, it’s very satisfying to see him get r…[Read more]

(Dunno why I’m getting upset over this scene. It’s like it’s a friend telling me they don’t belong because of me. It’s got me sad XD)

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(Honestly didn’t think Pia could make me sad but here we are)

“No, don’t leave, Pia.” Eliana said. “I know Julian can be hard to deal with at times, but that doesn’t mean you should leave! I know he has a…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world. I think the pacing was good–it certainly was in the dramatic read-through, but then I get bamboozled by the epic music, and lost in the storm of  the words so…I’d have to read it again to see if the piece itself is paced well. I loved your music, btw!

@rusted-knight oh my! How characteristic of Klein, and yet so unexpected. Poor guy…he can’t protect every one in the world. :'(

Klein set up his rifle quietly. He would hold back and remain on overwatch while the others moved forward. When they moved. The others were looking over the prisoners. None of them looked like good characters. Then he saw one chain in an interesting way. The others had the usual shackles. This one was chained at the waist and ankles. As Klein…[Read more]

I haven’t posted one of these in a while so I thought I’d put one more out here, just to see what you all thought of the pacing of this…[Read more]