J.A.Penrose

Young messenger dragon misunderstands. Brings the note to a rabbit sticking it’s pink nose in a hollow tree. Re-sends note’s address. 

@j-a-penrose

Hopes it works this time.

Ponders problem on my thinking log as I sit in front of a crackling fire in a deep, thick forest. Plucks a leaf from a nearby tree and scrawls a note with a stick and ash. Calls my steampunk messenger dragon. Pats it and feeds it fresh berries. Sends it off.

“Dear @j-a-penrose

What is the different between Guild War (Word War) and Guild War (Sto…

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@j-a-penrose I showed up, finally! Quick question while we’re on the topic of backstory: can a character’s ‘ghost’ be something he doesn’t remember?

Here’s my snippet, from a short story that begged to be written this week:

Elias scanned the market listlessly with water grey eyes, his shoulders sagging even more as his gaze rested on a family…

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@j-a-penrose @esjohnson @julia @coggleton

Wow. Seriously. Your ideas are great! I don’t even know what to suggest.

(and yeah ya’ll posted here a month ago but I’ve been too lazy—I mean busy—to post on this thread lately so…here goes :P)

This is going to be long…sorry!

Basically, I’m starting a very long fantasy series (I have tentative pla…[Read more]

@wishingwell13 Oooh, interesting start! I’m getting a good feel for this guy’s character (his name is Jaydon, right?). I’m curious, is the rest of it in first person like that or does it switch to third person? Because if it did, that would be really cool.

Anyways, about this year: whoever said “Nothing could get worse than this” was obviously not…

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@evelyn That’s why I’m here!

ANYWAYS! Back to the subject of declaring war on our rivals. Is this story the final phase of our secret weapon, fellow guildlings? @j-a-penrose

@esjohnson @j-a-penrose @everyone-who-contributed

Wow! I love it! You guys did a great job! Made me want to cry. 🙂

@j-a-penrose I’ll keep that in mind…

Also @j-a-penrose, your edits on the doc are AMAZING!!! They’re definitely spot on–I didn’t even think of some of those!

You should work as a professional editor or something. 😉

@j-a-penrose thanks so much!

Okay guys, after hacking away at sentences, deleting them and then bringing them back, this is what I’ve got as the very final draft. 😂😂😂 Thoughts?

@j-a-penrose @steward-of-the-pen @lillian-parks03 @ariella-newheart @cassie-hartfinh (just because you suggested the train thing in the first place, Cassie 😉)

THE ORPHAN TRAIN

PARIMI ALCA GUILD…

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@esjohnson Great job with it so far! 🙂

I would leave the part about the father in there since it makes it clear that she is an orphan. Her reflections about red and blue paint also show how naive she is. It is morbid, but it’s from the POV of a 5 year old who doesn’t understand that it is morbid. This is what makes it interesting. We know the…[Read more]

@gabriellepollack Yay, thanks for visiting! Yeah I definitely did work on it quite a bit, but those stressful hours at the laptop were totally worth it. 😀

@j-a-penrose Yay! Yes, we have a stellar Guildmaster 😉

@jenwriter17 YAY 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 *Is muchly proud of you* *showers you with glitter* It looks beautiful, dear. I can tell you put time into this one. 😀 Bravo!

@j-a-penrose Haha no problem. You’re my awesome sub anyway, so you’re welcome anytime. I don’t think there’s a rule against it or anything. XD

@dragongeek @christianna-hellwig Thank you both! 😀

@j-a-penrose *facepalm* yeah I realized after I started the topic that I put it on Avensbeck’s forums. So sorry!

Yes, Jane sent me an email about that problem, and I thought I’d fixed it. I’ll take a look at her email again and make sure I did everything right.

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@j-a-penrose here’s the revised version of the story. Should I delete the part about her father or no?

I don’t want to go.

Wherever this train is taking me, I don’t want to go.

Mama used to tell me not to trust strangers. This entire train is full of strangers, of whining, screaming children who are going the same place I am.

 

My smu…

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@j-a-penrose Oh no! Poor Ashley! Is that the scene before the snippet you posted for lesson 2?

Here’s mine, from my WIP…

“Where are they?” Iyara murmered, her grey eyes sweeping across the scorched expanse. A gust tore off the sea, tearing at her eyes and flinging her hair in her face. Her skirt conformed to her leg and flattened against Sap…

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@j-a-penrose @ariella-newheart yeah, let’s slow the train down and have her think someone’s taking her away from her mother. 😉