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Emberynus The Dragonslayer replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 2 months ago
Oof! The whole thing was moving!! But I guess particularly the end. As far as anything I would have change. . . I think @vivian-grant already said all that needed to be said!
You are in the Meraki guild!! That’s the guild my sis is in. Dakota.
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Emberynus The Dragonslayer replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 2 months ago
That was so powerful! All most brought me to tears(and I never cry over book)!! So sad and so meaningful! I love it!
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic And so it begins! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 2 months ago
That’s alright, we all have busy periods.
I’m glad you liked the second half! I do not use GoogleDocs, but I do use Dropbox now whenever I need it. -
Vivian Grant replied to the topic And so it begins! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 3 months ago
@urwen-starial @esther-sears @anne_the_noob14
Alright, here is the second half. Enjoy!
For two days Owl stood by the cell, and eventually he lost his fear of the witch. She certainly spoke like a madwoman, and she loved to laugh over the most random things, but she quickly proved to be as dangerous as a wobbly-legged kitten.
During the day…[Read more]
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Dakota replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 3 months ago
Megyn turned onto a narrower, darker path. I must be close.
A muffled crack broke the silence as she stepped on a large stick. A sharp pain bolted through her foot.
Leaning against a tree, she bit her lip and closed her eyes. Just a little farther. . .
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 3 months ago
Thank you! It’s a fantasy about a young prison guard and a magic user commissioned to guard a witch.
Here is the link to the page:
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 3 months ago
I was wondering something. I recently posted the first half of a short story of mine, and though someone read it I was wondering if you would also like to read it before I post the second half?
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 3 months ago
You’re welcome! This was a neat brain challenge, and fun besides.
1. There’s the sentence near the beginning ‘As Bjorn and I walked up, I could see that the house was two stories, one of the only ones in the village.’ It’s a little choppy, and it interrupted the flow of the narration. Possible change: ‘As Bjorn and I walked up, I…[Read more]
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 3 months ago
I just finished it. I am rather blown away. The ending was immensely powerful, and well-delivered. Sylas’s descent into maddening jealousy was satisfying, and didn’t feel contrived. I don’t see any blaringly obvious problem with Moira. Early on, it was a 50-50 percent chance that she would go either way, but as Sylas became…[Read more]
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 3 months ago
You’re welcome! What do you want me to take note of– character development, plotting, both?
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Vivian Grant replied to the topic Tragic love story (with hints of fantasy) in the forum Romance Writers 6 years, 3 months ago
Hello! My name is Vivian. I joined this group a couple days ago. I would be willing to beta-read your story! 🙂
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Dakota replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 3 months ago
(Okay, . . . Just didn’t want to mess anything up.
Maybe actually Megyn’s appearance would help get her and Thaddeus inside. Like, if Thaddeus realized Moira wasn’t going to let him in and so started leave. Them he found Megyn and brought her back and tried again and since she’s cold and sorta sick, Moira might let them…[Read more]
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Dakota replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 3 months ago
@esther-sears @pensword (I’m still around, but I didn’t want to interrupt this . . . uhh . . . scene with Thaddeus and Moira until you guys want me too. I will be stalking this though . . . let me know when I should post the next Megyn scene.)
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PenSword replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 3 months ago
“Hello.” Thaddeus said.
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PenSword replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 3 months ago
Thaddeus knocked loudly.
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Dakota replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 4 months ago
@esther-sears @pensword (YIKES!! Sorry I forgot about this!)
A bird fluttered across the path, chirping in alarm, and flitted into a bush along the path.
Megyn jumped at little at the motion, then lowered her head and stumbled on. “Just a bird.” she mumbled.
I have to talk to myself now to stay awake. She grimaced and then sighed. Her brain a…[Read more]
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Dakota replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 4 months ago
@pensword @esther-sears (this okay??)
Megyn stumbled down the forest-flanked road, numb with the cold and the pain. Miles and miles of travel were wearing her thin. And all of those miles and been lonely. Especially ever since-
She shook the thought of him away. It’s too painful to think about him. Since I miss him-
Biting her lip, she tried…[Read more]
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PenSword replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 4 months ago
@esther-sears @dakota Thanks!
He can be lost or hurt, whichever works best.
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Daeus Lamb started the topic Introducing GROUPS in the forum Announcements 6 years, 4 months ago
Hey SE people!
We’ve launched a cool new feature on the forum called groups.
You can find them in the nav bar like so:
Groups are hubs for writers to gather around something they share in common. They include a Facebook-like feed and most of them also include their own forums.
So far there are three types of groups:
1. Word war…[Read more] -
Dakota replied to the topic Moira needs to be a more developed character RP XD in the forum Character Development Corner 6 years, 4 months ago
@esther-sears Okay, here she is:
Megyn Primrose Harris – 16 years old. Short, with a slender form and small hands. Hair’s a medium chestnut brown, soft and thick with little curls at the ends. Eyes are large and hazel brown. Her expression is usually one of modest and friendly curiosity. Loves to sing and make music; horses, though she doesn’t o…[Read more]
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