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@ncstokes thanks for the advice! Characters can be very useful for plotting… I will have to do some more character development I think…
@parker yeah. Coming up with those plot twists is a whole other beast though 😛
@jillifish Thank you for all the tips! I am fresh back after a break, and still trying to think of ideas unfortunately. I haven’t heard of those books, but I will definitely look at them!@taylorclogston Yes, I’ve been trying to read more. I might try branching out into other genres though…
@parker Right now I’m leaning towards dystopian or high fantasy… And thanks!June 21, 2018 at 12:05 pm in reply to: Post the first paragraph of your WIP here and get feedback #39534@r-m-archer Thank you that was very helpful!
@esjohnson thanks! 🙂June 20, 2018 at 11:48 am in reply to: Post the first paragraph of your WIP here and get feedback #39392I’m kind of curious to the main character’s name. Is it revealed soon after? (That could just be me, I like to know the narrator’s name pretty soon off. :))
“Hey!” I shove him away. “My sister is in that class, dummy.”
He gulps. “Ah. Right.”
I was thinking they were joking around, but then the response is much more scared than I would’ve thought.
Is the school not really a traditional school? I get that people want to be free from school, but it sounds like they’re escaping something much worse.
Also, I really like having a blind character. I don’t see many blind people in fiction, so that’s cool.
Cute beginning line. 😉
In my experience, most people assume that I’m a year round student or there’s some holiday. Not many people have accused me of skipping, so the cashier comes off to me as mean. I’d change it to “No school today?” or something along those lines.
“I shifted the stack of books in my arms and regretted bringing the whole series” Maybe change it to “…arms, already regretting…”
“but I forgot that Rose had asked to meet at this Dairy Queen instead of at the library like we normally do.” I’m not really sure why this makes a difference.
Home schooled characters are great. 😀
Here is my beginning:
Black Moon Academy – Academy for the Villainously Inclined. I dropped my case to the ground, and looked up at the words on the wrought iron fence. There wasn’t any other way but forwards. My mother had sent me away early in the morning, into the windowless carriage and to the school I had been destined to attend for my entire life. From the moment I had stepped into the carriage, there was no turning back. I picked up the case, and entered the gate.
The castle’s shadow loomed over me, yet the sun shone brightly on the grey stone. There were equal parts grace and defense in the architecture. For all of its tall, spiraling beauty, it was still a place that few would dare to attack. Not that there were many attackers. I wasn’t even sure where I was myself. The location of the school was a closely kept secret, and only graduates of the Academy knew its whereabouts. For extra security, my mother told me that it was guarded with an invisibility cloak covering the entire school. It was a reasonable precaution. Villains have very few friends.
Thank you! 🙂 @kayla-joy
@r-m-archer *blushes* aw, thanks :3
Also, I didn’t know you had a blog?! It looks really awesome! I have followed 😀
Must read all the blogs! *looks up all of them*
I also have a little blog thing. theartfulauthor.wordpress.com I post a ton of random things, but mostly writing related stuff like articles, short stories, prompts, and book reviews. There is a few personal/my life related posts too.
@allison-grace Hiya to you too!
@mariposa Sometimes, though it’s mostly sloppy doodles XD@girlsetfree I can relate! It can be really hard to find time to write.
I’m familiar with the Pomodoro Technique. During nanowrimo, I used it all the time, and it was how I stayed sane. But when I went back to my normal schedule, it didn’t work. I write roughly 3000 words a week during the school year on stories alone. (I also have a blog.) During the summer, I try to write a lot more, but for now that’s about all I can manage. It takes me a while to get into the writing groove once I start, and taking breaks every 25 minutes just jolted me out of that groove.
The thing that helps me most is a weekly goal. It should be manageable, but not too easy. Then find time whenever you can to write towards that weekly goal. Often we find that we have more time than we think once we start cutting out non-essentials XD. That’s what works for me, though I’m curious as to what a person who writes more than me would say.
I primarily write fantasy. For NaNo a while back, I wrote a dystopian story and I loved doing it, but I realized that it wasn’t my strongest area of writing. So I write fantasy, both portal and high fantasy and throw in some dystopian elements for fun.
@supermonkey42 ha, maybe. As for authors I like C. S. Lewis, John Flanagan, Nadine Brandes, and Arthur Conan Doyle.
@gabriellepollack Thanks!
@mariposa Hello to you and Aberdeen! My favorite medium is watercolor. I like painting galaxies, animals, and fan art of various shows and books.Ooh that’s cool. I try to sing but I sound awful XD.
@elizabeth I’m a right-handed person. I play the piano somewhat competently, and I dabble on the ukulele. Do you play any instruments?
@sam-kowal ah, no I meant it. Melted chairs are great. And thanks!
@elizabeth weeelllll… maybe some werewolves are okay :P. But yay for dragons!
@toklaham-veruzia yep, I’m trying to twist a lot of cliches. Okay, that’s good at least XD -
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