Andrew Schmidt

@andrew

Yes, I understand, I’d probably do the same, actually. I’m just saying that maybe you could add in some subtle hints to her changing emotions. Like maybe she tenses or her facial expression hardens or she clenches her fists at her sides or something. I know it’s harder since it’s from Nicholas’ POV instead of Chloe’s, but there’s still ways.

@andrew

Chloe’s reaction seemed a bit unrealistic to me. How did she go from being frightened and confused to angry and brave enough to punch Nicholas in the face? I can see how it could happen, but there was no indication of any of it. Other than that, I thought it was good!

@andrew Thanks! I like that line too. 🙂

@Andrew, the ruby wasn’t for his dragon. That’s not even his dragon. No, he wanted the rubies to defeat Malcom Ace.

Okay, well everything turned out rather nicely.

“Look, I’m really sorry I have to be so greedy and take all that’s left, but I’m not going to use it for myself. I’m glad Deathrock’s dead. Thanks for everything.” Aleck jumped…[Read more]

@andrew

“Yes, Julius, I do, and don’t you dare try to take it from me. This one is staying with me. Now stay back. Don’t advance, or I’ll thrust this gem into Spadewick’s face, and you really don’t want to see what this dragon is like when something sparkly comes into close quarters with him. He’s not your average dragon, you know. He could never…[Read more]

@andrew, makes sense.

@andrew, I’m a little confused, but I am assuming it is intentional.

I think maybe you should have mentioned the story about shadow reapers earlier to foreshadow this development a little. Nicholas being revealed as a shadow reaper would have been better done if the reader had already known what shadow reapers are. But otherwise, I like it!

@kari-karast @andrew

All the time while the others were talking, Aleck was trying to calm Spadewick down. He had grown very frightened looking at the shiny, shiny jewels, and Aleck was afraid he would attack. So it was, when they decided upon what to do with the rubies, Aleck was not aware.

Then suddenly, Delton was handing the rubies out to…[Read more]

@andrew @k-a-grey @emma-starr Thank you guys 🙂

@emma-starr Don’t be sorry – I love your poem a lot <3 😉 Also, I don’t know if you noticed, but I’m following your blog XD I don’t blog, though I’ve thought about starting one before.  Right now, life is a bit busy, but I might think about it during Christmas break 🙂
I’d love to keep in touch…[Read more]

@emma-starr @libby @andrew   Thanks!

@libby   What a sweet poem!  Makes me hungry for a slice of bread. 😉

@w-o-holmes Thanks!! I’m so glad you liked it–I can see that you understand the poem and thought behind it. 😀

@evelyn I’m glad you enjoyed it. ;P

@k-a-grey I LOVE IT. XD When I read the last line I was like, oh no…OH MY.

@libby I’m sorry it made you sad!!! I didn’t mean to make you cry!! lol I like your poem–it’s cute and sounds like a…[Read more]

AGH I AM SO, SO SORRY GUYS I JUST COMPLETELY DISAPPEARED AND I AM SO SORRY.

@nuetrobolt @andrew

Also, @bookgirl hasn’t been on in a longggg time. So I don’t know if anyone will be around to play Ash for a while.

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Karim climbed carefully to his feet, still holding his injured arm to his chest. He let loose another fireball in Deathrock’s…[Read more]

@andrew, sorry, I haven’t been on much either!

“I’m sure he can fit us all in a pinch. Come on!” Aleck threw a precious gem at a bat flying over his head, knocking it out of the air.

He ran through the darkness towards the dragon.

“Now where has Ash got to?”

@kari-karast @bookcrazygirl @e_elaine_soup5

@parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

Enjoy and critique!

Just Me
Lord, it is just me again
Just a girl with her heart all broken
Up in pieces f…[Read more]

@andrew Thanks!

@parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

This one was written after a time of pondering about the question “Why do you do what you do?”  (Maybe I took the…[Read more]

@andrew  Thanks! 🙂

@parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

This week I am posting poems I wrote for birthday cards for an uncle and a cousin of mine. Critique and enjoy!…[Read more]

@jane-maree  @andrew  @emberynus-the-dragonslayer  @jenwriter17

Thanks! 🙂