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Beth replied to the topic Cartoon Art in the forum Art Critique 6 years, 6 months ago
Aww thank you!!
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic Short Story Critique in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
@eitan Thank you for your comments! The storyline is kind of based off a song, and when I hear it, that’s what I thought too.
Yeah, I should definitely fix the ages at the beginning. Thanks for pointing that out.
As a matter of fact, I am Chinese. 🙂
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WolverineRM replied to the topic Hello from Israel! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 6 months ago
Oh yeah, there’s wild boar season in Texas too…
Oh, neat! No, English speakers don’t really say congratulations for that kind of thing, but my baby brother loves new things and would love it if we did. 🤣
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Beth Darlene posted an update in the group Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
So how’d ya’ll get your personality tests???? I’ve noticed a lot of you have your personality types either in your bio or whatever.
So yeah what site or whatever did you do that on?
@claire-h @purpleturtle @olivia @eitan @anne_the_noob14 @emily-maynard @elizabeth @naiya-dyani @devastate-lasting @kristianne-hassman and whoever else sees this 😉-
I like this site: https://www.16personalities.com/
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@devastate-lasting
Okay thank you!!
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Yep, I used the 16 personality website.
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Cool! Thanks!
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@claire-h
Also, I posted on the character castle!
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I also use the 16 personalities site, as well as truity for the enneagram test. But you can also just type in “Myers-Briggs Personality Test” or “Enneagram Personality Test” into your Google search box and see what it comes up with.
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Okay cool! Thanks.
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I use the 16 personalities site as well 🙂
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Okay!
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Beth Darlene posted a new activity comment 6 years, 6 months ago
Thanks you guys!
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Beth Darlene posted an update 6 years, 6 months ago
Just a little thing I want your opinions on, 🙂
Just then, his 11-year-old brother, Tim, came crashing out of the house.
“That sister of ours sure is something!” he said, slamming the door.Just then, his 11-year-old brother, Tim, came crashing out of the house, slamming the door as he went.
“That sister of ours sure is something!”Which…[Read more]
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I sorta like the first one the best. I find that sometimes if your character is doing too much in one sentence, it sorta detracts from the rest of the sentence. (I’m not like a superb writing by any means, but just something I thought of as I read your bits of story above.) But both are good, so either one works fine! 🙂
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I like both 🙂
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I think the first one is smoother, but it slows things down. If you’re going for a chaotic feel, I think the second one is better.
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Thanks you guys!
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Personally, I like the first one better because it seems to flow better, but either one would work fine 🙂
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Okay, thank you! I’ll prob go with that one since that’s the one everyone seems to like better!
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Yup, your welcome! 🙂
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WolverineRM replied to the topic Hello from Israel! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 6 months ago
Hey, sorry I vanished! I agree, it’s both tragic and ridiculous, all at the same time.
Oh yeah, the Israeli military is fascinating!! So, what is it about the warrior forces…?
That’s sad about the hunting. There’s a few animals, like buffalo, that almost went extinct here in America and now are mostly raised on farms. What anima…[Read more]
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Beth replied to the topic Another Short Story! 🙂 in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
Thank you!
Yes that might be a good thing to consider (the names.)
And yeah the responded thing is a good critique! Thank you, I can always count on you for good criticism lol 🙂
-Beth
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Beth replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 6 months ago
Not sure what my favorite Bible book is lol! So far I’m liking Samuel!
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Olivia Catherine posted a new activity comment 6 years, 6 months ago
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Yeah, thank you!
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
<p style=”text-align: left;”>@Eitan</p>
Thank You!!Thank you as well! I will post the second chapter soonly (after I edit it!) lol!
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Kristianne Hassman replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
“1 Corinthians 10:31: So whether you eat or drink or whatever you do, do it all for the glory of God. When we write, we do it to glorify God and to help other Christians in their walk with Christ. If you write for God, you should pray and ask whether or not he wants you to write your novel now, with your current knowledge and experience.…[Read more]
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
Hey Eitan! I ‘rewrote’ my first chapter. Hoping it’s a little better than before! Tell me what you think about it.
Chapter One: Disappearing Act
It was late summer and the leaves swished contentedly in the soft breeze. Jered Martin stood outside his house listening to a frog croak in the nearby lake. His family had recently moved to…[Read more]
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Beth Darlene posted an update 6 years, 6 months ago
Hey,
Has anyone ever read
Between the Lines by Jodi Picoult?-
No, I’ve never read it. What’s it about? It sounds interesting though.
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Okay, I was just wondering if it was any good lol!
here’s a synopsis from Wikipedia. It sounds like it could be good but it also sounds like it could be horrible lol!
Delilah, a 15-year-old teenager, bookworm, and social outcast is obsessed with a fairy tale story about Prince Oliver called Between the Lines. No one is able to understand…[Read more]
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@beth20
I haven’t. I usually don’t read in English…-
Okay.
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No I haven’t read it… But I did look it up and read the synopsis. Is the author a Christian? If not, I would be a little leery reading a teen romance. Just my first reaction.
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Yeah, not sure if she is or not. You have a point haha!
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Ya, I agree with Claire. It does sound sorta cool (I mean, what isn’t cool about someone talking to a character from a story book?!?!), but it could also be sorta trashy if it isn’t by a Christian author and it’s a teen romance. Sometimes I’ve started books that seem totally fine, and before I finish reading the end of the first page I have to put…[Read more]
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@Olivia
Yeah I’ve read books written by non christian authors and they were good.
But I’ve never read any romance books. Not really my thing, but this books just looks fun! haha!
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@beth20
I know just because the author isn’t a Christian doesn’t mean they don’t write good books, but romances are very different. I agree that the book does look interesting, but ya, I’d just be careful.-
@olivia
Okay! I looked it up on Common sense media (a site like Plugged In, and it looked fine. I just don’t know how good it is. haha
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Okay, thanks!
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@beth20
Okay, cool. Even if it’s not super good, it sounds okay, so if it’s clean and I had a copy I’d give it a try. 🙂 But it’s up to you of course.
@eitan Okay, thanks.-
Yeah, thank you!
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Yup! 🙂
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
Hmm… It isn’t wise to kill your right hand man, or even to threaten him with death. Aclabar is supposed to be wise, after all…
You do have a point there! lol
It’s my best advice for you – before writing, check if it’s God’s will. Don’t repeat my mistake.
Okay! Thank you, I will!
Search ”Jerry Jenkins” and enter his website, you should…[Read more]
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
I don’t know why when I quoted you there’s a bunch of spaces and stuff lol! And why it isn’t blue or whatever.
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
First off thank you for responding and for you critique! What you said wasn’t offensive, that’s why I posted it on here! 🙂
First of all – break paragraphs. In a dialogue, every sentence should have it’s own line.
I have noticed that, and have tried to keep that in mind in my later chapters. 🙂
Second – use punctuation…[Read more]
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Claire replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 6 months ago
Wow, that was a very helpful critique! And I think your comments are very good if Beth is planning on publishing her novel. (I hope you don’t mind me jumping into the conversation) 🙂 I’m on Jerry Jenkins’ mailing list as well and I agree, it’s been very beneficial!
However, if you are just writing this story for fun and to…[Read more]
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Beth replied to the topic Hey Everyone in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 6 months ago
Oh yeah the first comments are going to be related to the article so scroll down till you get to my comment about rap! 🙂
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Beth replied to the topic Hey Everyone in the forum Introduce Yourself 6 years, 6 months ago
That would be cool if the honey was really from dates! I have never heard of the salt cedar but it looks cool! Eucalyptus trees look neat also!
Yeah I was a little surprised about Judges lol! I want to read Revelations sometime, never have for some reason haha. It seems kind of confusing!
I belong to a site called World Teen, where I…[Read more]
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