Daeus Lamb

@daeus-lamb I like the last one I said I liked. I think the new one lacks the personal drama and bombast of the previous one, and just feels like a sales pitch.

I also agree with Noah about the eternal rewrite bit.

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To echo what Noah said above, I do think it’s important for the blurb to reflect the style/tone of the story itself. I personally do not feel it’s terribly/very dark. I mean, it’s supposed to be epic fantasy, so heavy is naturally inferred and darkness is necessary. 🙂

Just my two cents. Feel free to leave it or take it as you…[Read more]

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So I when read “I’m in search of opinionated people to help clear me out of this muddle.”

I thought I should probably say something here. 🙂

I’m good with the Option A. Probably give it a 4.5 out of 5 vote. It’s very poetic. It is a bit vague, as the beta you quoted said, but I think in a good way. After reading Option B, I do l…[Read more]

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Darn. I wonder what happened to it then… oh well. 😉

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@daeus-lamb I reeeaally like this incarnation of it! “Turns men into monsters” is exactly the sort of thing I was struggling to suggest. The only thing that still trips me up is:

“Exton hunts for redemption at the throne of the immortal Songkiller who caused his mother’s death.”

“at the throne” seems pretty abstract for the first line of the b…[Read more]

I think my response got eaten by the spam folder(This is what happens when I take the time to write out a nice response with sources. :’D). @daeus-lamb Mind coming to my rescue?

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Wow, I can’t even begin to attack that amazing advice. Thank you SO much!!!!

@daeus-lamb I’m so sorry I forgot to get back to you.

As far as unspecificity goes, that doesn’t seem any better to me. What specifically does the song do, and why is it important to Exton or the story?

@daeus-lamb idk why it did the post twice. Sorry xD can you delete one?

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Just popped in to say, I really love how this is progressing, even though I can’t contribute a great deal. It’s so interesting to observe a blurb take shape…