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@daeus-lamb I reeeaally like this incarnation of it! “Turns men into monsters” is exactly the sort of thing I was struggling to suggest. The only thing that still trips me up is:

“Exton hunts for redemption at the throne of the immortal Songkiller who caused his mother’s death.”

“at the throne” seems pretty abstract for the first line of the blurb, and “caused his mother’s death” seems a little weak. This is a weird suggestion, but would you consider “began” instead of “caused?” I’d also tentatively sub “atonement” for “redemption,” but that’s just because I can’t look at the latter without overwhelmingly associating with hymns.

Aside from that, I really like it. Great work.