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@anne-of-lothlorien

I know this reply is coming two years late, but… thank you for the hug.

@rose-colored-fancy @k-a-grey

Thank you both so much! I use repetition/refrain often for songs, but lately I’ve started using it in regular poetry. I was concerned that repetition would bore people.

It’s nice to meet you as well, K. A. Grey, and thanks for the stanza tip. I did fragment the lines for emphasis, but that is a good point on readability.

@e-n-leonard Hey there, fellow poet! Nice to meet you!

This is beautiful!! Nice use of repetition.  My only critique might be to split it up into stanzas to make each “I am a …” stand out, and perhaps combine some lines instead of fragmenting it to make it easier to read.  But splitting up lines can also add more emphasis too, so it’s up to y…[Read more]

@e-n-leonard

Fair warning, I’m not at all a poet, I’ve never written poetry.

However, I loved this! It gets a clear message across, I love the format with a repeating pattern!

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I, the Psalter

Rolling peaks in the bleak void,

Dizzying repetition of the mind it toyed.

In soaking misery of the waters endless rush,

The heart heaves a futile hope lost in the hush.

Eternal feelings envelop the waters falling,

Lost to the vastness of the failed…[Read more]