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  • #147268
    Rose
    @rose-colored-fancy

    @mamaauthoress

    WOW that is an amazing drawing … *applauds* I love the facial expression.

    Thank you! I’m actually just coming out of art block and it feels so great to create stuff I like again XD I’ve always struggled with expressions so I went to the other extreme.


    @calidris

    I feel like Sasha and Basil (and quite possibly Skia as well) are all shockingly obtuse, but in completely opposite ways.  Sasha is so obtuse that he interprets basic politeness as attraction (because no one is ever nice to him, so it must mean she’s attracted, right?), while Basil is so obtuse he would interpret a literal kiss as a mark of friendship (“she must think of me as a very good friend to get this close to me.  It’s an honor, and I shouldn’t do anything to ruin it again.”)

    Tbh Basil is just extremely confused on the ideas of both friendship and romance, since he has had very little experience with either

    Oh my gosh they’re so dumb I love it XD That is so in character for both of them and also just objectively hilarious XD I wanna see Basil get kissed and then go “So, we’re like… friends?” and someone makes eye contact with Sasha and he’s like “We shall be married at dawn!” XD

    Well that’s an excellent idea, but if I go that route then it means I can’t give Basil needle trauma, so I guess they feel pain just like everyone else here!

    That sounds way worse out of context.  It’s not that bad…is it?

    I mean, don’t we all have needle trauma to some extent?  From doctors’ offices?  As kids?

    Oh, we all do I think *cough* dentists *cough*

    Sasha’s been in so many fights he’s probably used to it by now tbh.  Maybe he’s got a really high pain tolerance?  That would make him Basil’s opposite in yet another way – they’re complete opposites not only in personality, but in appearance as well!

    That’s what makes them so fun to read!

    @everyone

    I realized I’ve been writing Aydin wrong for quite a while. I got too stuck feeling sorry for him and trying to make him likeable that I rather overdid it. He’s coming across as a sweet innocent martyr which he is NOT. 

    I love him dearly and he didn’t deserve anything that happened to him and he deserves all happiness and unconditional love in the world but he’s done bad things deliberately with full knowledge of the harm it would cause others. He isn’t a misunderstood victim, he’s a redeemed villain, but a villain nevertheless.

    Broken people have sharp edges and he’s no exception. He’s also a lot more dangerous than he’s been letting on, partially because he does feel useless. He’s not nice, or friendly. He’s kind but more out of principle than because he actually likes or trusts anyone.

    I actually wrote him right in canon but ended up messing up here in the castle XD In canon he’s much more bitter and sarcastic, often selfish and always suspicious.

    Admittedly, this in the castle wasn’t really out of character, but it was just one side of him, the softer more vulnerable side. It’s interesting because that’s a defense mechanism too. He’s trying to make himself look harmless so he doesn’t get antagonized, and I think that was partially because he felt like everyone was dangerous.

    I think this might have shifted as well, that he sees them more as equal so he switches to another side of his personality.

    (He has so many sides, more than literally any other character. It’s canon that he can behave so differently that he’s literally barely recognizable when he needs to)

    Basically, he’s going to be taking a turn for the unlikeable and I don’t know how that will turn out but be prepared! And thank you for coming to my Ted talk XD

     

    Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?

    #147270
    Inkhorn
    @inkhorn

    @rose-colored-fancy

    That’s what makes them so fun to read! @everyone I realized I’ve been writing Aydin wrong for quite a while. I got too stuck feeling sorry for him and trying to make him likeable that I rather overdid it. He’s coming across as a sweet innocent martyr which he is NOT…he’s going to be taking a turn for the unlikeable and I don’t know how that will turn out but be prepared! And thank you for coming to my Ted talk XD

    Wait, Aydin is a selfish, sarcastic, unlikeable, deceitful person?! Why did you have to make him so lovable? This side of him is going to break my heart! It’ll also really annoy Khalon.  I think he was hoping that anyone who succeeds at keeping an angry person from beating up someone else was a nice guy.

    It does not do to leave a live dragon out of your calculations if you live near him. -Tolkien

    #147272
    Rose
    @rose-colored-fancy

    @inkhorn

    Wait, Aydin is a selfish, sarcastic, unlikeable, deceitful person?! Why did you have to make him so lovable? This side of him is going to break my heart! It’ll also really annoy Khalon.  I think he was hoping that anyone who succeeds at keeping an angry person from beating up someone else was a nice guy.

    It’s not that big of a change actually XD He isn’t suddenly becoming a terrible person, he’s just himself but slightly to the left. He’s still the same character who canonically spent an entire celebration in a corner with a random dog he found because he doesn’t like people. XD

    The biggest change is that I’m going to be working on giving him more agency, especially in his backstory, so he’ll be more proactive.

    I think he’ll be okay with Khalon actually! I can’t predict it but if Khalon doesn’t act like a jerk neither will Aydin, most probably!

    Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?

    #147273
    Inkhorn
    @inkhorn

    @rose-colored-fancy

    That’s a relief. You had me worried there. I’m glad he’s not doing a full 180. Just wondering, but how did he and Liorah begin dating? They’re polar opposites! I feel bad for anyone who was there while they were dating. That must have been scary. XD

    It does not do to leave a live dragon out of your calculations if you live near him. -Tolkien

    #147275
    Rose
    @rose-colored-fancy

    @inkhorn

    Just wondering, but how did he and Liorah begin dating? They’re polar opposites! I feel bad for anyone who was there while they were dating. That must have been scary. XD

    Oh, my goodness, no. They’re NOT dating, they have never dated. XD That’s hilarious though. Funny, that was my original plan but then I actually wrote them and Liorah told me she’d rather marry a rock and Aydin looked incredibly disgusted and practically threatened me until I changed the outline so… nope XD

    As you mentioned, they’re complete opposites, they’re just really not compatible, and they have a lot of baggage together. I don’t think they could ever get into a successful relationship even if they fell in love.

    Liorah is in love with another character named Ferran, I think you read about him too, earlier. They’re both too shy to confess so they just spend a whole book poorly avoiding their feelings. It’s really cute, they go together much better.

    Aydin… ehh, at this point he had been in a relationship once, with a character named Chantara, but they… broke up. Dramatically. It was bad. She was still on the villains’ side and she considered him a traitor so that did not go down well.

    Aydin and Liorah have a kind of enemies-to-friends-to-adopted-siblings relationship which is very fun to write!

    Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?

    #147276
    Inkhorn
    @inkhorn

    @rose-colored-fancy

    *face-palms*

    Somehow I got it into my head that they had dated each other. As for Ferran and Liorah, they are adorable together!

    It does not do to leave a live dragon out of your calculations if you live near him. -Tolkien

    #147277
    Emily Waldorf
    @emily-waldorf

    I actually wrote him right in canon but ended up messing up here in the castle XD In canon he’s much more bitter and sarcastic, often selfish and always suspicious.

    That would be a VERY interesting Aydin. OK, shoot, we’re ready for it. And I’m glad you got him right in canon…I think I do the opposite, lol.

    Hier steche ich. Ich kann nicht anders. Gott helfe mir. Amen. ~Martin Luther

    #147278
    Rose
    @rose-colored-fancy

    Aydin

    The sound blared, filling the cave, filling my head, making me dizzy. I covered my ears, shrinking from the sound. It throbbed and echoed, laughing at me, forcing me to hear it. It was too much.

    It echoed and re-echoed, pounding at the walls. A crackle of electricity skittered across my arm.

    Slowly, the sound faded, leaving behind a headache that seemed to mock the throb of the sound. Everyone was dead silent.

    Qatar and whatever Liorah’s anemic victim was called stared in bewilderment and Liorah looked ready to commit a murder. I didn’t know who on yet, but I wasn’t going to let it happen.

    She was clenching her fists, shoulders tense with anger. The entire cave seemed to quiver, the slightest shake in the floor almost felt real.

    I stepped between her and the others, shooting her a glare which she met with vehemence. I didn’t back down. I was sick of this and especially sick of her.

    Some of the conversations had resumed so it was safe to talk again.

    “What’s wrong with you?” I hissed.

    “What do you think?” she spat back. She probably didn’t even know what I was talking about but she had never really cared.

    “I think you’re trying to get us killed. You can’t just fight anyone who insults you.”

    “Watch me.”

    “I know you do, I mean you shouldn’t.”

    “Why not? What’s it to you?” Liorah challenged.

    I gritted my teeth. I wasn’t backing down on this. If Liorah was acting like an idiot by herself that was fine but this was dragging me into fights I didn’t want.

    “Because we have unfortunately found ourselves in this inconvenient thing called ‘friendship’ which means that if you decide to get yourself killed I’m going to have to stop them and I don’t want to, so stop trying to execute your heaven-given right to die.”

    “It’s not my fault,” Liorah said, crossing her arms.

    “I didn’t see anyone forcing you to kick him,” I said, sarcastically.

    “He deserved it.”

    “And it’s still going to make you enemies, so stop doing that. Honestly, you have the self-preservation instinct of a hamster.”

    Liorah was annoying me more with every passing second and I barely managed to bite down the annoyance. It was probably also a result from being over-tired, having a headache, and a nightmare haunting the back of my mind, but to me it mostly meant I wasn’t going to put up with any more of Liorah’s issues.

    I felt something on my right arm and glanced down. It looked like a crackle of pale blue light flickered across my arm but it was gone as soon as I looked. Another hallucination.

    “Oh, do I? What makes you say that?” Liorah challenged. She seemed to be enjoying this argument but I certainly wasn’t. It felt like everyone was staring even though I kept my voice low. Why couldn’t she make something easy for once?

    “Liorah, I’ve seen you. You once insulted someone who had a sword at your neck. Multiple times.”

    “And let me remind you who got me in that position,” Liorah retorted, instantly.

    I rubbed my temple, trying to force back the Liorah-induced headache.

    “I know, I know! You throw it in my face at least twice a week, I’ve apologized a hundred times or more, when will it be enough?”

    Liorah’s eyes went hard and her shoulders tightened. I could see her thinking, ‘when the life you took from me is restored. So, never.’

    “I’ll apologize again if it makes you feel better but please, I want you to stop making enemies.”

    “I can fight my own battles,” Liorah said, shortly.

    I raised an eyebrow.

    “If we’re going by previous events–”

    Liorah seemed ready to snap something resentful but caught herself at the last moment.

    “If anything happens again I won’t draw you into it,” she said, articulating carefully, trying to keep her anger down.

    I shrugged. It wasn’t going to get better than that.

    “Fine. Try to be nice.”

    “That’s a lost cause for both of us,” Liorah retorted, sarcastically.

    I rolled my eyes and turned away. There was only so much of her I could take at a time and that had been too much. My headache wasn’t going away anytime soon.

    Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?

    #147290
    calidris
    @calidris

    Oh, we all do I think *cough* dentists *cough*


    @rose-colored-fancy
    see?  I’m not that merciless after all lol

    *laughs as one fey*

    #147311
    calidris
    @calidris

    So I’m planning on getting back into the castle again soon (hopefully today), but in the meantime, here’s Basil 🙂

    *laughs as one fey*

    #147312
    Emily Waldorf
    @emily-waldorf

    So I’m planning on getting back into the castle again soon (hopefully today), but in the meantime, here’s Basil

    Exactly as I imagined him! Good work, @calidris

    Hier steche ich. Ich kann nicht anders. Gott helfe mir. Amen. ~Martin Luther

    #147313
    calidris
    @calidris

    @emily-waldorf really?  I’m glad I was able to capture that!

    *laughs as one fey*

    #147411
    calidris
    @calidris

    Science? Science could not possibly create such a thing as a rest pirate-ater or something like that. “Clearly we have different views on science,” Rúan mumbled as he stared up at the ceiling.


    @mamaauthoress
    this interaction is going to be a complete disaster and I’m sooo looking forward to it!  Hopefully both Basil and Ruan will grow as a result of this much needed practice in socialization!

    Also, I’m formally begging you for Ruan art lol

    Basil:

    The man shakes his head, face wrinkled in a frown.  I can’t tell if I’ve said something wrong, or if he just always looks like that.  Maybe both?  I curl my lip in return.

    “I’ve never seen anything like it. Is it … bewitched somehow, to clean the air you breathe?”

    Huh?

    What?

    I wrinkle my nose behind my respirator.  “Um … no. It’s not ‘bewitched.’ It’s just science.” He tenses uncomfortably, and a tiny twinge of guilt pricks at the back of my mind.  I don’t think he meant any harm.  He’s clearly from a very backwards timeline, and maybe he was just curious.  Still, I don’t like being accused like that.

    “Clearly we have different views on science,” the man mumbles.  He stares up at the ceiling.

    “Maybe.”  I avert my gaze.

    “So …” the words are barely squeaked out.  He clears his throat. “So, where are you from?”

    Where am I from?

    I squint up at him.  That’s kind of a dangerous question, but I think he’ll be safe.  He doesn’t know what a respirator is, so he probably knows nothing about Project Goldenseal.

    “Spire.”  The words catch in my throat.  “I come from Spire, the shining white city of the West.  I’m very fortunate to live there, because it’s the greatest city in the Confederation, and the Confederation is the greatest country on -” The words suddenly die on my tongue.  That sounded an awful lot like bragging, and I think maybe he wouldn’t appreciate it too much, given that he’s from such a backwards timeline.  I avert my gaze, but it’s too late.

    “Not that it’s something to be proud of or anything like that.  I don’t even get to see it that much because I’m not allowed to go outside – unless I’m with Skia or someone, and that only happens maybe once a month if I’m lucky…” I wince.  I’m so uncomfortable I’m running my mouth, and I feel a little bit awful because I hate it when other people talk too much.

    “Besides, only rich people get to live in the ‘shining white’ part,” I mutter.

    I stare at my feet, mouth glued shut.  I don’t know why this man makes me so uncomfortable. Even worse, I don’t know why I even care to begin with.  I’m pretty good at making people go away.  Really, all it takes is a one word answer and well aimed glare, and they’ll leave you alone forever.  But this guy is different.  I almost feel like I have to impress him – I almost want him to stay, and that scares me.

    Unlike overly friendly strangers in the past, he’s not here to gawk at me.  And he hasn’t shown any signs of pity, so that’s ruled out too.

    I hug my knees into my chest.  Why is he talking to me?  It’s almost like he doesn’t want to go, even though I’ve given him so many opportunities.  Is he trying to be nice to me?  I haven’t done anything to impress him or make him happy, so he probably just wants something from me.

    But on the other hand…

    I don’t really know why, but every once in awhile, someone will be nice to me just because.  No strings attached.  I think he might be one of those people, because a little part of me is scared that he’ll get angry and leave.  And if I know anything from experience, the part where he’s supposed to get angry and leave has already passed, so I have no idea why he’s still sticking around.

    The air is taut between us, and the silence is killing me.  I feel like there’s something I should say, but I don’t want too talk just for the sake of talking.  I don’t want to be one of those people.

    Oh.

    Of course.

    How could I forget?

    I squeeze my eyes shut, just in case.  Just in case this was the last straw and he finally decides to leave for good.  “What about you?”

    *laughs as one fey*

    #147412
    calidris
    @calidris

    “I come from Spire, the shining white city of the West. I’m very fortunate to live there, because it’s the greatest city in the Confederation, and the Confederation is the greatest country on -”

    So I was not initially planning on writing this, but it’s interesting.  This is not at all how Basil talks normally – it’s 100% the propaganda speaking.  He’s out of the labs, but there’s still a little part of that fanatically loyal soldier in him still, and I honestly had no idea until I wrote this!

    Also @mamaauthoress Basil is being incredibly casual about the whole “alternate worlds/timelines” because this is considered cutting edge science in his world!  Of course Ruan probably has no idea what he’s talking about lol

    It’s going to be really interesting to see the differences in the sciences of their respective worlds!

    *laughs as one fey*

    #147436
    Laura K. Abeid
    @mamaauthoress

    @Calidris I love Basil so much — he and Rúan could claim to be brothers and no one would argue. 😆

    this interaction is going to be a complete disaster and I’m sooo looking forward to it!

    Well, we’re authors — we dabble in disaster, don’t we? *tries hard not to glance at the mess that is Rúan Fernyasson Pyrestone*

    Hopefully both Basil and Ruan will grow as a result of this much needed practice in socialization!

    Hahah, yes, indeed. I’m crossing my fingers that this will end in Rúan’s growth in socialisation and friendship. (Okay, yes, I’m gunning for a lot, but I can hope, can’t i? 😂)

    Also, I’m formally begging you for Ruan art lol

    I’m trying to find some good ones. 😅 (Also, apparently if I have an image in a post, SE will eat it ._.)

    So I was not initially planning on writing this, but it’s interesting.  This is not at all how Basil talks normally – it’s 100% the propaganda speaking.  He’s out of the labs, but there’s still a little part of that fanatically loyal soldier in him still, and I honestly had no idea until I wrote this!

    *whispers* I love this so much.

    Basil is being incredibly casual about the whole “alternate worlds/timelines” because this is considered cutting edge science in his world!  Of course Ruan probably has no idea what he’s talking about lol

    Ahhh, I was wondering about that. Thank you for the clarification. 😁

    It’s going to be really interesting to see the differences in the sciences of their respective worlds!

    Yes! Absolutely! 😃

    _____

    RÚAN:

    “Spire.”

    What?

    “I come from Spire, the shining white city of the West.”

    Oh, that’s his homeland. I quickly shut my mouth to avoid blurting something half-baked and most likely insensitive. Having a mouth with a mind of its own was exasperating.

    “I’m very fortunate to live there, because it’s the greatest city in the Confederation, and the Confederation is the greatest country on -” He paused, an odd look on his face.

    I wondered, with a hint of amusement, if he’d tripped over his own pride. I’d done it so many times that I took a bit of comfort in knowing I wasn’t alone.

    The young man continued, in a much quicker, quieter tone. “Not that it’s something to be proud of or anything like that.  I don’t even get to see it that much because I’m not allowed to go outside – unless I’m with Skia or someone, and that only happens maybe once a month if I’m lucky…” he winced as though he’d realised he said something hurtful.

    I blinked at him. He didn’t hurt me, so why was he looking like he did?

    “Besides, only rich people get to live in the ‘shining white’ part,” he muttered.

    So he came from a country of glory … and never was a part of the glory itself.

    If nothing else, that was common ground.

    The young man hugged his knees, reminding me of the sick boys I’d seen on the streets of Vulgen during winter, despite how our village never produced snow.

    But I didn’t understand why he looked so horrible …

    He looked … scared of me.

    I wasn’t an intimidating presence, according to General Gregor Fireflash. But then again, he’d also claimed I came straight from Sheol, so his word was not meant to be taken too literally.

    “What about you?” he asked weakly.

    Me?

    I cringed, trying to blot out the memories of Vulgen’s attack.

    “I … come from a den of thieves,” I mumbled, keeping my eyes down so that I don’t have to see the horrified look he’ll be sure to harbour. “I was raised in a village full of immorality and crime, the son of a single mother.”

    I gritted my teeth, the sting of the spit hitting my face and the accusing voice shouting still fresh in my mind.

    “Vulgen was a village under the boot of the Empire, and we were treated worse than dirt. So we treated each other worse than dirt.”

    I waited for him to say something — anything — in response, but the silence hung thick and stifling.

    In fact, the silence was probably worse than judgmental replies.

    I risked a glance up at the young man, but looked away quickly before I could see his expression. “I’m not like my village, though,” I quickly added. “I’m not going to sink as low as that.”

    Maybe he wouldn’t judge me if he thought I wanted nothing to do with it all.

    But I was just as dirty as Vulgen. Everyone knew that.

    No one even remotely better than Vulgen’s people would run while their mother and betrothed were dragged off to their fates.

    _______

     

    Right, so … my poor lil’ cinnamon roll is broken and bleeding. 😁

    Oh yeah, feel free to change anything uncharacteristic, though I purposefully made it so that I wasn’t controlling Basil too much. 🙂

    I am broken. I am bleeding .... But I am beautiful.

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