But I’m back! Hi! *waves excitedly*

So for my June critique piece, I’d like to present the third chapter of my WIP. *throws confetti*

Chapter 3.

Please critique for:

– Show Don’t Tell: It’s hard for me.

– Interesting-ness: Does it intrigue you and pull you into the story more?…[Read more]

– Ok. Haha that’s funny and kinda ironic that I’m not in her head enough since she’s a telepath… XD

– Ok! Thanks for the advice.

– oOh. o.O You didn’t? Wow this must not have made much sense huh? Thanks, that’s good! Haha I liked writing the ending.

Yeah I do. XP Ok, yeah, that does make sense.

Thanks! 😀

Here are the broken tags:

@allison-grace @bekks2017 @catwing @cowlick @enu @filewriter @lydia-writes @theinvizibleman @devastate-lasting @sarah-inkdragon @sarah-narnathron @ajaj2000 @sageinthemeadow @kara-lynn

For my December critique piece, I’d like to present the second chapter of my current WIP!

Before I forget, here’s the link: Chapter 2 WIP

Please look for:

– Character Development: Am I still describing my characters well?

– Show Don’t Tell: Yeah… I’ve had trouble with that before….

– Setting/Worldbuilding: Is the setting…[Read more]

Hope you all had a great Christmas! 😀

@emgc Also praying! Glad to hear she’s doing a little better! 🙂

@Sarah-Inkdragon
@Devastate-Lasting
@Sageinthemeadow
@ENU
@The-Inkspiller…[Read more]

Ooh cool! 😛 Editing takes awhile.

That’s great! 😀 Oh wow; I haven’t even tried doing NaNoWriMo this year because I knew I’d be busy. Maybe next year…

It’s great that you’re getting a lot of work done though! Will you be posting it for beta-reading? *hopeful glance* 😀

Thanks! Wow–I’ve never played Fantasia personally; just heard it. It is really beautiful.

Ok, I can see how the overuse of adverbs could be a problem. I’ll see what I can do. Thanks!

Ok, I’ll see if there are any parts where I could add in that.

You’re right; another part of the significance is that he learns to always try t…[Read more]

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1I-gTN4YlIu4CkwYvKh1tbr_du0igYllol7tEhiQFzi8/edit?usp=sharing

It’s set to comment access. Thanks!

( @karthmin @catwing @allison-grace )

This critiquing piece isn’t a part of my WIP; it’s an essay from school. 😛 (Don’t worry it’s a narrative.)

Could you guys please look it over?

Please look for:

Sensory Images: Appeal to one or more of the five senses

Purposeful Dialogue: Dialogue that is related to the narrator’s message.

Descriptive Language: Specific details and…[Read more]

How have you been doing?

Great job! It reminds me of this big group game I’ve played before called “Assassin”… *shrugs*

– Style: I really liked your style; it made the whole story fun and intriguing to read.

– Characters: You described your characters really well; as a reader I could really get a glimpse of what they were thinking. I would…[Read more]

Oof why are you making me choose? XD

I think my favorite books/series at the present time are:

– The Inheritance Cycle by Christopher Paolini

– Harry Potter (because why not 😛 )

– The Chronicles of Narnia

Long story short, the dad of one of my friends just died, probably only an hour and a half ago. We don’t really know why, we think it was either health problems that suddenly manifested themselves or just he tripped (either way he ended up falling downstairs. I fully believe that he made it to heaven, but…[Read more]

“A group of writers. With each other through the mountains and the dark depths of the valleys. For the Eternal King, forever.”

could be like our motto or something for an archway into Erekdale. I can see if I can make a graphic art for it sometime today and post it? *shrugs*

Honestly, I have no idea. 😛 (which is kinda sad since I’m a guy). I’d suggest following the advice of @daeus-lamb @karthmin @parker and all the other people who commented before me, because they could probably explain it better than I could. XD

@princess-foo Ooh, I like that! I’m still a Golden Retriever then? *shrugs*

And I had a map buried away somewhere, maybe we could…[Read more]

@morreafirebird Thanks! I’ll try that out. 🙂

My October goals are the same, but here are my goals for this week (aka the next two and a half weeks…[Read more]

Does anyone have any ideas on how to counteract writer’s block? I have this idea, but I’m unsure how to describe it. 😐

@sageinthemeadow Hope you feel better soon! I hate colds. 😐

@morreafirebird Thank you! That’s true, I think it makes the description a lot better. Thanks! 😀

@seekjustice Thank you! Great poem! I like how it ends on a happy note. 🙂

This is hilarious! XD XD XD

Literally the bushy eyebrows part had my dying of laughter. 😂😂😂

This is so funny.

Can I be of help? I might have some free time for writing this weekend. *gasps at free time*

Here’s a line that I just wrote. Am I describing too little, too much, or just right? Do you have any suggestions?

“She felt rage of an unknown magnitude boil somewhere deep inside her; forming a monster that writhed just underneath her skin, yearning to be set…

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@the-inkspiller @taaka-merespinner I’ll pray as well!

o.o Wow. I would drop dead-fast asleep after 24 hours awake, let alone 36… Why did you not sleep for that long?

And wow, you can function that late? *look of impression*

Yep. *grins* I think I got at least half of the names in this from Tale. XD That and the Scarlet Pimpernel…

Thank you! I like doing that; it is kind of challenging so that I don’t overdescribe it or make it boring.

– Thank you! o.o *silence*

– Yep. It’s kind of like where I live, but also kind of like L.A. (I generally set…[Read more]

Thank you! 😀

Yes! *fist bumps self* Thank you so much!

XD I get that it’s short; the prologue itself was only like two pages. 🙂

My October Writing Goals:

– Write Chapter 2 of my WIP

– Write Post-Climax 1 of my WIP

– Chapter 3 of my WIP (maybe)

– Revise Prologue/Chapter 1 according to SE critiques

– Chapter 4 of WIP (maybe)

I’m starting out OK on these. *shrugs*

I have a prayer request. Yesterday, one of my friends at school was at pageantry practice and, long story short, she hit her head really hard with one of the props. Today when I was talking to her, she was having fairly severe memory lapses and ended up having to go to the emergency room because the doctors were afraid she had a minor…[Read more]

I have a prayer request. Yesterday, one of my friends at school was at pageantry practice and, long story short, she hit her head really hard with one of the props. Today when I was talking to her, she was having fairly severe memory lapses and ended up having to go to the emergency room because the doctors were afraid she had a minor…[Read more]