*grabs pen and rushes in to battle with words*

@filewriter

1. the overall flow of your story is solid.

there’s a lot of info dumping in your prologue which is usually saved and spread out along the first few chapters.  prologues are an attention grabber; more snappy and say “mysterious.”

your paragraphs are very long which can lead to them being clunky.  there’s nothing wrong with large p…[Read more]

@warrenluther04 – no problem!  happy writing!

if you would like I can go and highlight and comment the sections I was talking about.  🙂

@sarah-inkdragon

in answer to your questions:

-I love the flow of your story.  the way you arranged the paragraph and sentence lengths kept your prose from getting bogged down and clunky.  it flowed smoothly and I thought that Kirin’s thoughts fit nicely in.

there’s two areas where I was confused: when he goes from the arena into the barracks i…[Read more]

@warrenluther04

to answer your questions:

-it is intriguing.  I like how you drop the reader right into the action.  it makes me curious for what went on before and what is going to happen.

-the characters are mysterious however I was getting confused to who was doing the talking and the action; at some points your wording is vague.

-overall I…[Read more]

Hi!

Here’s a snippet from a scene I wrote today –

My breath clouds the air in front of me.  It’s cold outside but I made a promise.

Never miss a sunset.

I disperse the clouds, exchange them for new ones with another breath.

The sun is burning everything it touches a gold that cannot be replicated no matter how many photos I take.  It is n…[Read more]

@karthmin – I agree!  I find some of his word choices questionable… *coughs*, it’s really easy to get bogged down in his prose and he isn’t my favourite author but I also “admire” him for getting published at a young age and for creating an interesting world.

I love this idea! *wips out pen and paper* I’ll have to get writing then. xD

@sarah-inkdragon – ooohhh… *headdesk* I read your response wrong.  Sorry about that.

xD he was one of the characters I found the most interesting…

@sarah-inkdragon – I didn’t mean to be nasty or slight Christopher Paolini.  I had just finished reading Eragon and moving onto Eldest when I wrote that sentence so I had been reading a lot of his writing.  I was copying his writing style when I wrote it – it wasn’t my voice so that’s why I think it’s bad not because I think that Paolini’s w…[Read more]

Sorry I’ve been MIA – school started and I’m terrible at being active online. 🙁

Anyways I’ll try better to be active.  🙂

Here are my September writing goals:

-edit and get my poetry manuscript ready for beta readers

-write daily in journal

-plot a book

I hope you all have a productive and lovely September!

@sarah-inkdragon – wow I’m late to the party xD.  *arrives with burnt cookies*  Anyway I think that this is an amazing idea!  I’ve always wanted to share my terrible 2 am ideas with someone :p (for real thought.)

here’s one of the first lines I wrote back in 2015 –

“The rhythmic noise of Naphtal’s axe cut through the forests reproachable sile…[Read more]

I’ve never been to a writer’s conference but I really want to!  It sounds amazing.  What are a few you suggest going to?

@e-b-raulands – Hi!  I’m so sorry for not replying sooner.  I forgot.  🙁

Thank you so much!  That’s what I was hoping it to sound like :p

@scribbles – oh that makes sense…thank you so much!  I shall commence editing it.  :p  I’m sorry for not getting back to you sooner.

I love the emblem especially the wings and mountain.  🙂  As for colors I have no idea what to pick or what they could symbolize.  I do like red and gold though.  If we kept the green back round it could symbolize that we’re growing as writers…that probably sounded ridiculously cliche.  I don’t know.  xD

As for mythical creatures I love what [Read more]

@filewriter -I was going to say I love Tolkien too but then I realized how awkward it sounded :p  I think it’s spelled: the silmarillion 🙂

@morreafirebird – that’s great!  I write free verse too because it also comes naturally to me and I can’t rhyme to save me life so…xD

@morreafirebird – I started writing poetry last year to process some things however I haven’t really written anymore poems since January of this year.  Do you write poetry?

@sarah-inkdragon – I can’t guess why xD  Gouache is a mix of watercolor and acrylic.  It’s still opaque however it isn’t as thin as watercolor.  Ooh!  That’s awesome!  🙂 I’m not really good at painting.  Yes!  I definitely agree Christian fantasy needs more twisty plot twists.   Same!  I love those things in books.

@ajaj2000 – thank you 🙂

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