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  • #41773
    lydia-writes
    @lydia-writes

    Hi! I wrote a poem for a contest but forgot to enter and missed the deadline. :p This was my first time writing a free verse poem from a prompt and with guidelines. I’ve written free verse poems before though. Any critiques are welcome 🙂
    The guidelines were
    -must start with “Dear (something)”
    -30 word limit

    Dear heart
    He calls
    Courage
    I’m drowning in a sea of anxiety
    Wind mutes his voice
    Focused on my problems
    I miss his outstretched hand
    He calms the sea instead

    I’m not sure about the last line…
    Also what poem would you write with the guidelines?
    -Lydia

    @scribbles

    I’m not sure who else to tag xD

    writer - I talk to imaginary people-reader-avid plant collector-not all who wander are lost-Eph. 4:6

    #41791
    E.B. Raulands
    @e-b-raulands

    @lydia-writes
    I really like this poem!  =)
    I love how the last line conveys Christ’s faithfulness to and love for the believer even when he/she stumbles!

    To the glory of God and for the advancement of His kingdom.

    #42106
    Rachel Rogers
    @scribbles

    Sorry for being late to the party!

    I love the last line! I would recommend adding punctuation to the poem for clarity, possibly like this (for example), but how exactly you punctuate all depends on how you want to connect and break the thoughts:

    Dear heart,
    He calls…
    Courage.
    I’m drowning in a sea of anxiety.
    Wind mutes his voice.
    Focused on my problems,
    I miss his outstretched hand.
    He calms the sea instead.

    In general, it’s helpful to use commas, periods, and line breaks to keep the meaning clear in freeform. Otherwise it all starts to run together and the reader won’t know which phrases go with which thought.

    Ambiverted INFP. Scribbles all the words. Names the plant friends. Secretly Edna the Piguirrel.

    #47054
    lydia-writes
    @lydia-writes

    @e-b-raulands – Hi!  I’m so sorry for not replying sooner.  I forgot.  🙁

    Thank you so much!  That’s what I was hoping it to sound like :p


    @scribbles
    – oh that makes sense…thank you so much!  I shall commence editing it.  :p  I’m sorry for not getting back to you sooner.

     

    writer - I talk to imaginary people-reader-avid plant collector-not all who wander are lost-Eph. 4:6

    #47058
    Rachel Rogers
    @scribbles

    @lydia-writes No worries! My presence on the forum has been a bit hit-and-miss lately, so I hadn’t even noticed. 😀

    Ambiverted INFP. Scribbles all the words. Names the plant friends. Secretly Edna the Piguirrel.

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