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wOw. I’ve … been gone for awhile. *ponders in a corner*

But I’m back! Hi! *waves excitedly*

So for my June critique piece, I’d like to present the third chapter of my WIP. *throws confetti*

Chapter 3.

Please critique for:

– Show Don’t Tell: It’s hard for me.

– Interesting-ness: Does it intrigue you and pull you into the story more? (Especially the dream scene).

– Flow: Does it flow well? Is it too wordy/should I describe certain things more?

– And do you guys want to keep reading? If not, how can I make it more interesting so it does?

Thanks! 😀

@morreafirebird @allison-grace @bekks2017 @catwing @cowlick @enu @filewriter @lydia-writes @theinvizibleman @devastate-lasting @sarah-inkdragon @sarah-narnathron @ajaj2000 @sageinthemeadow @kara-lynn @karthmin @the-inkspiller @emgc @Erekdale