Story Embers | Ben P | Activity https://storyembers.org/members/supermonkey42/activity/ Activity feed for Ben P. Thu, 30 Apr 2026 10:09:57 -0400 https://buddypress.org/?v= en 30 hourly 2 e89d944a1fca25b9749096d29425b375 Ben P replied to the topic Magic Systems in the forum Research and Worldbuilding https://storyembers.org/activity/p/15292/ Tue, 28 Aug 2018 16:48:02 -0400 @sam-kowal Well, it looks like I’m late. And everything good has already been said. Oh well. šŸ™‚

Btw, I will likely be kicked off the guild for inactivity, so… yeah. See ya around.

]]> 0 abf6b1f9779041a91a9b87ae9eb4dfd8 Ben P replied to the topic New Inactivity Policy in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/15290/ Tue, 28 Aug 2018 16:41:42 -0400 @gabriellepollack Yes… I may just have to voluntarily resign, if that’s a thing. My life was very different back in April (or whenever SE launched), and I hardly have time to write anymore, which means I don’t have much motivation to visit the site.

Maybe I’ll be back when stuff returns to normal (if that ever happens.) So long, and…

]]> 0 e4dc4f141d8ade97390ef4d6de8902cf Ben P replied to the topic Topic #11: Shock in the forum Annual Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/11831/ Fri, 20 Jul 2018 14:53:28 -0400 If it’s in there purely for the shock factor, it’s not appreciated.

Now, if there is a character who, as part of their personality, curses occasionally, that’s probably fine. Or if they do something vulgar so the author can show who they are, fine. But even then a graphic description is not needed.

]]> 0 eb6115c2f1700ce5bb8e5d61a2f5e799 Ben P replied to the topic Guild War #4 in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/11830/ Fri, 20 Jul 2018 14:40:37 -0400 @christianna-hellwig I really like your story. I have one suggestion: It seems to me that the boy understands a lot for a five year old. Just a touch more confusion on his part would make him feel more naive and vulnerable, I think. I left a comment on the Google Doc.

]]> 0 2e7e3de5705ff7cbc64427aba296013f Ben P replied to the topic Guild War #4 in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/11827/ Fri, 20 Jul 2018 14:10:57 -0400 @christianna-hellwig *inward sigh* Yes, I know I havenā€™t been very active in the guild lately. Itā€™s not that I donā€™t want to… itā€™s just that this has been the craziest summer if my life, and I havenā€™t had time for any writing at all, let alone Guid Wars.

When August comes around and things settle down, I should be able to help out in the Guild…[Read more]

]]> 0 6a6e5425f45c1a6da2a0717569cd80a6 Ben P replied to the topic The Official Avensbeck Book Club in the forum Story Analysis https://storyembers.org/activity/p/10769/ Fri, 06 Jul 2018 13:57:57 -0400 @gabriellepollack That sounds like a very good idea! August will beĀ much less busy.

]]> 0 6700521053c21be3237fb1bd281d5c45 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome Thread for New Avensers! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/10717/ Thu, 05 Jul 2018 18:30:47 -0400 Welcome, @zanzibee ! What kind of things do you write?

]]> 0 da3224c12a5bdab5f5078c1cf13308ab Ben P replied to the topic FIRST SE FICTION STORY: RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARC in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/10548/ Wed, 04 Jul 2018 02:11:06 -0400 @mariposa XD Best part yet!

Teletubbies: the ultimate torture deviceĀ 

]]> 0 c655447f615642989996f5a077f4283f Ben P replied to the topic Avensbeck Book Club Discussion #2 in the forum Story Analysis https://storyembers.org/activity/p/10249/ Sat, 30 Jun 2018 15:02:28 -0400 @gabriellepollack Iā€™ve always liked Bilboā€™s riddle competition with Gollum.

I would say more, but I am visiting my grandparents and only have internet for a few minutes. Turns out summer is a bad time for me to do a book club…. Sorry.

]]> 0 a81f499505287c4908da463434278f71 Ben P replied to the topic Looking for laptop recommendations in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/10100/ Thu, 28 Jun 2018 23:55:37 -0400 @sam-kowal Yeah, I do coding and electrical engineering. Which means Iā€™m looking at paying $1800 for a new laptop. šŸ™ (16GB RAM, 512 GB HDD, i7 processor, fancy graphics card)

]]> 0 15d8f55f82adeea2b29c1877e67f0e09 Ben P replied to the topic Looking for laptop recommendations in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/10099/ Thu, 28 Jun 2018 23:53:11 -0400 Hey, @kate

What Sam said is pretty good. Iā€™d say the biggest factor is what exactly are you planning on doing with it?

If you just need Word Ā and internet, then Iā€™d recommend an i3 processor and 4GB of RAM.

For Photoshop or other more intensive programs, go with an i5 processor and 8GB of RAM.

Hard drive space is up to you, and I donā€™t recomm…[Read more]

]]> 0 d3dcf5b6f52e69b5bbedaac8f176de1b Ben P replied to the topic FIRST SE FICTION STORY: RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARC in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/9220/ Tue, 19 Jun 2018 15:08:05 -0400 @mariposa That is… just… Iā€™m speechless!

Itā€™s perfect. XD

@daeus-lamb , youā€™ve never looked better. šŸ˜‰

]]> 0 bbd710cee74b3feae420b273d509da76 Ben P replied to the topic Guild War #3 in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/9066/ Sat, 16 Jun 2018 21:04:38 -0400 @j-a-penrose I vote for @sam-kowal ā€™s piece. Itā€™s very original with Lyra believing she killed her daughter.

]]> 0 8a3756b5c63deb16beddf903ebea76bf Ben P replied to the topic Guild War #3 in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8950/ Thu, 14 Jun 2018 23:06:53 -0400 @jenwriter17 The only suggestion I have for your piece is to possibly mention what the unnamed guy did to mess up Emmie’s family; it might connect with readers more if they know why they’re supposed to hate him so much. Besides that, it’s well done.

]]> 0 c2c55dca1e8d40f7ed738d5a460f06ed Ben P replied to the topic Guild War #3 in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8949/ Thu, 14 Jun 2018 22:57:43 -0400 @sam-kowal I made some suggestions on your story, but really they’re just small stylistic things. I can’t think of any ways to vastly improve it at the moment. In other words, it’s very good! šŸ˜‰

]]> 0 f6583f38dec552c752ae054274adde6e Ben P replied to the topic How to Write Believable Emotion: Discussion Topic Five in the forum Annual Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8917/ Thu, 14 Jun 2018 15:31:38 -0400 @gabriellepollack Yeah, Omni or some form of it. I guess explaining and telling just comes easily for me, so I’m always having to go back and edit it to show more.

]]> 0 3158e7926701c753d660ce580e22ac01 Ben P replied to the topic Aberdeenā€™s Top Secret Project Unveiled in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8916/ Thu, 14 Jun 2018 15:27:53 -0400 Ooh… nice! *Heads off to explore the site*

]]> 0 44340d695c85bcee258bcc3ab61d81d1 Ben P replied to the topic Emotion and Characters: Discussion Topic #7 in the forum Annual Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8915/ Thu, 14 Jun 2018 15:23:57 -0400 (Sorry I’m late)

Characters who are perfect stereotypes (the evil overlord, the fearless hero, the damsel-in-distress, the bumbling henchman, etc.) never connect to readers because those people rarely if ever exist in the real world. Evil rulers have doubts and fears. Heroes mess up and do the wrong thing sometimes. Real people are very…[Read more]

]]> 0 2a0c7d05d85e4fb6355c1faa5035953a Ben P replied to the topic The Official Avensbeck Book Club in the forum Story Analysis https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8914/ Thu, 14 Jun 2018 15:16:09 -0400 @gabriellepollack I’m looking forward to it!

]]> 0 6d472f225bb14b8a8d8ed4d993f1a67e Ben P replied to the topic Guild War #3 in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8912/ Thu, 14 Jun 2018 15:12:35 -0400 Hey, guys… sorry I haven’t been around to help with the Guild War. I was on vacation for a week, and then I had a wedding to go to, and this weekend there’s another wedding… I’ve been busy. šŸ™‚

So – I don’t know if there has been a decision between @jenwriter17 ‘s piece and @sam-kowal ‘s piece, but I vote for Sam’s. It’s interesting how Lyra…[Read more]

]]> 0 1e3ae2b23ab01287521d7db97d02c375 Ben P replied to the topic Story Embers Anthem in the forum Poetry Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/8139/ Wed, 06 Jun 2018 17:54:44 -0400 @anne-of-lothlorien I would venture to say this is even better than the KP anthem! Very well done. I like the ā€œbattle songā€ style.

]]> 0 cff0afb632a079d5d4a0e57733aca42b Ben P replied to the topic How to Write Believable Emotion: Discussion Topic Five in the forum Annual Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/7927/ Tue, 05 Jun 2018 03:00:39 -0400 I do believe Iā€™ve read that before. šŸ™‚

I tend to have the opposite problem and not show enough emotion, but I still struggle with these sometimes.

Over-explaining happens to meĀ a lot. It doesnā€™t help that my most comfortable writing style uses a narrator-like voice, which involves a lot of telling.

That and rushing are probably the hardest for…[Read more]

]]> 0 41fb9e04b10b83a26984cd87f5d12b45 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome Thread for New Avensers! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/7925/ Tue, 05 Jun 2018 02:36:40 -0400 Welcome, @natalie-marie ! Itā€™s always great to have another Avenser.

]]> 0 6320b32c10e66c4670277e25399fd19d Ben P replied to the topic Avensbeck Book Club, Anyone? in the forum Avensbeck Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/7017/ Wed, 30 May 2018 18:08:28 -0400 I vote forĀ The HobbitĀ orĀ Dire Recompence.

]]> 0 9c8220a5d219cc6fbf3879a0324b6996 Ben P replied to the topic Avensbeck Book Club, Anyone? in the forum Avensbeck Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/6014/ Thu, 24 May 2018 18:53:20 -0400 Iā€™m just waiting for you guys to make a decision. šŸ™‚ Between those options I donā€™t really care.

]]> 0 6af4aff954e132de8ec069e9f2dfb5d2 Ben P replied to the topic Avensbeck Book Club, Anyone? in the forum Avensbeck Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/5328/ Sat, 19 May 2018 14:37:35 -0400 @gabriellepollack Sure! I canā€™t guarantee that I would always have time, but usually I would be able to.

]]> 0 6de5bdcc5b9a540068784586556c3dfe Ben P replied to the topic File has arrived! in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4571/ Sat, 12 May 2018 20:39:10 -0400 @corkybookworm *bows humbly* Youā€™re welcome. šŸ˜€

]]> 0 b57b7561d971779665c6547860ec1414 Ben P replied to the topic File has arrived! in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4555/ Sat, 12 May 2018 19:08:43 -0400 @corkybookworm Yes, Iā€™m already thinking up ideas.

To answer your question: As far as I can tell, the guilds arenā€™t visible unless youā€™re in one. For example, when I go to the main forum page I can see Avensbeck, but I canā€™t see any of the others. So when you get in a guild it should just pop up on the forum page.

I hope that helps!

]]> 0 c6b1d09b09b514c54ea1a3f882d39725 Ben P replied to the topic File has arrived! in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4399/ Fri, 11 May 2018 14:31:10 -0400 @filewriter Ah, 15. That was a good age. Pardon me while I reminisce over my (recent) past.

…

Actually, I know what you mean about Nothingleft Tosay. šŸ™‚

This is random, but I’m thinking about writing some KP Lit even though KP shut down. Or maybe it’ll be a mix of KP and SE. We’ll see.

@warrenluther04 I think I know who your guildmaster…[Read more]

]]> 0 c0e17a1feca344a77a03c189e173da0e Ben P replied to the topic Using Setting to Highlight the Mood in the forum Annual Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4397/ Fri, 11 May 2018 14:10:41 -0400 @gabriellepollack Thanks! Yeah, it was originally twice that long, but I tried to get it as close to the word count as possible. It’s still over. Maybe I should have just left it. šŸ™‚

]]> 0 5b8fb926933a32d70952929e57079271 Ben P replied to the topic Farewell to Our Firebird in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4395/ Fri, 11 May 2018 14:07:31 -0400 @gabriellepollack So how many guilds are there now? Also, is she in charge of Erekdale?

]]> 0 a06448680078ad22702bb417fd50a1a9 Ben P replied to the topic Hey guys! in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4232/ Thu, 10 May 2018 12:53:54 -0400 @valtmy Hey! Great to see another KeePer. Do you plan to join a guild?

]]> 0 e0b11cb5ced6931cf930f51c6eeb8ffa Ben P replied to the topic File has arrived! in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4230/ Thu, 10 May 2018 12:41:59 -0400 @filewriter Erekdale? Iā€™ve not heard of that one. I guess thereā€™s more than three then. I only knew of Avensbeck, Rillumen, and New Wessex.

Iā€™m 17, though I feel like I should be at least one year younger. šŸ˜‰

Okay, I have to ask, who is Nothingleft Tosay?

]]> 0 99ebc09fda2ee39022108fd98e32f74d Ben P replied to the topic File has arrived! in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4180/ Thu, 10 May 2018 00:28:01 -0400 @filewriter I’m in Avensbeck. I haven’t seen you there so I’m guessing you’re in one of the others. Yeah, there are quite a few Kapeefers here.

Cute dog, btw. šŸ™‚

(I’m sorry, B-bot. I’m not trying to steal your name! It’s just that our names happen to start with the same letter, and we’re both robots of a sort, so… šŸ˜‰ )

]]> 0 44af8e097c04b9cfa50337c9401f5360 Ben P replied to the topic Using Setting to Highlight the Mood in the forum Annual Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4178/ Thu, 10 May 2018 00:20:36 -0400 @gabriellepollack Well, I’m not sure if this is exactly what you meant, but here’s what I wrote:

* * *

Trent marched through the battlefield along with the rest of the soldiers in his company, heading towards the last stronghold of the enemy. Sleet drizzled over the field, mixing with the churned earth to form cold, slick mud. Trent sighed…[Read more]

]]> 0 709cb6ee5fd76ae36e9529e6c1af9487 Ben P replied to the topic File has arrived! in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4138/ Wed, 09 May 2018 18:20:59 -0400 @filewriter Hey! I didn’t notice your introduction topic, so I’m a bit late. Anyways, welcome! Are you in a guild yet?

]]> 0 e8c6725a00a8ba07da389557c9313781 Ben P replied to the topic The Champions Of Our Noble Contest. in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/4112/ Wed, 09 May 2018 16:43:55 -0400 Wow, great job, everybody! Of course Iā€™m partial to Avensbeck, but Rillumen and New Wessexā€™s pieces were both great.

]]> 0 0191b4efeb843705550cc0f529284d27 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome to the Guild Wars! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3754/ Mon, 07 May 2018 01:47:41 -0400 @morreafirebird Great! Sorry I couldnā€™t help more. Maybe weā€™ll have it figured out better the next time around.

May the best writers win! šŸ˜€

]]> 0 5eb81c7c561214d3c7824fb092159f3f Ben P replied to the topic Welcome to the Guild Wars! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3587/ Fri, 04 May 2018 23:26:20 -0400 @morreafirebird Okay, here are a couple of suggestions. I may come up with more later.

1) First off, I was slightly confused when I read your story as to what was going on with the doorway and all that. I figured it out by the end, but I had to re-read a couple of sections. So that could be clarified.

2) The sunrise could also be more expounded…[Read more]

]]> 0 f21cfb7a06967461dd72160038358661 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome to the Guild Wars! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3446/ Thu, 03 May 2018 21:56:47 -0400 @overcomer I vote for @morreafirebird ‘s piece. I really like the uniqueness of it.

]]> 0 5863eb51850e3fa30fdcd5ba90c681a3 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome to the Guild Wars! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3403/ Thu, 03 May 2018 18:55:47 -0400 @morreafirebird I like yours. Very interesting take on it.

@jenwriter17 Yeah, I can’t view your Google Doc either.

]]> 0 478f464176e51d2f66a17fe381d04ad2 Ben P replied to the topic Prayer Requests #1 in the forum Prayer Requests https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3391/ Thu, 03 May 2018 17:05:28 -0400 @jenwriter17 I sure will. I know what thatā€™s like.

]]> 0 2709f89b6ad0baf92a5e88f98f7d04cb Ben P replied to the topic Prayer Requests #1 in the forum Prayer Requests https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3353/ Thu, 03 May 2018 13:00:40 -0400 Hey, guys! Today is, if you didnā€™t already know, the National Day of Prayer. I just thought I would encourage everyone to pray for our government and elected officials, as well as churches and believers around the world. They certainly need it these days.

@toklaham-veruzia @overcomer @epicaddie2 @sam-kowal @morreafirebird @snapper @jenwriter17 <…[Read more]

]]> 0 dfcf9d0200ff0532aba54d82c2da1514 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome to the Guild Wars! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3230/ Wed, 02 May 2018 17:57:26 -0400 @overcomer *breathes a sigh of relief* Yes. Definitely. I like your plan. Letā€™s do that.

Every army needs a battle plan.

]]> 0 05cb853e0cd5f1b9a0adfc32b83ffd69 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome to the Guild Wars! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/3059/ Tue, 01 May 2018 22:20:55 -0400 @sam-kowal I vote for telling it from the sun’s point of view. That would make it unique. And more likely to win. šŸ˜‰

@jenwriter17 I agree on the other planet thing.

@morreafirebird I like the idea of telling a sort of story while describing it.

]]> 0 699b66961c9f677bf5a24e585af8cc31 Ben P replied to the topic FIRST SE FICTION STORY: RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARC in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/2907/ Tue, 01 May 2018 14:18:16 -0400 @mariposa *takes a swig of awesomesauce and slams the bottle onto a table* I’m loving this series! There are just too many things to laugh at. @josiah makes a good action-adventure character. šŸ™‚

General Raspberry… XD

I will anxiously await the next installment!

– Ben Putty šŸ˜‰

]]> 0 708678e55c511310c68a9bbd1addd4a5 Ben P replied to the topic Welcome to the Guild Wars! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/2901/ Tue, 01 May 2018 13:11:03 -0400 @sleepwalkingmk Yes, I agree, we should use emotions somehow.

Here’s my idea: We could describe the darkness retreating and shrinking before the light of the sun. I think it would be a cool effect, kind of a reversal. And then once the darkness is gone you describe the majesty of the risen sun.

Actually, that could also work really well if you…[Read more]

]]> 0 8826f03aa6b08980fe5239a445c99312 Ben P replied to the topic *sleepwalks in* in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/2579/ Sun, 29 Apr 2018 13:52:31 -0400 @allison-grace *observes a moment of silence for Kanan*

]]> 0 cf61105016f6c5a99cd4923005e61035 Ben P replied to the topic *sleepwalks in* in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/2578/ Sun, 29 Apr 2018 13:49:06 -0400 @sleepwalkingmk We pick and choose a lot. Example: we have used material from Apologia, BJU, Christian Liberty Press, Life of Fred, Jensenā€™s, Teaching Textbooks, Rosetta Stone, Abeka, Answers in Genesis, and half a dozen others in the past. šŸ˜‰

]]> 0 4747bda64a622141ff4ae297bb80be07 Ben P replied to the topic *sleepwalks in* in the forum Introduce Yourself https://storyembers.org/activity/p/2493/ Sat, 28 Apr 2018 18:29:15 -0400 @sleepwalkingmk Welcome, fellow Avenser!

I’m also homeschooled, but I’ve never heard of Wilson Hill Academy.

Romania. Wow. That’s pretty cool!

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