Selah CJW

@writergirl101

Oh wow, thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’ll be sure to tag you when I post anything else in the future. 🙂

@kristianne-hassman

Glad to help!  I like your style–it was easy to follow.  I’d love to read anything else you post!

@taylorclogston

Thank you for reading it and for your suggestions. You brought up some good points that I will definitely consider. As for the ending, I personally prefer when stories have some sort of closure rather than ending abruptly. I can see what you mean about the angel part not being necessary. I don’t think I’ll take it out completely,…[Read more]

@writergirl101

Thanks so much for taking the time to read it and give suggestions! I really appreciate it. I will think about how to rephrase those sentences. 🙂

I agree with Ella about the close repeats and formatting.

All I “know” of operating rooms comes from TV, so please be patient =P First, would anyone bother thinking or saying “ECG machine” instead of just “ECG?” Second, would the MC be required to formally call time of death, or is that just a TV thing?

Why is this the patient who gets to the…[Read more]

Sorry, the quotes didn’t work.

@kristianne-hassman

Wow!  That was amazing!  I only spotted a couple of things that won’t take long to fix.

Kristianne Hassman wrote:
Breathe, I tell myself. In and out. In and out. My heart calms and I lean back, closing my eyes.
Maybe you could use italics to distinguish her thoughts for readability’s sake.  If you decide to do that, then ma…[Read more]

@kristianne-hassman

Wow!  That was amazing!  I only spotted a couple of things that won’t take long to fix.

Maybe you could use italics to distinguish her thoughts for readability’s sake.  If you decide to do that, then maybe you could scan the manuscript and italicize her other thoughts for consistency.

Maybe a synonym here?

Again, re…[Read more]

@kristianne-hassman

Wow!  That was amazing!  There were only a couple of things I noticed.

Maybe you could you italics just to make her thoughts clearer.  I think the readability would be easier.

There are two “help” words in this, so, for readability’s sake, consider using a synonym for one or the other.

I know this leads the reader on…[Read more]

I’ll read and have critique by today or tomorrow.

For future reference I suggest posting a Google Drive or similar link so you can take your story down after you’ve received advice. You don’t have any ability to delete or edit an SE post after a short initial period.

@vic

Ok, wait wait wait.  What is happening?!  I need more!! 🙏🙏😃  You can’t just stop there…😁

Great job, btw!  I love reading these.  It’s such a cool idea and you managed to pull it off without adding any gore/language.  Two thumbs up!!👍👍

Hahaha! Yeah, I have all of them in one Kindle book, although I’ve only finished The Return of Sherlock Holmes and am almost done with A Study in Scarlet. I know, I know – I started with the last book. It’s completely justifiable, though; trust me! 😂 I saw it in a bookstore and was, like, “That’s the ONE. Must. Read.” So yeh. 🤣

@vic

Another awesome part!! Looking forwards to reading more!! 🙂 🙂

@sam-m @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @melodyjoy @claire-h@ anne_the_noob14 @joshuapior

Finally…! Part 4 (end of Part 3 included for a little refresher 😉) Hoping to wrap this one up soonish. We’ll see. There’s potential for a longer version someday, but probably not what I’ll be focusing on. I just want to give this a satisfying finish. The next…[Read more]