Mel

@beth20 @devastate-lasting @arindown @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @eden-anderson @emma-starr @wolverinerm @chalice

Everybody!

I’ve finished the first half of chapter 1 of my story. I’ll post it as another topic and tag ya’lls in it.

Please, comment and give tips. I wanna make sure it sounds good before I get to far into the writing. (I’m sure y…[Read more]

@arindown

Hello!

So, I’m still working on some details but after the car accident (and before too) she is kinda like one of those people who acts like God isn’t really there but she’s a Christian. You probably know what I mean. I’m going to make her really “fight” against God for a while after the car accident, then finally “turn” to Him when…[Read more]

@beth20

Hello!

I can definitely see the improvement on this chapter in comparison to the last one! Great job!

Kinda to copy what everyone else said (LOL LOL), lovin’ the suspense!

Hey, have you posted the 3rd chapter yet. No rush, I asked that mainly because I wanna make sure I didn’t miss anything 🙂

MEL

@beth20

Thanks!

@beth20

Hey! Great Job with your story!

I only had one comment (except for the fact that it’s amazing :))  :

I feel like sometimes when you put something in parentheses, it doesn’t need to be in parentheses… I hope you know what I mean. Sometimes commas would have been better in the particular spot.

Thanks!

MEL

@devastate-lasting

🙂 Thanks so much!

Yeah, I love guinea pigs! I used to have 2 of them (not anymore, sad…)

MEL

OK, so here is the basic “gist” of my story 🙂 :

Chloe Loran worked at a daycare till a horrific car accident seriously injured her. Struggling with depression, guilt, and many serious physical issues, she must turn to God for help with her relationships and her physical and emotional needs. 

I’ll try to post some of the story asap 🙂

Thanks!

MELODY

@eden-anderson

Hey! Thanks for starting this topic! Super awesome! 🙂 (And it really got me thinking)

Your story sounds so intriguing. And sad. I can definitely tell that it’s going to be very well written :).

@wolverinerm

It eats my posts like ALL the time so I have gotten into the habit of copying what I have written so that just in case it…[Read more]

@vic

AND I just read your 3rd portion! **Thumbs up**

I liked how you portray Diane’s character and personality. You do a great job of showing how she is really shy and quiet/reserved 🙂

Is this going to be a long book-type story, or is it going to be a short story? Just wondering’ (cause I love your work so far! 🙂

MEL

@vic

Hello! I really enjoyed reading the second portion of your story!!! Great job!

One thing I enjoy when reading your story is that even though you are writing in 3rd person, I almost feel like it is written in 1st because you help readers picture her and know what she is thinking and going through.

MEL

@emberynus-the-dragonslayer

Yes you can by all means!!!

(sorry hope you don’t mind that I answered for Katja) haha

Thanks!

MEL

@vic

Also, you mentioned how you had the scene in your head but didn’t really have a plot or purpose. My story I am working on right now kinda has the same issues. I had a really awesome (sorta lol) first scene and I got that all written and I also have some other cool parts that I can’t wait to write later on in the book but transitioning is…[Read more]

@vic

I really enjoyed reading your story! I love your writing style. The suspense and mystery of the story and the way you wrote it kept me “on the edge of my seat” 🙂

I think it is so awesome how so many people on SE play the violin. I do to. I enjoy playing it. Another reason why I love this story, because I can relate to just a little part of…[Read more]

@vic

I really enjoyed reading your story! I love your writing style. The suspense and mystery of the story and the way you wrote it kept me “on the edge of my seat” 🙂

I think it is so awesome how so many people on SE play the violin. I do to. I enjoy playing it. Another reason why I love this story, because I can relate to just a little part of…[Read more]