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WarrenLuther04 started the topic June 2019 Critique in the forum Peer Review 6 years, 10 months ago
wOw. I’ve … been gone for awhile. *ponders in a corner*
But I’m back! Hi! *waves excitedly*
So for my June critique piece, I’d like to present the third chapter of my WIP. *throws confetti*
Please critique for:
– Show Don’t Tell: It’s hard for me.
– Interesting-ness: Does it intrigue you and pull you into the story more?…[Read more]
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WarrenLuther04 replied to the topic December Critique in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 3 months ago
Urgh the tags didn’t work. *facepalm*
Here are the broken tags:
@allison-grace @bekks2017 @catwing @cowlick @enu @filewriter @lydia-writes @theinvizibleman @devastate-lasting @sarah-inkdragon @sarah-narnathron @ajaj2000 @sageinthemeadow @kara-lynn
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WarrenLuther04 started the topic December Critique in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 3 months ago
Hello everyone!
For my December critique piece, I’d like to present the second chapter of my current WIP!
Before I forget, here’s the link: Chapter 2 WIP
Please look for:
– Character Development: Am I still describing my characters well?
– Show Don’t Tell: Yeah… I’ve had trouble with that before….
– Setting/Worldbuilding: Is the setting…[Read more]
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WarrenLuther04 started the topic Part 2: September Critiques in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 6 months ago
Hi guys!
Here’s the second part of my September critiquing piece: the first chapter of my current WIP!
What to critique for:
– Character Development: are my characters described enough? Can you get a good image of them in mind?
– Setting/Worldbuilding: How’s the setting? Even though this is early on in the WIP, can you get a fairly clear…[Read more]
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WarrenLuther04 replied to the topic Part 1: September Critique! in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 6 months ago
Whoops
@allison-grace @theinvizibleman @lydia-writes @filewriter @devastate-lasting @sageinthemeadow @kara-lynn @sarah-narnathon
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WarrenLuther04 replied to the topic Part 1: September Critique! in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 6 months ago
I just wanted to let everyone know that the link’s access will change to “view only” as of October 10. You can still comment on it here (why would I turn down advice XD) but you won’t be able to comment directly on the draft. 🙂
@morreafirebird @bekks2017 @allison-grace @theinvizibleman @lydia-writes @filewriter @devastate-lasting @sageinthemeadow…[Read more]
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WarrenLuther04 replied to the topic Part 1: September Critique! in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 6 months ago
Hmm… some of those tags didn’t work.
@bekks @allison-grace @theinvizibleman @lydia-writes @filewriter @devastate-lasting @sageinthemeadow @cowlic @enu @kara-lynn @sarah-narnathron
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WarrenLuther04 started the topic Part 1: September Critique! in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 6 months ago
Hello everyone!
I am here to present the first part of my September critiquing piece: the prologue of my current untitled WIP!
What to critique for:
– Is it intriguing? Since this is kind of the “hook” or “attention-getter” of my WIP, does it catch your attention and make you want to keep reading?
– Character: Yes, the characters are supposed…[Read more]
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Sarah Inkdragon started the topic End of the Year Critique Challenge Piece! in the forum Peer Review 7 years, 7 months ago
Hello fellow Ereki! Today I present to you my September piece for the critique challenge–the first half of chapter one from my WIP, Firemaster. *confetti*
Now, as to what I’d like for critique, I’d like to focus on three main areas:
- Flow–how does the story flow? Is it easy to understand, or are there some confusing parts? How to the…
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K.M. Small started the topic 2018 Week 16: When to pull back on conflict in the forum 7 years, 7 months ago
Hey Ereki!
We’ve been talking a lot about putting conflict into our stories and how to do it, but now I want to pose a question: at what moments in a story should internal conflict (temporarily) die down?
Like action sequences, internal conflict rises and falls throughout a story; if it were intense all the time, it would feel stagnant and…[Read more]
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K.M. Small replied to the topic August 2018 Accountability in the forum Events & Guild Maintenance 7 years, 7 months ago
@thetessinator no worries! It’s great you’re back 🙂 And nice goals for the week!
I’m a tad late posting this because I was gone all day tomorrow, but here are my goals for the week:
– rework my plot
– write a post
– make final edits for my short story
What about you guys?
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@Bekks2017 @Sarah-Inkdragon @Allison-Grace @TheInviZibleMan @lydia-…[Read more]
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K.M. Small started the topic 2018 Week 15: Creating internal conflict (an article) in the forum 7 years, 8 months ago
Good morning, Ereki!
Today I have an excellent article on conflict for you all. Well, actually, it’s Brandon Miller’s article, but since he wrote it when Kingdom Pen was still active, I don’t think I’m betraying our guild 😉
When you’re done, share one point or idea that really stood out to you and how you’re going to use it to…[Read more]
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K.M. Small replied to the topic August 2018 Accountability in the forum Events & Guild Maintenance 7 years, 8 months ago
And here we are at another Monday (one of these days I’ll come up with something more original to say 😉 )
My new goals are:
– get a tangible plot for an idea I’m playing around with
– write an article
– create a Pinterest board for the plot bunny that attacked me yesterday
What about you all?
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K.M. Small started the topic The Hobbit in the forum 7 years, 8 months ago
Anyone up for discussing and analyzing this little book called The Hobbit? 😉
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@Bekks2017 @Sarah-Inkdragon @Allison-Grace @TheInviZibleMan @lydia-writes @Devastate-Lasting @WarrenLuther04 @ajaj2000 @Sageinthemeadow @cowlick @ENU @Kara-Lynn @Sarah-Narnathron @TheTessinator @cinderella_28_ @Jose-Cuellar-Ramirez @The-Inkspiller @Karthmin @Filewriter
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K.M. Small started the topic 2018 Week 14: Showing internal conflict through external conflict in the forum 7 years, 8 months ago
Morning, Ereki!
This week’s annual theme discussion is about how to show internal conflict through external conflict. Since internal conflict is so…internal, it often needs to to be reflected in a physical battle for readers to better grasp it. That’s exactly what today’s discussion is about: finding examples in books, movies, or your own…[Read more]
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K.M. Small started the topic August 2018 Accountability in the forum 7 years, 8 months ago
Good morning, Ereki! August has come ’round, so here’s our new accountability thread 😉
My goals for the week are:
– finish character arcs for my outline
– write a blog post
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@Bekks2017 @Sarah-Inkdragon @Allison-Grace @TheInviZibleMan @lydia-writes @Devastate-Lasting @WarrenLuther04 @ajaj2000 @Sageinthemeadow @cowlick @ENU @Kara-Lynn @Sarah-N…[Read more]
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K.M. Small started the topic A Guild Survey in the forum Events & Guild Maintenance 7 years, 8 months ago
Hey Ereki! (last notification for the day — I promise 😉 ).
The Guildmasters have been discussing how to improve the guilds, and to help with that, we’ve created a survey for you all to fill out. It should only take about a minute to complete, and we’d super appreciate your feedback. Thanks!…[Read more]
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K.M. Small replied to the topic July 2018 Accountability Thread in the forum Events & Guild Maintenance 7 years, 8 months ago
Time to set some new goals 😉
Mine are:
– finish my short story and get it critiqued
– work on my outline
– finish a blog post and write a newsletter
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@Bekks2017 @Sarah-Inkdragon @Allison-Grace @TheInviZibleMan @lydia-writes @Devastate-Lasting @WarrenLuther04 @ajaj2000 @Sageinthemeadow @cowlick @ENU @Kara-Lynn @Sarah-Narnathron @TheTessinato…[Read more]
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K.M. Small started the topic 2018 Week 13: The best external conflict ever in the forum 7 years, 8 months ago
Good morning, Ereki!
I’m shifting our annual theme discussions a bit by focusing on external conflict, so for today, I have a question I’d like us to answer and discuss:
What is the best external conflict you’ve ever read/watched, and what made it so fantastic?
As with most discussions, there isn’t one right answer, so feel free to share your…[Read more]
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K.M. Small started the topic 2018 Week 12: Break Week! in the forum 7 years, 8 months ago
Good morning, Ereki! This is the twelfth week of our annual theme discussion, and I’m beginning to believe that someone is stealing our time, because that went by way too fast 😛
But to celebrate getting this far, there aren’t any official assignments for this week. *throws confetti* Though if you do want to do something, you can add to the…[Read more]
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