Dakota

@emberynus-the-dragonslayer                                                                             Megyn: *in a low, tender voice to Abner* “Abner, please, be still and let us take care of this. Haflin’s right. If it’s not properly cared for, it can get infected .  . . *Clasps her fingers around the wound site and glances at @ellen-blanc I think it would be a good idea to have a  plot/storyline thread. If @jane-maree and @e-b-raulands are alright with it, then go for it.

@emberynus-the-dragonslayer   (ok, just let me know if this is acceptable to you).                                                                                                                        *Dayton, Alan and Jim all looked shocked and Jim almost jumps up to help Hector and Judah but I say not yet.*                                   …[Read more]

@andrew Thanks! And while He wills, I will.

@kari-karast

@tdprince

Blue Yonder Lullaby

@parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

I don’t often write lullabies, but I was inspired so . . . here it is. Enjoy and critique!

Blue Yonder Lullaby<…[Read more]

@k-a-grey Thanks! I love fall too! 🙂

@w-o-holmes Nope, no trick questions. Just an honest one. 🙂

@sam-m I might be doing better too . . .  upside down in a ditch is a very interesting place to to be left! Piques my interest in your story . . .  🙂

@jane-maree Okee Dokee! 🙂

@e-b-raulands (It’s okay with me that you change the POV. As for more characters . . .  maybe but not right now. I’ll have to choose which ones I want to bring in. )

Ignis tipped her hat towards Amber. “A pleasure to make your acquaintance.”

“Likewise,” Amber smiled back. “How long have you two been here?”

“M…[Read more]

@w-o-holmes Great idea! I’ll see if I can come up with anything new but do you think that this poem counts? https://storyembers.org/forums/topic/fall-poem/

@andrew Thanks! I like that line too. 🙂

*Megyn smiled brightly when Abner first walked in, then she and Jim watched the ‘exchange’ with @emberynus-the-dragonslayer, Abner and Adair with sadness and dismay. . . and at the end, exchange  half-hearted smiles*

Megyn: *leans forward and whispers in his direction* “I’m sorry, Abner.” *smiles sympathetically at him*

Would your character…[Read more]

@e-b-raulands  @ellen-blanc

“His Majesty?” Amber’s lips curled up into a smile. “I haven’t really heard McElroy called that before, but he’s certainly rich enough to have–.”

Amber stopped and furrowed her brow. Wait a minute. How could this girl not know who–but maybe someone else brought her. The invitation did say you could bring a guest. Tha…[Read more]

@w-o-holmes I really like your style. It’s vivid and powerful! Well done.

Like Emma said, there are a few places that seem a little foggy in meaning. But otherwise, excellent! 🙂

@emma-starr  Very good! I really enjoyed reading it, with it’s blend of humor and pathos. Go girl! 🙂

@libby I really like yours!! 🙂

@k-a-grey And yours was funny!

It’s been a long time since I’ve talked to you guys @libby @emma-starr.

@w-o-holmes Thanks for pointing that out! 🙂 Usually I just copy and paste the words from my original document and only take a brief check to be sure nothing is grossly misspelled.

That’s why I ask for the critique! 🙂

@jane-maree *laughs awkwardly* Right now, I haven’t even finished writing the first draft of my WIP. 🙂

Would your character rather (knowing that they are a part of a story) have read their whole story before it happens, or ONLY know how things end and have to figure everything else out as the story progresses?

Dayton: “I’d want to know. I don’t like surprises.”

Alan: *grinning* “But then you KNOW you are the slave of the author!”

Dayton:…[Read more]

@kari-karast

@tdprince

@parker  @evelyn @andrew   @libby  @jenwriter17 @nuetrobolt  @ericawordsmith @jane-maree @serenity @the-fledgling-artist   @katthewriter  @e-b-raulands   @emberynus-the-dragonslayer ( please tag some others who think might like this)

Enjoy and critique!

Just Me
Lord, it is just me again
Just a girl with her heart all broken
Up in pieces f…[Read more]