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City Seekers (Seekers of Londima)

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  • #121694
    Mischievous Thwapling
    @mischievous-thwapling

      @joelle-stone

      It sounds great to me, Kinnan!  Is her mother still from Londima, though?

      Whatever we love deeply becomes a part of us.
      ~Helen Keller

      #121712
      Joelle Stone
      @joelle-stone

        @mischievous-thwapling,

        Yep, I think so! It makes the most sense to me. 🙂

        Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
        ~AP

        #121716
        Mischievous Thwapling
        @mischievous-thwapling

          @joelle-stone

          Nice! I really like it.  Will crank out a post then as soon as possible 🙂

          Whatever we love deeply becomes a part of us.
          ~Helen Keller

          #122169
          Joelle Stone
          @joelle-stone

            @mischievous-thwapling,

            EXCELLENT post!! I might have to write something for Arundelle… 😉 And cool profile pic! I’m noticing a theme…

            Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
            ~AP

            #122171
            Mischievous Thwapling
            @mischievous-thwapling

              @joelle-stone

              *chuckles* Yeah.. Let’s just say on that trip LOTS of pics were taken that I really like (Plus, it’s winter, so it gets me into the mood)…. But kudos to you for being the first one to notice/say something! 😛 Honestly, though, the profile pic makes it so that it’s harder to see. The actual pic is much more breath-taking.

              And thank you so much!!!

              Edit: I don’t know if I was clear, but the trip I mean is the same one with the snowball-smashing of my little brother.. 😛

              Whatever we love deeply becomes a part of us.
              ~Helen Keller

              #122263
              Joelle Stone
              @joelle-stone

                @mischievous-thwapling,

                Yep, that’s what I guessed (and you SO smashed your bro). 😉

                Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
                ~AP

                #122284
                Mischievous Thwapling
                @mischievous-thwapling

                  @joelle-stone

                  Lol, that’s what I’ve been trying to tell him–but he insists he won *rolls eyes*

                  Whatever we love deeply becomes a part of us.
                  ~Helen Keller

                  #122380
                  Joelle Stone
                  @joelle-stone

                    Just going to redo this:

                    ‘Lagoron exchanged a glance with Holly. “Who is your mother?”

                    “Naldiel,” Melian replied. “At least, that’s what everyone else calls her. Everyone at home. I did once, but she got mad so I call her Mommy. And she makes really really good soup. And cookies. And she’s so pretty. And she tells the best stories! She tells me about my daddy, who died, and about my brother, who died, and about our old home, Londima, wh0-”

                    Everyone glanced wildly at one another in shock. Not only was the little girl using improper grammar, but she’d lived in Londima? What luck!

                    “Where do you live now?” Arla (Wingiby’s character, right?) demanded. “Can you show us?” ‘

                    ——————————————————————–


                    @mischievous-thwapling

                    Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
                    ~AP

                    #122386
                    Mischievous Thwapling
                    @mischievous-thwapling

                      @joelle-stone

                      That made me laugh again. XD Okay, here’s the response:

                      *****

                      Melian furrowed her brow as she shook her head. “No, I can’t show you,” she said, her frown deepening. “Mr. Avla (was that the name, and what would she call him?) said that–that they died… And that I’ll never see Mommy again!” The little girl buried her face in the male elf’s shirt and allowed another sob to bubble up from her chest.  Then she sat up again, swiped her sleeve across her nose, which she scrunched up. “You smell like horses,” she told Lagoron.

                      Melian twisted around to see the other people. “So, no,” she said, shaking her head. “I can’t take you to it because it’s gone now. All gone.” She hiccuped the last word, still wiping her tear-streaked cheeks.

                      *****

                      Tagging anyone.

                      Whatever we love deeply becomes a part of us.
                      ~Helen Keller

                      #122578
                      Joelle Stone
                      @joelle-stone

                        Melian shook her head, strawberry-blonde hair thwacking Lagoron’s chin. “No, I can’t show you,” she said, a frown in her voice. “Mr. Alva said that–that they died… And that I’ll never see Mommy again!” She twisted around and buried her face in the Lagoron’s shirt. He tensed, unsure what to do as a sob bubbled up from her chest.  Then, just as quickly, she sat upright again, wiping her nose on her sleeve, and glared at Lagoron. “You smell like horses.”

                        Lagoron stifled a laugh. He hadn’t been around very many young elves, but he was thinking he should have.

                        Melian turned back around to look at the others. “So, no,” she said, shaking her head again. “I can’t take you to it because it’s gone now. All gone.” A hiccupped maimed the last word, and she rubbed her hands across her tear-stained cheeks furiously.

                        Lagoron exchanged a glance with Holly, who was frowning in sympathy and perhaps anger. “Why would he do that?” she asked.

                        Nora rode up on Lagoron’s other side and nodded her head in Melian’s direction. Catching on, Lagoron lifted her off of Radiance’s bare back (because honestly, I would think that elves ride bareback) and handed her off to Nora, who immediately began to make soothing shushing sounds. One has heart of gold and smile strong. How true.

                        “Hang on, what’s that?” Jason asked, pulling on his horse’s reins and leaning back in the saddle. “Looks like… a fire?”

                        —————————————————–


                        @kylie-wingfeather
                        @wingiby-iggiby @jasmine @mischievous-thwapling

                        A little unsure what should happen next. Maybe a forest fire, or a campfire, or just a random fire in the middle of nowhere with a certain third poem by it or something?

                        • This reply was modified 1 month, 1 week ago by Joelle Stone.

                        Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
                        ~AP

                        #122926
                        Mischievous Thwapling
                        @mischievous-thwapling

                          @joelle-stone / @kylie-wingfeather @wingiby-iggiby @jasmine

                          Sounds good to me, Kinnan. 🙂

                          Whatever we love deeply becomes a part of us.
                          ~Helen Keller

                          #122938
                          Kylie Wingfeather
                          @kylie-wingfeather

                            Nora pulled the young elf closer to her, knowing the pain she felt. It had been two years since her parents had vanished and she still felt the the wound, still had the terrifying nightmares. She rocked the girl and hummed an elvish lullaby. Then Jason spoke.
                            “Hang on, what’s that? Looks like… a fire?
                            Nora turned Starborn’s head so that he swiveled towards Jason.
                            “A fire? In the mid—”

                            Arla (for that was who spoke) was cut off by Melian shrieking.
                            “WHAT DAT!” (what’s that)

                            The elfling had spotted Éowyn, who had clambered on to Nora’s shoulder, most likely to see who was sobbing on her human.

                            ———————————————————————————————————
                            So, what do y’all think?

                            "He was still. And he was loved."

                            ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

                            #122982
                            Kylie Wingfeather
                            @kylie-wingfeather

                              Correct me if I’m wrong, but isn’t Larawen’s mother named Naldiel?

                              -Kylie

                              "He was still. And he was loved."

                              ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

                              #123018
                              Mischievous Thwapling
                              @mischievous-thwapling

                                @kylie-wingfeather

                                Great post, Kylie! And I don’t know, actually…

                                Whatever we love deeply becomes a part of us.
                                ~Helen Keller

                                #123068
                                Kylie Wingfeather
                                @kylie-wingfeather

                                  K, so I looked it up, and Larawen’s (Lagoron’s sister for those who don’t know) mother is named Naldiel. So,  @joelle-stone, is Melian Larawen’s younger sister, or is it just coincidence?

                                  "He was still. And he was loved."

                                  ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

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