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City Seekers (Seekers of Londima)

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  • #121192
    Joelle Stone
    @joelle-stone

      @mischievous-thwapling,

      You could use OREO’s character, Jason, if you’d like. He’s a child spy (the others don’t know about that if I remember right. Wait a minute, maybe they do. *shrugs*). Or, yeah, you could act as Melian. Or, you could make up one of your own. Up to you!

      Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
      ~AP

      #121198
      Jasmine
      @jasmine

        @mischievous-thwapling if you want to make up you’re own character, Oreo’s character (Jason) could go missing until Oreo is able to join in again. Jason could pop up unexpectedly for some added drama!😛

        I am afraid. I'm glad that I am. That tells me I need to be brave. ~W.M.

        #121210
        Mischievous Thwapling
        @mischievous-thwapling

          @joelle-stone + @jasmine

          Good ideas!! (Extra drama is always needed in story >:) )  I’ll think on it… Hmmm. I think I’ll leave Jason for OREO since she wants to join when she’s thirteen, but I have to consider the Melian thing or making one up.  Perhaps I will end up creating a character, since I doubt Melian would be in for the entire story (unless I’m missing something), though I do like the idea of acting as her, even if it’s only for a little bit.

          Sorry! Totally thought aloud there!

          Kindness is the language which the deaf can hear and the blind can see.
          ~Mark Twain

          #121215
          Mischievous Thwapling
          @mischievous-thwapling

            Ok, I decided to act as Melian at least for a little bit.  Here’s her personality, and I’m pretty sure they haven’t old her their names yet, right?

            Personality: ESTP

            Strengths: Bold; rational and practical; original; perceptive; direct; sociable; can easily act one way to make someone think she feels that way, even if she doesn’t; energetic

            Weaknesses: Insensitive; impatient; risk-prone; unstructured; may miss the bigger picture; defiant; sassy (I s’pose sassy is a weakness. I just didn’t really know where to put it XD)

            Fears: Is deathly afraid of spiders since her older brother once put a gigantic tarantula on her face while she was sleeping; secretly afraid of the dark, too (I mean, isn’t she a little girl? :P); and now, I suppose hhborgens should be on the fear list, too.

            Age: Dunno.. What? Eight? Nine? Ten? Seven? What do we mean by little girl?

            Appearance: Ok, I dunno if you already described her, but for some reason I have a really clear picture of this sassy, slightly annoying, strawberry blonde. AKA Melian. So, if it’s my choice, I would say she looks like: Strawberry blonde hair; large blue eyes; pale; sharp nose; and of course pointy ears along with the whole elvish-looking bundle.

            Do elves in this world have a certain look? I didn’t think so, but don’t be afraid to come across as rude if they do and you tell me so 😉

            Ummm, am I forgetting something?

            “She’s an elf!” the male elf holding her exclaimed.  His eyebrows shot so high up on his forehead that Melian wondered if they would shoot off his face.

            “Of course I am,” she snorted, trying to sound bold and confident, but failing miserably.  Instead, Melian’s voice still shook a bit.  She wished that it wasn’t so obvious she had been crying.  “Who are you guys?”

            That was short! Just didn’t know quite what to write.

            Kindness is the language which the deaf can hear and the blind can see.
            ~Mark Twain

            #121233
            Jasmine
            @jasmine

              Age: Dunno.. What? Eight? Nine? Ten? Seven? What do we mean by little girl?

              Heh heh, um … I think she was four. But your welcome (If it’s ok with everyone else) to switch her age! I wouldn’t like it my character was a toddler so I understand if you want to make her older.😉

               

               

              “We” said Holly as she took the young elf out of lagorons arms and into her own lap “are some nice people who are going to help you.” Holly tucked a strand of the girls hair behind her ear ” my name is Holly. what is yours?”

              I am afraid. I'm glad that I am. That tells me I need to be brave. ~W.M.

              #121353
              Mischievous Thwapling
              @mischievous-thwapling

                @jasmine

                Oops XD Lol. What does everybody else think about that, then?

                Melian stared up at Holly with furrowed brows, thinking.  “I’m Melian,” she said slowly.  “You can help me, then?  Help find Mommy?  And what are their names?”  she added, pointing at the rest of the group.  “And can I pet your horsey?” she asked as she warmed up to the group.  “What’s its name?  And what’s that horsey’s name?” Melian chattered.  She jabbed her small finger at the male elf’s steed.

                 

                You don’t have to respond to all her questions. I just figured that a little girl (whatever age we decide) would ask stuff like that (especially the horse questions XD)

                 

                Kindness is the language which the deaf can hear and the blind can see.
                ~Mark Twain

                #121359
                Joelle Stone
                @joelle-stone

                  @jasmine,

                  That’s what I thought, except I was thinking more around 6 (so she can talk coherently, lol).


                  @mischievous-thwapling
                  : Good job! I can tell this is going to be fun. 😉 And nice quote (I’m learning ASL so it’s even cooler). 🙂

                   

                  Lagoron handed the little girl over to Holly as Radiance began to get skittish. The little elf chattered with pleasure, obviously not too scared of her new companions.

                  “You can help me, then? Help me find Mommy? And what are their names? And can I pet your horsey? What’s its name? And what’s that horsey’s name?”

                  Holly laughed, and Lagoron did too. “This is Lander,” the minstrel said. “And yes, you can pet him. That other horse is Radiance. She’s Lagoron’s – the other elf’s- sister’s horse. That is Jason, and this is Arla. Who are you?”

                  The girl smiled so wide that her rosy cheeks bunched up under her sparkling blue eyes. She quickly stopped, though, as her bruised face protested. “Melian,” she replied. “Where’s Mommy?”

                  Lagoron exchanged a glance with Holly. “Who is your mother?”

                  “Naldiel,” Melian replied. “At least, that’s what everyone else calls her. Everyone at home. I did once, but she got mad so I call her Mommy. And she makes really really good soup. And cookies. And she’s so pretty. And she tells the best stories! She tells me about my daddy, who died, and about my brother, who died, and about our old home, Londima, wh0-”

                  Everyone glanced wildly at one another in shock. Not only was the little girl using improper grammar, but she’d lived in Londima? What luck!

                  “Where do you live now?” Arla demanded. “Can you show us?”

                  Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
                  ~AP

                  #121375
                  Kylie Wingfeather
                  @kylie-wingfeather

                    Hi everyone!

                    *Trying to control herself from squealing but completely failing*

                    My family got a PUPPY!!!!!!!!

                    His name (most likely to be changed; it’s the name the rescue gave him.) is Hendrix and he is a 8-9 week old pit-bull-mix puppy. He is the CUTEST thing!

                    "He was still. And he was loved."

                    ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

                    #121376
                    Kylie Wingfeather
                    @kylie-wingfeather

                      On a different topic…

                      I was looking at the copy of this story that my mom made and I came across this:

                      …little orphaned girl who escaped from her evil guardian (Alva???), and just happened to be running by and got in the way of a kick from the Hhborgen that was aimed at one of the Five. They end up taking her along when they discover that there is no nearby village where she can stay.

                      So, was she living with her mother or her guardian? I did have the idea that she was living with her mother up until recently before Mr. Not-Nice-Guardian-Who-Isn’t-Really-Melian’s-Guardian showed up, knocked her unconscious, and when she woke back up at his house, he told her that the village had been destroyed (it hadn’t.) and she was going to live with him from now on.


                      @joelle-stone

                      My character’s name is Nora.

                      "He was still. And he was loved."

                      ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

                      #121413
                      Kylie Wingfeather
                      @kylie-wingfeather

                        @mischievious-thwapling

                        They do know that Jason is a spy.

                        "He was still. And he was loved."

                        ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

                        #121414
                        Kylie Wingfeather
                        @kylie-wingfeather

                          Hmmm. Didn’t work.


                          @mischievous-thwapling

                          "He was still. And he was loved."

                          ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

                          #121415
                          Kylie Wingfeather
                          @kylie-wingfeather

                            Yes! *Punches the air in delight*

                            "He was still. And he was loved."

                            ~The Warden and the Wolf King, The Maker

                            #121421
                            Joelle Stone
                            @joelle-stone

                              Ok… so why didn’t it post…


                              @kylie-wingfeather
                              ,

                              A puppy?!? COOL! What kind? What gender? What personality? How much cuteness?

                              And Nora. Duh. *facepalm* Sorry!

                              On another note, I think your idea for what happens to Melian is a good idea, and more complicated (but not yet confusing), so of course better (in my opinion). 😉

                              Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
                              ~AP

                              #121593
                              Mischievous Thwapling
                              @mischievous-thwapling

                                @kylie-wingfeather

                                A PUPPY!!!!!!!! AWESOME!! I second all of Kinnan’s questions.

                                And gotcha on the spy thing.

                                Everyone:
                                So are we doing the original story for Melian then? Cause I really like it and think it’s a good idea!

                                Kindness is the language which the deaf can hear and the blind can see.
                                ~Mark Twain

                                #121686
                                Joelle Stone
                                @joelle-stone

                                  I think we’re doing Kylie’s idea:

                                  I did have the idea that she was living with her mother up until recently before Mr. Not-Nice-Guardian-Who-Isn’t-Really-Melian’s-Guardian showed up, knocked her unconscious, and when she woke back up at his house, he told her that the village had been destroyed (it hadn’t.) and she was going to live with him from now on.

                                  How does that sound to you, Thwapling?

                                  ——————————


                                  @mischievous-thwapling

                                  Making something beautiful in a broken world can be harrowing work. And it can’t be done alone.
                                  ~AP

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